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Nov. 27, 2020

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Journal 11/27/20

This afternoon, when I was after work, it was already dark outside. Because in our region, during this season, sunset time is 5. Then I rode my bicycle downtown. Afterwards, I rode my bicycle to my mom’s house. The whole trip was 10 kilometers long. I feel a little bit tired now, so I lay on the bed and wrote this passage. I hope it is written well, and it doesn’t have any mistakes.

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This afternoon, when I was aftergot off work, it was already dark outside.

Because inof our region, during this season, the sunset time is 5 pm.

Then I rode my bicycle downtown.

Afterwards, I rode my bicycle to my mom’s house.

The whole trip was 10 kilometers long.

I feel a little bit tired now, so I'm laying on themy bed and wroteI'm writing this passage.

I hope it is written well, and it doesn’t have any mistakes.

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This afternoon, when I was after work after work, it was already dark outside.¶
After I finished work in the afternoon, it was already dark outside.

Because inof our region, during this season, sunset time isis at 5.

I feel a little bit tired now, so I lay'm lying on the bed and wrote this passage.iting this passage.¶
I felt tired afterwards, so I wrote this passage while lying on the bed.

I hope it is written well, and it doesn’t have any mistakes.

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I hope you have a good rest. I will go a cycle later today too.

Journal 11/27/20

This afternoon, when I was after work, it was already dark outside.

This afternoon, when I was after work after work, it was already dark outside.¶
After I finished work in the afternoon, it was already dark outside.

This afternoon, when I was aftergot off work, it was already dark outside.

Because in our region, during this season, sunset time is 5.

Because inof our region, during this season, sunset time isis at 5.

Because inof our region, during this season, the sunset time is 5 pm.

Then I rode my bicycle downtown.

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Afterwards, I rode my bicycle to my mom’s house.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The whole trip was 10 kilometers long.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I feel a little bit tired now, so I lay on the bed and wrote this passage.

I feel a little bit tired now, so I lay'm lying on the bed and wrote this passage.iting this passage.¶
I felt tired afterwards, so I wrote this passage while lying on the bed.

I feel a little bit tired now, so I'm laying on themy bed and wroteI'm writing this passage.

I hope it is written well, and it doesn’t have any mistakes.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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