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Jack

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Journal 25/12/20

Because my job has been adjusted, some of my former colleagues are theoretically not my colleagues anymore. So I never dare to want them to do something for me. This summer when I attended the building civilization city activity, some former colleagues worked with me at the same place again. One day I sent a sample form to our WeChat group for some reason, then the former colleague sent me a private message reminding me if I was making a mistake. Yesterday, a former colleague brought my certificate to me from a community that was far away from my office. I didn't dare to expect these things to happen since l left that department. It is because I am not a confident man. Furthermore, they don't have any obligation to do this in any circumstances. They don't have any mistakes even if they are not doing so. I am very touched when they do that. Although we are not colleagues now, I still hope they work hard, take care, have a happy family and a bright future. Again, thank them for their kindness and enthusiasm.

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Journal 25/12/20

So I never dare to wantask them to do something for mefor favors.

This summer when I attended the building civilization city activity, some former colleagues worked with me at the same place again.

or "I was reunited with some former colleagues"

One day I sent a sample form to our WeChat group for some reason, thenand the former colleague sent me a private message remindasking me if I was making a mistake.

asking me if: unclear if you have made a mistake
reminding me that: telling you that you have made a mistake

Yesterday, a former colleague brought my certificate to me from a community that was far away from my office.

I didn't dare to expect these things to happen since l left that department.

It is because I am not a confident man.

Furthermore, they don't have any obligation to do this in any circumstances.

Deleted for redundancy

They don't have any mistakes even if they are not doing so.

I'm not sure I understand this

I am very touched when they do that.

Although we are not colleagues now, I still hope they work hard, take care, have a happy family and a bright future.

Again, thank themI am thankful for their kindness and enthusiasm.

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Great job! Sounds like you had nice colleagues.

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Jack

Dec. 15, 2020

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They don't have any mistakes even if they are not doing so.

I mean, even though they don't do these for me, they should not be blamed. because they do this just because they are kind, further more, this is not their obligations.

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Jack

Dec. 15, 2020

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Thank you for your corrections. Thank you very much.

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Jack

Dec. 15, 2020

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Again, thank themI am thankful for their kindness and enthusiasm.

Could you please tell me why I can’t use “thank them” here.

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fabledlamb

Dec. 15, 2020

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"I thank them" could be used if telling a story in the present tense but in my experience I haven't come across people speaking that way. In this essay it gives the effect of sounding formal/not natural

You could say "I thanked them" if you told them directly or "I am thankful" if you felt gratitude but didn't tell them.

I hope this helps!

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Jack

Dec. 15, 2020

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Thank you very much.

Journal 25/12/20


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Because my job has been adjusted, some of my former colleagues are theoretically not my colleagues anymore.


So I never dare to want them to do something for me.


So I never dare to wantask them to do something for mefor favors.

This summer when I attended the building civilization city activity, some former colleagues worked with me at the same place again.


This summer when I attended the building civilization city activity, some former colleagues worked with me at the same place again.

or "I was reunited with some former colleagues"

One day I sent a sample form to our WeChat group for some reason, then the former colleague sent me a private message reminding me if I was making a mistake.


One day I sent a sample form to our WeChat group for some reason, thenand the former colleague sent me a private message remindasking me if I was making a mistake.

asking me if: unclear if you have made a mistake reminding me that: telling you that you have made a mistake

Yesterday, a former colleague brought my certificate to me from a community that was far away from my office.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I didn't dare to expect these things to happen since l left that department.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It is because I am not a confident man.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Furthermore, they don't have any obligation to do this in any circumstances.


Furthermore, they don't have any obligation to do this in any circumstances.

Deleted for redundancy

They don't have any mistakes even if they are not doing so.


They don't have any mistakes even if they are not doing so.

I'm not sure I understand this

I am very touched when they do that.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Although we are not colleagues now, I still hope they work hard, take care, have a happy family and a bright future.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Again, thank them for their kindness and enthusiasm.


Again, thank themI am thankful for their kindness and enthusiasm.

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