Dec. 6, 2020
Journal 12/6/20
Yesterday afternoon, we were going to have dinner. One of my colleagues felt uncomfortable, but he couldn’t tell what the problem was. In order to ensure his safety, the other two colleagues took him to a nearby town hospital. A doctor first checked his blood pressure and found his highest pressure was 177. The doctor immediately gave him an infusion to lower his blood pressure. After the infusion, when the doctor saw him walking unsteadily, the doctor strongly recommended them to go to the County people’s hospital to do further check, especially do a head CT. We immediately went to the County hospital. During the CT process, even though it was not finished, the operator already told us that he has cerebral hemorrhage, but it is not serious, but he needs to be hospitalized immediately. We had him hospitalized at that time. When we finished all of this, it was already 1 o'clock the next morning. This is an unexpected thing during this training course.
Journal 12/6/20
Yesterday afternoon, we were going to have dinner.
One of my colleagues felt uncomfortable, but he couldn’t tell what the problem was.
In order to ensure his safety, the other two colleagues took him to a nearby town hospital.
A doctor first checked his blood pressure and found his highestsystolic pressure was 177.
I'm assuming that you're referring to the higher reading of the two numbers that are reported for blood pressure. In formal writing, I probably would say "systolic pressure," but informally, something like "the higher of the two numbers that were reported was 177" would be fine.
The doctor immediately gave him an infusion to lower his blood pressure.
After the infusion, when the doctor saw him walking unsteadily, the doctor strongly recommended them toat they go to the Ccounty pPeople’s hHospital to do further check, especially domore medical tests, in particular a head CT scan. We immediately went to the Ccounty hospital.
Unless "county" is part of the actual name, it shouldn't be capitalized.
DuringBefore the CT process, even though it was not finished, the operator alreadyscan was even finished, the technician told us that he hasd a cerebral hemorrhage, but it i. It was not serious, but he needsed to be hospitalized immediately.
The reported speech ("He has a cerebral hemorrhage…") should not use the present tense unless the narration of the whole passage is in the present tense or unless it's inside quotation marks.
We had him hospitalized at that time.
When we finished all of this, it was already 1 o'clockam of the next morningday.
"Morning" is already implied by "1 am." "One o'clock" is grammatical but sounds strange used with "in the morning/evening."
This is an unWe did not expected this to happeng during this training course.
More idiomatic.
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Yesterday afternoon, we were going to have dinner. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One of my colleagues felt uncomfortable, but he couldn’t tell what the problem was. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In order to ensure his safety, the other two colleagues took him to a nearby town hospital. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A doctor first checked his blood pressure and found his highest pressure was 177. A doctor first checked his blood pressure and found his I'm assuming that you're referring to the higher reading of the two numbers that are reported for blood pressure. In formal writing, I probably would say "systolic pressure," but informally, something like "the higher of the two numbers that were reported was 177" would be fine. |
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The doctor immediately gave him an infusion to lower his blood pressure. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After the infusion, when the doctor saw him walking unsteadily, the doctor strongly recommended them to go to the County people’s hospital to do further check, especially do a head CT. We immediately went to the County hospital. After the infusion, when the doctor saw him walking unsteadily, the doctor strongly recommended th Unless "county" is part of the actual name, it shouldn't be capitalized. |
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During the CT process, even though it was not finished, the operator already told us that he has cerebral hemorrhage, but it is not serious, but he needs to be hospitalized immediately.
The reported speech ("He has a cerebral hemorrhage…") should not use the present tense unless the narration of the whole passage is in the present tense or unless it's inside quotation marks. |
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We had him hospitalized at that time. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When we finished all of this, it was already 1 o'clock the next morning. When we finished all of this, it was already 1 "Morning" is already implied by "1 am." "One o'clock" is grammatical but sounds strange used with "in the morning/evening." |
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This is an unexpected thing during this training course.
More idiomatic. |
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