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This is a real story. It was in the late 80 s, to supplement my family's livelihood. I opened a clothing store at the East People's Road right under Fuyang Restaurant. Across the road, there was a street food stall called 田三卷馍 (tian-san-juan-mo). It was very simple, like, just one person, one small stall, then everything was done. This kind of street food could almost be found on every street in my city back then and no people thought it could go big. It seemed like I also ate it several times and I didn't think it was something special. The clothing store seemed like it had only opened for two or three years, then I left there. But the 田三卷馍 gets bigger and bigger. It has already become a famous local chain restaurant brand and now there are about fifteen branches in my city. Of course, the foods they sell now are not only 卷馍, they sell lots of food and all are delicious. The owner, 田三, is a farmer from the rural area of the city. Back then, he was only in his twenties and at the very beginning of his business, he sold it from street to street with a shoulder pole. His business can develop on such a large scale today, I have to admit that he is a business genius.

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This is a real story.

This is correct, but it's more natural to say "this is a true story" (if that's what you mean).

It was in the late 80 s,s to supplement my family's livelihood.

I opened a clothing store at theon East People's Road right under Fuyang Restaurant.

Across the road, there was a street food stall called 田三卷馍 (tian-san-juan-mo).

It was very simple, like, just one person, one small stall, then everythingand that was doneit.

People say "like" as a filler word in everyday speech, but it's best to avoid it in writing unless you're actively trying to sound casual.

This kind of street food could almost be found on every street in my city back then, and no peoplebody thought it could go big[be expanded into a full-blown restaurant?].

Not 100% sure what you mean here with the last part.

It seemed like I also ate it several times, and I didn't think it was someanything special.

The clothing store seemed like it had only opened for two or three years, then I left there.

But the 田三卷馍 getskeeps getting bigger and bigger.

It has already become a famous local chain restaurant brand, and now there are about fifteen branches in my city.

Of course, the foods they sell now are not only 卷馍, t. They sell lots of food and all are deliciousother delicious food, too.

The owner, 田三, is a farmer from the rural area of the city.

Rural is the opposite of city, so you can't really have a rural area of a city...

Back then, he was only in his twenties and at the very beginning of his business, he sold it from street tofood on the street with a shoulder pole.

His business canhas developed on such a large scale today, that I have to admit that he is a business genius.

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July 5, 2021

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Thank you very much.

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This is a real story.


This is a real story.

This is correct, but it's more natural to say "this is a true story" (if that's what you mean).

It was in the late 80 s, to supplement my family's livelihood.


It was in the late 80 s,s to supplement my family's livelihood.

I opened a clothing store at the East People's Road right under Fuyang Restaurant.


I opened a clothing store at theon East People's Road right under Fuyang Restaurant.

Across the road, there was a street food stall called 田三卷馍 (tian-san-juan-mo).


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It was very simple, like, just one person, one small stall, then everything was done.


It was very simple, like, just one person, one small stall, then everythingand that was doneit.

People say "like" as a filler word in everyday speech, but it's best to avoid it in writing unless you're actively trying to sound casual.

This kind of street food could almost be found on every street in my city back then and no people thought it could go big.


This kind of street food could almost be found on every street in my city back then, and no peoplebody thought it could go big[be expanded into a full-blown restaurant?].

Not 100% sure what you mean here with the last part.

It seemed like I also ate it several times and I didn't think it was something special.


It seemed like I also ate it several times, and I didn't think it was someanything special.

The clothing store seemed like it had only opened for two or three years, then I left there.


The clothing store seemed like it had only opened for two or three years, then I left there.

But the 田三卷馍 gets bigger and bigger.


But the 田三卷馍 getskeeps getting bigger and bigger.

It has already become a famous local chain restaurant brand and now there are about fifteen branches in my city.


It has already become a famous local chain restaurant brand, and now there are about fifteen branches in my city.

Of course, the foods they sell now are not only 卷馍, they sell lots of food and all are delicious.


Of course, the foods they sell now are not only 卷馍, t. They sell lots of food and all are deliciousother delicious food, too.

The owner, 田三, is a farmer from the rural area of the city.


The owner, 田三, is a farmer from the rural area of the city.

Rural is the opposite of city, so you can't really have a rural area of a city...

Back then, he was only in his twenties and at the very beginning of his business, he sold it from street to street with a shoulder pole.


Back then, he was only in his twenties and at the very beginning of his business, he sold it from street tofood on the street with a shoulder pole.

His business can develop on such a large scale today, I have to admit that he is a business genius.


His business canhas developed on such a large scale today, that I have to admit that he is a business genius.

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