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Jack

Aug. 23, 2021

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It's ok, I know you must be busy, but I have been waiting for you. Everything is fine for me now.
Your description reminds me of the late autumn morning, the fields and the rivers will be covered with a thin layer of mist, like yarn.
I went to a farm as an intern at the age of seventeen. Every morning I saw the thin mist covering the field and the morning glory on the fence. I remember it was in early October in the Gregorian calendar.
Yeah, time flies! In the blink of an eye, summer has passed, and I have to cover myself with a quilt to sleep at night. In the morning, there are a lot of fallen ginkgo leaves on the roads, and you can smell its bitter breath.
It's been raining here these days, and the temperature has dropped to more than twenty degrees. It's much cooler than before.
I shot a video about the fallen leaves on the road and I will send it to you. I will also send you a few photos I once shot at the Shangri-La Pudacuo National Park a decade ago, because I think they have the similar scenery to the pictures you sent me. I hope you like them.

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It's ok, I know you must be busy, but I ha've been waiting forto hear from you.

"waiting to hear from" someone means you are waiting for some communication. You would say "waiting for you" if you were waiting for them physically, like at a restaurant or something.

EverythI'm doing is fine for me now.

Your original sentence doesn't sound natural

Your description reminds me of the late autumn morning, when the fields and the rivers will bare covered with a thin layer of mist, like yarn.

"Yarn" doesn't really fit here, at least for me it doesn't remind me of mist.

I went to a farm as an intern at the age ofhad a job on a farm when I was seventeen.

"Intern" or "internship" is usually more used for professional environments, like if you worked at an office for a summer. For this kind of thing (if I understand correctly), job is probably better.

Every morning I saw the thin mist covering the field and the morning glory on the fence.

I remember it was in early October in the Gregorian calendar.

"in the Gregorian calendar" is unnecessary

Yeah, time flies!

In the blink of an eye, summer has passed, and I have to cover myself with a quilt to sleep at night.

In the mornings, there are a lot of fallen ginkgo leaves on the roads, and you can smell itstheir bitter breathodor.

"their" instead of "its" because there are multiple ginkgo leaves, not just one.

It's been raining here these daysrecently, and the temperature has dropped toby more than twenty degrees.

It's much cooler than before.

I shot a video aboutof the fallen leaves on the road and I will send it to you.

I will also send you a few photos I once shot at the Shangri-La Pudacuo National Park a decade ago, because I think they have the similar scenery to the pictures you sent me.

I hope you like them.

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Good job in general! Just a few style improvements to make.

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Jack

Aug. 27, 2021

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I went to a farm as an intern at the age ofhad a job on a farm when I was seventeen.

I was studying in a professional secondary school at the age of seventeen. That semester, we had machine ploughing practice at a farm for a month. What I was trying to say is 我去了一个农场实习, but I didn’t know how to say 实习 in English, so I checked it on a translator and found it was “intern”.

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Jack

Aug. 27, 2021

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In the mornings, there are a lot of fallen ginkgo leaves on the roads, and you can smell itstheir bitter breathodor.

What I was trying to say is: 田野和河面上会笼罩着一层雾,像纱一样。

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Jack

Aug. 27, 2021

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Thank you very much.

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It's ok, I know you must be busy, but I have been waiting for you.


It's ok, I know you must be busy, but I ha've been waiting forto hear from you.

"waiting to hear from" someone means you are waiting for some communication. You would say "waiting for you" if you were waiting for them physically, like at a restaurant or something.

Everything is fine for me now.


EverythI'm doing is fine for me now.

Your original sentence doesn't sound natural

Your description reminds me of the late autumn morning, the fields and the rivers will be covered with a thin layer of mist, like yarn.


Your description reminds me of the late autumn morning, when the fields and the rivers will bare covered with a thin layer of mist, like yarn.

"Yarn" doesn't really fit here, at least for me it doesn't remind me of mist.

I went to a farm as an intern at the age of seventeen.


I went to a farm as an intern at the age ofhad a job on a farm when I was seventeen.

"Intern" or "internship" is usually more used for professional environments, like if you worked at an office for a summer. For this kind of thing (if I understand correctly), job is probably better.

Every morning I saw the thin mist covering the field and the morning glory on the fence.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I remember it was in early October in the Gregorian calendar.


I remember it was in early October in the Gregorian calendar.

"in the Gregorian calendar" is unnecessary

Yeah, time flies!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In the blink of an eye, summer has passed, and I have to cover myself with a quilt to sleep at night.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In the morning, there are a lot of fallen ginkgo leaves on the roads, and you can smell its bitter breath.


In the mornings, there are a lot of fallen ginkgo leaves on the roads, and you can smell itstheir bitter breathodor.

"their" instead of "its" because there are multiple ginkgo leaves, not just one.

It's been raining here these days, and the temperature has dropped to more than twenty degrees.


It's been raining here these daysrecently, and the temperature has dropped toby more than twenty degrees.

It's much cooler than before.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I shot a video about the fallen leaves on the road and I will send it to you.


I shot a video aboutof the fallen leaves on the road and I will send it to you.

I will also send you a few photos I once shot at the Shangri-La Pudacuo National Park a decade ago, because I think they have the similar scenery to the pictures you sent me.


I will also send you a few photos I once shot at the Shangri-La Pudacuo National Park a decade ago, because I think they have the similar scenery to the pictures you sent me.

I hope you like them.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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