Dec. 25, 2020
It is already winter and it is getting cold and cold. This reminds me of those old days when I was a child. At that time, the weather was definitely colder than it is now. During the winter, in the countryside, children’s faces and hands usually get cracked. So every family prepared two kinds of skin care products, one was Balsam and another one was clam oil. In my opinion, balsam didn’t have much effect on protecting skin. It was just like a sort of perfume. The clam oil was indeed a kind of skin care product. When your face or hand cracked, put some clam oil on them, then maybe two or three days later, the skin of your face or hands would be completely cured. In my case, I rarely used balsam because I didn’t think it had any function to protect the skin. It only has some fragrance. But the clam oil was very good at protecting the skin. However, these two kinds of skin protecting products are hard to find nowadays, but decades ago, they were the only two kinds of skin care products in rural areas.
It is already winter and it is getting colder and colder.
This reminds me of thosee good old days when I was a child.
"the good old days" is what I'm used to hearing
At that time, the weather was definitely colder than it is now.
During the winter, in the countryside, the skin on children’s faces and hands usually getbegins to cracked.
We need to emphasize it's the skin (not the faces and hands themselves) that are cracking, and "get cracked" is correct but childish, and we usually say "begins to crack".
So every family prepared two kinds of skin care products, one was Bbalsam and another one was clam oil.
In my opinion, balsam didoesn’t have much effect on protecting skin.
While it's grammatical to write "didn't", it's past tense, so it implies your opinion has changed, and now you feel balsam has an effect.
It was just like a sort of perfume.
The clam oil was indeed a kind of skin care product.
When your face or hand cracked,s, you put some clam oil on them, then maybe two or three days later, the skin of your face or hands would be completely cured.
In my case, I rarely used balsam because I didon’t think it had any function toactually protects the skin.
I don't think "...I didn’t think it had any function to protect the skin" is correct. It could be "...I don't think it functions as a skin protector" but that's too formal.
It only has some fragrance.
But the clam oil wais very good at protecting the skin.
However, these two kinds of skin -protectiong products are hard to find nowadays, but decades ago, they were the only two kinds of skin care products available in rural areas.
I suggest using a compound adjective: skin-protection products (although I don't think what you wrote is incorrect). The logic seems clearer to me with the added word "available".
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I'd avoid these multiple short sentences, and merge them into one another. E.g. "It was just like a sort of perfume. The clam oil was indeed a kind of skin care product." could be "It was just like a sort of perfume, whereas the clam oil was indeed a kind of skin care product." This reads more naturally.
Journal 25/12/20
It is already winter and it is getting cold and cold.
This reminds me of those old days when I was a child.
At that time, the weather was definitely colder than it is now.
During the winter, in the countryside, children’s faces and hands usually geot cracked.
Technically, what you wrote is correct, but because you were talking about the past, and continue talking about the past in the next sentence, it seems to me this sentence would be more natural if it were also in the past.
So every family prepared two kinds of skin care products, o. One was Balsam and an, the other one was clam oil.
Edited to make it sound natural, but yours is technically correct.
In my opinion, balsam didn’t have much effect on protecting skin.
It was just like a sort of perfume.
The clam oil was indeed a kind of skin care product.
When your face or hands cracked, if you put some clam oil on them, theit, in maybe two or three days later, the skin of your face or hands would be completely cured.
Or:
"When your face and hands cracked, if you put some clam oil on them..."
In my case, I rarely used balsam because I didn’t think it had any function to protecteffect on the skin.
Your sentence is grammatically correct. Mine is more natural.
It's only has some fragrancet.
But the clam oil was very good at protecting the skin.
However, these two kinds of skin -protecting products are hard to find nowadays, but decades ago, they were the only two kinds of skin care products available in rural areas.
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Quite good writing, and also interesting.
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At that time, the weather was definitely colder than it is now. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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During the winter, in the countryside, children’s faces and hands usually get cracked. During the winter, in the countryside, children’s faces and hands usually g Technically, what you wrote is correct, but because you were talking about the past, and continue talking about the past in the next sentence, it seems to me this sentence would be more natural if it were also in the past. During the winter, in the countryside, the skin on children’s faces and hands usually We need to emphasize it's the skin (not the faces and hands themselves) that are cracking, and "get cracked" is correct but childish, and we usually say "begins to crack". |
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So every family prepared two kinds of skin care products, one was Balsam and another one was clam oil. So every family prepared two kinds of skin care products Edited to make it sound natural, but yours is technically correct. So every family prepared two kinds of skin care products, one was |
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In my opinion, balsam didn’t have much effect on protecting skin. This sentence has been marked as perfect! In my opinion, balsam d While it's grammatical to write "didn't", it's past tense, so it implies your opinion has changed, and now you feel balsam has an effect. |
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The clam oil was indeed a kind of skin care product. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When your face or hand cracked, put some clam oil on them, then maybe two or three days later, the skin of your face or hands would be completely cured. When your face or hands cracked, if you put some clam oil on Or: "When your face and hands cracked, if you put some clam oil on them..." When your face or hand crack |
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In my case, I rarely used balsam because I didn’t think it had any function to protect the skin. In my case, I rarely used balsam because I didn’t think it had any Your sentence is grammatically correct. Mine is more natural. In my case, I rarely used balsam because I d I don't think "...I didn’t think it had any function to protect the skin" is correct. It could be "...I don't think it functions as a skin protector" but that's too formal. |
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But the clam oil was very good at protecting the skin. This sentence has been marked as perfect! But the clam oil |
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However, these two kinds of skin protecting products are hard to find nowadays, but decades ago, they were the only two kinds of skin care products in rural areas. However, these two kinds of skin However, these two kinds of skin I suggest using a compound adjective: skin-protection products (although I don't think what you wrote is incorrect). The logic seems clearer to me with the added word "available". |
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