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Jack

Dec. 26, 2021

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Practice trying to be concise in writing.

Why didn't I go to senior high school and university?

When I graduated from junior high school, the education situation was this case; after the students took the senior high school entrance exam, they had two different choices.

If they got a really good grade in the exam, they could go to provincial key high schools or technical secondary schools.

If they chose to go to technical secondary schools, it meant they automatically got a job assigned by the government after three years of studying in technical secondary schools.

If they chose to go to high school, they had to take the university entrance exam after three years of studying in high schools, and if they passed the exam, it meant that they could get a job assigned by the government when they graduated from university, but if they couldn't pass the exam, they had to return to their villages to be farmers for their entire life.

The situation of teenagers born and raised in the countryside back then was that they could only get jobs by having very good grades in the exam, otherwise, they had to go home to be farmers for their entire life.

So for those teenagers, as long as they got good grades in the high school entrance exam, the first choice was to go to technical secondary schools because of what I introduced before.

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Why didn't I go to senior high school and university?

When I graduated from junior high school, here is how the education situation was this case; after the students tookystem worked: After taking the senior high school entrance exam, they had two differentstudents had two choices.

If they got a really good grade idid very well on the exam, they could go to provincial key high schools or technical secondary schools.

do well/get a good grade ON an exam, not in an exam

If they chose to go to technical secondary schools, it meant they automatically got a job assigned by the government after three years of studying in technical secondary schoolsgovernment-assigned job after three years of studying.

What you wrote was correct- I'm just editing for concision here.

If they chose to gowent to high school, they had to take the university entrance exam after three years of studying in high schools, and i. If they passed the exam, it meant that they could get a job assigned by the government when theygovernment-assigned job assigned after graduateding from university, but if they couldn't pass the exam, they had to return to their villages to be farmers for their ent rest of theire lifeves.

The situation of teenagers born and raised in the countryside back then was that they could only get jobs by having very good grades in the exam, o. Otherwise, they had to go home to be farmers for their entire life.

So for those teenagers, as long as they got good grades ion the high school entrance exam, the first choice was to go to technical secondary schools because of what I introduced beforefor the reasons I explained.

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Aviva

Dec. 26, 2021

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I think working on concision is a really good idea for you because your English is great and if you can write concisely, it will sound much more natural. Hope my corrections helped!

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Jack

Dec. 27, 2021

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Thank you very much. I always appreciate your corrections.

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Jack

Dec. 27, 2021

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If they got a really good grade idid very well on the exam, they could go to provincial key high schools or technical secondary schools.

Back then, we had two kinds of high schools, one was ordinary high schools, another was provincial key high schools.

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Practice trying to be concise in writing.


Why didn't I go to senior high school and university?


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When I graduated from junior high school, the education situation was this case; after the students took the senior high school entrance exam, they had two different choices.


When I graduated from junior high school, here is how the education situation was this case; after the students tookystem worked: After taking the senior high school entrance exam, they had two differentstudents had two choices.

If they got a really good grade in the exam, they could go to provincial key high schools or technical secondary schools.


If they got a really good grade idid very well on the exam, they could go to provincial key high schools or technical secondary schools.

do well/get a good grade ON an exam, not in an exam

If they chose to go to technical secondary schools, it meant they automatically got a job assigned by the government after three years of studying in technical secondary schools.


If they chose to go to technical secondary schools, it meant they automatically got a job assigned by the government after three years of studying in technical secondary schoolsgovernment-assigned job after three years of studying.

What you wrote was correct- I'm just editing for concision here.

If they chose to go to high school, they had to take the university entrance exam after three years of studying in high schools, and if they passed the exam, it meant that they could get a job assigned by the government when they graduated from university, but if they couldn't pass the exam, they had to return to their villages to be farmers for their entire life.


If they chose to gowent to high school, they had to take the university entrance exam after three years of studying in high schools, and i. If they passed the exam, it meant that they could get a job assigned by the government when theygovernment-assigned job assigned after graduateding from university, but if they couldn't pass the exam, they had to return to their villages to be farmers for their ent rest of theire lifeves.

The situation of teenagers born and raised in the countryside back then was that they could only get jobs by having very good grades in the exam, otherwise, they had to go home to be farmers for their entire life.


The situation of teenagers born and raised in the countryside back then was that they could only get jobs by having very good grades in the exam, o. Otherwise, they had to go home to be farmers for their entire life.

So for those teenagers, as long as they got good grades in the high school entrance exam, the first choice was to go to technical secondary schools because of what I introduced before.


So for those teenagers, as long as they got good grades ion the high school entrance exam, the first choice was to go to technical secondary schools because of what I introduced beforefor the reasons I explained.

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