Oct. 30, 2020
Journal 10/30/20
We will leave Jinzhai County tomorrow afternoon, and the whole journey to my home city will take 2.5 hours. As a last training content, we will visit an agricultural industry park and Red Army Square tomorrow morning. In the twenties to thirties of the last century, there were 100000 people from Jinzhai County to join the Red Army to fight for the founding of the People’s Republic of China, and in the end, most of them lost their lives. Jinzhai is a mountainous town, and it used to be poverty, but the people from Jinzhai County all have the spirit of sacrifice and dedication. Those tough days have passed, and the Jinzhai people live richly and happily now. Jinzhai leaves me a good impression. I hope the Jinzhai people’s lives will get better and better.
Journal 10/30/20
We will leave Jinzhai County tomorrow afternoon, and the whole journey back to my home city will take 2.5 hours.
As a last training content, we will visit an agricultural industry park and the Red Army Square tomorrow morning.
What do you mean by "last training content"? Perhaps "For our last few stops" would work better.
In the twenties to thirties of the last century, there were 100,000 people from Jinzhai County to joined the Red Army to fight for the founding of the People’s Republic of China, and in the end, most of them lost their lives.
Just a note on 100,000: sometimes, people do write it as 100000, but when the number is in the middle of a piece of writing (when writing prose), we put commas every 3 zeros (0), so that it's easier to read.
Jinzhai is a mountainous town, and it used to be impovertyished, but the people from Jinzhai County all have the spirit of sacrifice and dedication.
"in poverty" would probably also work
Those tough days have passed, and the Jinzhai people live richly and happily now.
Jinzhai leaves me with a good impression.
I hope the Jinzhai people’s lives will get better and better.
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This is really good! I appreciate the information on Jinzhai, that was very interesting. Overall, this is very well-written!
Oct. 30, 2020
As a last training content, we will visit an agricultural industry park and the Red Army Square tomorrow morning.
I mean in Chinese 作为最后的培训内容。but I don’t know the right translation of it.
Oct. 30, 2020
Hmmm... I wonder if that is an expression meaning something along the lines of "an educational endeavor"?
Oct. 30, 2020
We have four days of field training, and tomorrow morning is the last half day of this training. The training contents tomorrow morning will be the two items. We will visit the two places to see, learn and think. I don’t know if I made myself clear.
Oct. 30, 2020
Oh, ok! I had actually never heard of field training until now, so that explains why I was confused. It might be a little more clear to say "For our last day of field training, we will visit..."?
Oct. 30, 2020
I think it is a great phrase. By the way,
If your major is agricultural technology, then one day, you go to a farm to see the crops and hear the explanations of the instructors about the skills of how to grow crops well. What do you call this activity in English?
Nov. 2, 2020
To be honest, I'm not entirely sure. I think it's called an agricultural science major, at least at the university I live next to.
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We will leave Jinzhai County tomorrow afternoon, and the whole journey to my home city will take 2.5 hours. We will leave Jinzhai County tomorrow afternoon, and the whole journey back to my home city will take 2.5 hours. |
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As a last training content, we will visit an agricultural industry park and Red Army Square tomorrow morning. As a last training content, we will visit an agricultural industry park and the Red Army Square tomorrow morning. What do you mean by "last training content"? Perhaps "For our last few stops" would work better. |
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In the twenties to thirties of the last century, there were 100000 people from Jinzhai County to join the Red Army to fight for the founding of the People’s Republic of China, and in the end, most of them lost their lives. In the twenties to thirties of the last century, Just a note on 100,000: sometimes, people do write it as 100000, but when the number is in the middle of a piece of writing (when writing prose), we put commas every 3 zeros (0), so that it's easier to read. |
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Jinzhai is a mountainous town, and it used to be poverty, but the people from Jinzhai County all have the spirit of sacrifice and dedication. Jinzhai is a mountainous town, and it used to be impover "in poverty" would probably also work |
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Those tough days have passed, and the Jinzhai people live richly and happily now. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Jinzhai leaves me a good impression. Jinzhai leaves me with a good impression. |
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I hope the Jinzhai people’s lives will get better and better. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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