Dec. 14, 2020
Journal 14/12/20
This afternoon when I was going to get off work, I received a call from my former colleague. He asked me if I was still at my office because he was on the way to my office to bring me my certificate that the community issues me. I didn’t want to waste his time, so I went downstairs to wait for him. A few minutes later, he arrived and handed me the certificate. It looked really nice: red casing, golden logo and words. I invited him for dinner but he refused. Again, thank the community for issuing the certificate to me, and thank my former colleague who brought it to me.
Journal 14/12/20
This afternoon when I was going to get off work, I received a call from my former colleague.
He asked me if I was still at my office because he was on the way to my office to bring me my certificate that the community issues me.
I didn’t want to waste his time, so I went downstairs to wait for him.
A few minutes later, he arrived and handed me the certificate.
It looked really nice: red casing, golden logo and words.
I invited him for dinner but he refused.
Again, thankI am thankful to the community for issuing the certificate to me, and thankful for my former colleague who brought it to me.
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Nice work, you communicated your point clearly. I would have written some of the sentences differently but did not change it since you got your point across fine. Would you like me to make such corrections in the future?
Dec. 14, 2020
Yes, I am glad to see you do that. That will make my writing more natural and fluent.
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Journal 14/12/20 This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This afternoon when I was going to get off work, I received a call from my former colleague. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He asked me if I was still at my office because he was on the way to my office to bring me my certificate that the community issues me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I didn’t want to waste his time, so I went downstairs to wait for him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A few minutes later, he arrived and handed me the certificate. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It looked really nice: red casing, golden logo and words. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I invited him for dinner but he refused. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Again, thank the community for issuing the certificate to me, and thank my former colleague who brought it to me. Again, |
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