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Nov. 3, 2020

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Journal 11/3/20

In the last few years, l have had two ideals: one can buy an iPhone and another is able to wear a leather coat. The first ideal has come true because my Sum sang cellphone that has been used for three years went wrong. A couple years ago, I bought a leather coat at a low price from a private store and I thought I had realized one of my ideals, but it turned out that the leather coat was fake. I randomly bought two leather coats from a brand store on Tmall this morning and one is for spring or autumn, the other is for winter. I hope I won't buy fakes this time. For now it seems I don't want anything anymore and I am satisfied. Meanwhile, I think my ideal is so ridiculous because this kind of ideal has already come true for many people in their twenties. But for me it is a hard decision to make because I am always a thrifty man. However, I kind of got my wishes, though it looks ridiculous.

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InFor the lpast few years, l have had two ideals: one canwishes: to buy an iPhone and another is able to wear a leather coat.

The first idealwish has come true, because my Sum sasomething has gone wrong with my Samsung cellphone that has been useI've had for three years went wrong.

A couple of years ago, I bought a leather coat at a low price from a private store and, so I thought I had realized one of my idealsmy other wish had come true, but it turned out that the leather coat was fake.

I randomlyThis morning, I bought two leather coats from a brand store on Tmall this morning and o. One is for spring or autumn, and the other is for winter.

It depends on what Tmall is. If it is a place, you would say "at" Tmall, but if it is an online store, then you "on" is correct. For instance, I bought something on Alibaba, but I bought something at the shopping center.

I hope I won't buythey are not fakes this time.

For now it seems, I don't want anything anymore andelse, as I am satisfied.

Meanwhile, I think my ideal iswishes are so ridiculous, because this kind of idealmany people in their twenties hasve already come true for many people in their twentieshad this type of wish come true.

But for me it is a, I have hard decision to maketo wait because I amhave always been a thrifty man.

However, I kind of got my wishes, though it looksAlthough my wishes have come true, they still seem ridiculous.

In the last few years, l have had two idegoals: one can buy an iPhone and another is able to wear a leather coat.

I apologize if I'm misunderstanding this sentence, but it sounds like you mean "goals" rather than "ideals". "Ideals" refer more to personal values which you value highly.
Also, when using ":", you can simplify following phrase.

The first idegoal has come true because my Sum saamsung cellphone that has been used for three years went wrongbroke.

A couple years ago, I bought a leather coat at a low price from a private store and I thought I had realizedmet one of my idegoals, but it turned out that the leather coat was fake.

I randomly bought two leather coats from a brand store on Tmall this morning and o. One is for spring or autumn, and the other is for winter.

Meanwhile, I think my idegoal is so ridiculous because this kind of idegoal has already come true for many people in their twenties.

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Journal 11/3/20


In the last few years, l have had two ideals: one can buy an iPhone and another is able to wear a leather coat.


In the last few years, l have had two idegoals: one can buy an iPhone and another is able to wear a leather coat.

I apologize if I'm misunderstanding this sentence, but it sounds like you mean "goals" rather than "ideals". "Ideals" refer more to personal values which you value highly. Also, when using ":", you can simplify following phrase.

InFor the lpast few years, l have had two ideals: one canwishes: to buy an iPhone and another is able to wear a leather coat.

The first ideal has come true because my Sum sang cellphone that has been used for three years went wrong.


The first idegoal has come true because my Sum saamsung cellphone that has been used for three years went wrongbroke.

The first idealwish has come true, because my Sum sasomething has gone wrong with my Samsung cellphone that has been useI've had for three years went wrong.

A couple years ago, I bought a leather coat at a low price from a private store and I thought I had realized one of my ideals, but it turned out that the leather coat was fake.


A couple years ago, I bought a leather coat at a low price from a private store and I thought I had realizedmet one of my idegoals, but it turned out that the leather coat was fake.

A couple of years ago, I bought a leather coat at a low price from a private store and, so I thought I had realized one of my idealsmy other wish had come true, but it turned out that the leather coat was fake.

I randomly bought two leather coats from a brand store on Tmall this morning and one is for spring or autumn, the other is for winter.


I randomly bought two leather coats from a brand store on Tmall this morning and o. One is for spring or autumn, and the other is for winter.

I randomlyThis morning, I bought two leather coats from a brand store on Tmall this morning and o. One is for spring or autumn, and the other is for winter.

It depends on what Tmall is. If it is a place, you would say "at" Tmall, but if it is an online store, then you "on" is correct. For instance, I bought something on Alibaba, but I bought something at the shopping center.

I hope I won't buy fakes this time.


I hope I won't buythey are not fakes this time.

For now it seems I don't want anything anymore and I am satisfied.


For now it seems, I don't want anything anymore andelse, as I am satisfied.

Meanwhile, I think my ideal is so ridiculous because this kind of ideal has already come true for many people in their twenties.


Meanwhile, I think my idegoal is so ridiculous because this kind of idegoal has already come true for many people in their twenties.

Meanwhile, I think my ideal iswishes are so ridiculous, because this kind of idealmany people in their twenties hasve already come true for many people in their twentieshad this type of wish come true.

But for me it is a hard decision to make because I am always a thrifty man.


But for me it is a, I have hard decision to maketo wait because I amhave always been a thrifty man.

However, I kind of got my wishes, though it looks ridiculous.


However, I kind of got my wishes, though it looksAlthough my wishes have come true, they still seem ridiculous.

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