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Jack

Nov. 1, 2020

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Journal 11/1/20

Sometimes, I feel this is one of the happiest periods of time in my life: no need to buy houses or cars, no need to make money, no need to think about how to get promoted, no need to maintain official relationships. When traditional Chinese festivals come, I only need to visit my parents. No matter people who are rich or in a higher position, they all have nothing to do with me, of course, no matter how pretty ordinary a person I am, I have nothing to do with them. I am not good at dealing with complicated interpersonal relationships, and I also don't have much time to do it or I am indeed not into it, so for me, the simpler, the better. Even if all people ignore me, look down on me, I can still live happily because I have things I like to do, and I won't ever feel bored.

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Journal 11/1/20

Sometimes, I feel like this is one of the happiest periods of time in my life: no need to buy houses or cars, no need to make money, no need to think about how to get promoted, and no need to maintain official relationships.

WOnly when traditional Chinese festivals come, I onlydo I need to visit my parents.

No matter whether people who are rich or in a higher position, they all have nothing to do with me, o. Of course, no matter how pretty ordinary a person I am, I have nothing to do with them as well.

higher position is a comparison and thus needs something to be compared to, so you could say "higher position than me".

the added "as well" at the end seems apt here as the two sentences are related.

I am not good at dealing with complicated interpersonal relationships, and I alsoI don't have much time to dofor it orand I am indeedsimply not into it, so f. For me, the simpler, the better.

be careful of your conjunctions here, better to break up into multiple short sentences than have a very long one.

Even if all peopleveryone ignores me, and looks down on me, I can still live happily because I have things I like to do, and I won't ever feel bored.

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Lovely reflection and rather poetic writing but I would suggest a stronger look into sentence structure and conjunctions to make your writing clearer and more concise!

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Jack

Nov. 1, 2020

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Thank you for your corrections and suggestions. I will work hard on that.

Journal 11/1/20


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Sometimes, I feel this is one of the happiest periods of time in my life: no need to buy houses or cars, no need to make money, no need to think about how to get promoted, no need to maintain official relationships.


Sometimes, I feel like this is one of the happiest periods of time in my life: no need to buy houses or cars, no need to make money, no need to think about how to get promoted, and no need to maintain official relationships.

When traditional Chinese festivals come, I only need to visit my parents.


WOnly when traditional Chinese festivals come, I onlydo I need to visit my parents.

No matter people who are rich or in a higher position, they all have nothing to do with me, of course, no matter how pretty ordinary a person I am, I have nothing to do with them.


No matter whether people who are rich or in a higher position, they all have nothing to do with me, o. Of course, no matter how pretty ordinary a person I am, I have nothing to do with them as well.

higher position is a comparison and thus needs something to be compared to, so you could say "higher position than me". the added "as well" at the end seems apt here as the two sentences are related.

I am not good at dealing with complicated interpersonal relationships, and I also don't have much time to do it or I am indeed not into it, so for me, the simpler, the better.


I am not good at dealing with complicated interpersonal relationships, and I alsoI don't have much time to dofor it orand I am indeedsimply not into it, so f. For me, the simpler, the better.

be careful of your conjunctions here, better to break up into multiple short sentences than have a very long one.

Even if all people ignore me, look down on me, I can still live happily because I have things I like to do, and I won't ever feel bored.


Even if all peopleveryone ignores me, and looks down on me, I can still live happily because I have things I like to do, and I won't ever feel bored.

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