March 9, 2021
Yesterday, I watched 'the Pursuit of Happyness' (It is spelled this way in the film, haha.) on Netflix, a based-on-true-story movie featuring Will Smith.
It was a rags-to-riches story about a young African American man, who once found himself in extreme financial difficulty and had to live homeless for a while, with his young child on the side, but succeeds eventually. The character goes through a number of unbelievable hardships and crises (He lands an internship interview, but gets arrested for ticket the day before. During the internship, he has to sleep in a bathroom with his young child, after getting kicked out of his apartment for being unable to pay rents, etc.), but the man dramatically gets himself to be employed and subsequently gets recognized in a legitimate stock brokerage firm, his long perseverance and great character( = personality..? ) finally paying off. His name is Chris Gardner (a real-life name).
I heard that Gardner is now working as a motivational speaker and that this film has been presented to homeless people to give them inspiration. However, while I was really impressed at Gardner's determination and talent, I think people should focus more on the social issues the movie highlights, rather than the individual effort/ success story of Gardner. (which is why, I think, Gardner decided to publish his story in the first place ^^) Sometimes adverse situations, imposed at birth and by environments, are really difficult to overcome with one's own effort only. That is, an individual's determination or motivation alone cannot usually turn around situations to play in his/her favor, as it was, luckily, in Gardner's case. (It is difficult to put this line of thoughts into words.)
I think people, when they watch this film, will realize it, anyway.
Anyhow, despite the fact that I have never lived in a condition as difficult as Gardner's, I could somewhat relate to his hardships. It is because I remember studying and struggling as a somewhat poor/ needy college student in the US. (While I know that it can't be compared to the film's story, haha.)
Anyway, I really like Will Smith's strong, yet warm and caring image. : ) (The way he is to his only son in the movie) I think this image of his is what other people like about him as well. I think I will go look up more of his filmography.
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Anyhow, despite the fact that I have never lived in a condition as difficult as Gardner's, I could somewhat relate to his hardships.
It is because I remember studying and struggling as a somewhat poor/ needy college student in the US.
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Anyway, I really like Will Smith's strong, yet warm and caring image towards his son.
: ) (TI think the way he is to his only son in the movie) I think this image of hiswas portrayed is what other people like about him as well.
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(It is difficult to put this ltraine of thoughts into words. )
I think when people, when they watch this film, they will realize it, anyway.
Anyhow, despite the fact that I have never lived in a condition as difficult as Gardner's, I could somewhat relate to his hardships.
It i's because I remember studying and struggling as a somewhat poor/ needy college student in the US.
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(While I know that it can't be compared to the film's story, haha. )
Anyway, I really like Will Smith's strong, yet warm and caring image towards his only son in the movie.
: ) (The way he is to his only son in the movie) I think this image of his is what other people like about him as well.
I think I will go look up more of his filmography.
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Awesome writing! I watched a lot of Will Smith movies when I was a kid. Whenever I see one of his movies, it reminds me of my childhood. :)
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Yesterday, I watched 'the Pursuit of Happyness' (It is spelled this way in the film, haha.) on Netflix, a based-on-true-story movie featuring Will Smith. Yesterday, I watched ' Yesterday, I watched ' The total should start with a capital |
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It was a rags-to-riches story about a young African American man, who once found himself in extreme financial difficulty and had to live homeless for a while, with his young child, but succeeds eventually. |
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The character goes through a number of unbelievable hardships and crises (He lands an internship interview, but gets arrested for ticket the day before. During the internship, he has to sleep in a bathroom with his young child, after getting kicked out of his apartment for being unable to pay rents, etc. ), but the man dramatically gets himself to be employed and subsequently gets recognized in a legitimate stock brokerage firm, his perseverance and character paying off. |
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Anyway, I really like Will Smith's strong, yet warm and caring image. Anyway, I really like Will Smith's strong, yet warm and caring image towards his only son in the movie. Anyway, I really like Will Smith's strong, yet warm and caring image towards his son. |
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: ) (The way he is to his only son in the movie) I think this image of his is what other people like about him as well.
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The character goes through a number of unbelievable hardships and crises (He lands an internship interview, but gets arrested for ticket the day before. During the internship, he has to sleep in a bathroom with his young child, after getting kicked out of his apartment for being unable to pay rents, etc. ), but the man dramatically gets himself to be employed and subsequently gets recognized in a legitimate stock brokerage firm, his long perseverance and character finally paying off. |
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The character goes through a number of unbelievable hardships and crises (He lands an internship interview, but gets arrested for ticket the day before. During the internship, he has to sleep in a bathroom with his young child, after getting kicked out of his apartment for being unable to pay rents, etc. ), but the man dramatically gets himself to be employed and subsequently gets recognized in a legitimate stock brokerage firm, his long perseverance and great character finally paying off. |
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