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Jack

July 19, 2021

I am very worried about the situation around where you live and I hope everything will be good for you.
With the development of scientific and advanced equipment, I think people living in your areas will be all safe.
The farmland is very far away from my hometown. It is in another city called Weifang, in Shandong Province, and the whole journey is more than 700 kilometers.
A couple of days ago, I went to Zhejiang University (in Hangzhou, Zhejiang Province) for a training meeting for a week. I listened to some professors' speeches and visited some places and I recorded them. I will send them to you and give each episode a brief introduction. I hope you enjoy them.

This is Hangzhou West Lake. It is a famous spot in China, and I guess many foreigners might know it. Because I have lessons in the day, I can only go there at night. The big regret is that I am not able to send its daytime views to you.

This is the night view from the shore of Qiantang River. You may not know this river, but you probably know the Qiantang Tide because it is also famous as a landscape in China. There are many citizens there for sightseeing, but the weather in Hangzhou is really hot and humid. It made me very uncomfortable.

This is the night view from the shore of Jinghang Grand Canal. This river is one of the famous historic sites in China. And it's already more than 2500 years since its creation.

This is the view inside Zhejiang University. This university is rated in third place in China, and is closely after Tsinghua and Peking universities.

This village is called Xiao Gucheng village. President Xi Jinping once visited there, and now it's a model of new countryside construction. As you can see, it's really clean and tidy with a beautiful appearance.

This is Yu village in Anji county, Zhejiang Province. When Xi Jinping was appointed secretary of the Zhejiang Provincial Party Committee, he visited this village on March 30th, 2020. It was when he put forward the famous "Two Mountain" theory. This village is also very beautiful now.

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tillefoan

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I am very worried about the situation around where you live and I hope everything will be good for you.

With the development of scientific and advanced equipment, I think people living in your areas will be all safe.

The farmland is very far away from my hometown.

It is in another city called Weifang, in Shandong Province, and the whole journey is more than 700 kilometers long.

"long" is a little redundant but is used in natural speech anyways, following the distance between two places.

A couple of days ago, I went to Zhejiang University (in Hangzhou, Zhejiang Province) for a training meeting for a week.

I listened to some professors' speeches and visited some places and I recorded them.

I will send them to you and give each episode a brief introduction.

I hope you enjoy them.

This is Hangzhou West Lake.

It is a famous spot in China, and I guess many foreigners might know it.

Because I have lessons in the day, I can only go there at night.

The big regret is that I am not able to send its daytime views to you.

This is the night view from the shore of Qiantang River.

You may not know this river, but you probably know the Qiantang Tide because it is a~~lso~~ famous ~~as a landscape~~landmark in China.

You didn't provide a reason earlier as to why the Qiantang Tide is famous, so "also" is unneeded

There are many citizens there for sightseeing, but the weather in Hangzhou is really hot and humid.

It made me very uncomfortable.

This is the night view from the shore of Jinghang Grand Canal.

This river is one of the famous historic sites in China.

And it's already been more than 2500 years since its creation.

Original sentence is correct but a bit unnatural.

This is the view inside Zhejiang University.

This university is rated in third place in China, ~~and is closely after~~narrowly overtaken by Tsinghua and Peking universities.

"narrowly" fits better within the context, and "overtaken" makes it clear that Tsinghua and Peking are rated better than Zhejiang uni.

This village is called Xiao Gucheng village.

President Xi Jinping once visited there, and now it's a model of new countryside construction.

As you can see, it's really clean and tidy with a beautiful appearance.

This is Yu village in Anji county, Zhejiang Province.

When Xi Jinping was appointed secretary of the Zhejiang Provincial Party Committee, he visited this village on March 30th, 2020.

It was when he put forward the famous "Two Mountain" theory.

This village is also very beautiful now.

Jack

July 20, 2021

Kilometers long. Famous landmark. Narrowly overtaken by. Thank you very much for those corrections.

tillefoan

July 21, 2021

You're welcome.

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