Dec. 24, 2020
Journal 25/12/20
I have just finished watching the movie < BaBan> and my eyes are swollen from crying. At the end of the movie, I found that Xie Jinyuan was my fellow villager. They were both national heroes. overseas compatriots are also proud of them.
Journal 25/12/20
I have just finished watching the movie < BaBan> and my eyes are swollen from crying.
At the end of the movie, I found out that Xie Jinyuan was my fellow villager.
They were bothHe was a national heroes.
Did you forget to mention another person in the sentences before this? You've only mentioned Xie Jinyuan so "They were both national heroes" is confusing because the reader has only read about one person so far.
oOverseas compatriots are also proud of them.
This doesn't sound very natural to me because we don't use the phrase "overseas compatriots". If you can explain in more detail what you mean by this phrase maybe I can help. I would remove the sentence because the term "national hero" applies to Chinese not living in China as well, therefore it is redundant.
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Good job! Keep at it!
I have just finished watching the movie < BaBan> and my eyes are swollen from crying.
Swollen works, but we often say puffy when talking about the eyes.
At the end of the movie, I found that Xie Jinyuan was my fellow villager.
They were both national heroes.
oOverseas compatriots are also proud of them.
Dec. 25, 2020
Puffy. I learned a new word again. Thank you very much.
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Journal 25/12/20 This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have just finished watching the movie < BaBan> and my eyes are swollen from crying. I have just finished watching the movie < BaBan> and my eyes are swollen from crying. Swollen works, but we often say puffy when talking about the eyes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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At the end of the movie, I found that Xie Jinyuan was my fellow villager. This sentence has been marked as perfect! At the end of the movie, I found out that Xie Jinyuan was my fellow villager. |
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They were both national heroes. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
Did you forget to mention another person in the sentences before this? You've only mentioned Xie Jinyuan so "They were both national heroes" is confusing because the reader has only read about one person so far. |
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overseas compatriots are also proud of them.
This doesn't sound very natural to me because we don't use the phrase "overseas compatriots". If you can explain in more detail what you mean by this phrase maybe I can help. I would remove the sentence because the term "national hero" applies to Chinese not living in China as well, therefore it is redundant. |
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