Oct. 23, 2020
This afternoon, I went to the Apple service to check my phone because it had bad signals. It was almost 5 pm when I arrived. A young female server greeted me. I told her about the problems with my phone briefly. Afterwards, an engineer took my phone in a testing equipment and connected the equipment with a computer to check out. About thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. The China mobile service center will get off work at 6pm. I had to get there before 6pm. I went to the service center in a hurry. When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed. I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card. I think it is just a possibility. I will observe it for the next few days.
Journal 10/23/20
This afternoon, I went to the Apple service center to check my phone because it had bad signals.
It was almost 5 pm when I arrived.
A young female servertechnician greeted me.
If you meant 服務員, note that the phrase only translates to "server" only in the context of a restaurant.
I briefly told her about the problems with my phone briefly.
Afterwards, an engineer took my phone in a, placed it into some testing equipment and connected the equipment with a computer to check it out.
After about thirty minutes had passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card.
The China mMobile service center will get off workcloses at 6pm.
I had to get there before 6pm.
I went to the service center in a hurry.
When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed.
"Had the phone card changed" may be slightly better, but this is fine.
I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card.
I think it is just a possibility.
I will observepay attention to it fover the next few days.
It was almost 5 pm when I arrived.
A young female server greeted me.
I briefly told her about the problems with my phone briefly.
Afterwards, an engineer tookconnected my phone in ato some testing equipment and connected the equipment with a computer to check out.
After about thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card.
The China mobile service center will get off workcloses at 6pm.
I had to get there before 6pm.
I went to the service center in a hurry.
I will observemonitor it fover the next few days.
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So of your sentences are pretty short. Consider using connecting words between them to create a more fluent reading experience!
It was almost 5 pm when I arrived.
A young female server greeted me.
I told her briefly about the problems with my phone briefly.
Afterwards, an engineer took my phone and placed it in a testing equipment, and then connected the equipment with a computer to check it out.
The China mobile service center will get off workould close at 6pm.
People get off work at a certain time, businesses close at a certain time.
I had to get there before 6pm.
I went to the service center in a hurry.
When I arrived at the center, I immediately gotchanged the phone card changed.
I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card.
I think it is just a possibility.
I will observe it for the next few days.
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This afternoon, I went to the Apple service to check my phone because it had bad signals. This afternoon, I went to the Apple service center to check my phone because it had bad signals. |
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It was almost 5 pm when I arrived. This sentence has been marked as perfect! It was almost 5 This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A young female server greeted me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! A young female If you meant 服務員, note that the phrase only translates to "server" only in the context of a restaurant. |
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I told her about the problems with my phone briefly. I told her briefly about the problems with my phone I briefly told her about the problems with my phone I briefly told her about the problems with my phone |
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Afterwards, an engineer took my phone in a testing equipment and connected the equipment with a computer to check out. Afterwards, an engineer took my phone and placed it in a testing equipment, and then connected the equipment with a computer to check it out. Afterwards, an engineer Afterwards, an engineer took my phone |
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About thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. After about thirty minutes passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. After about thirty minutes had passed, they told me that the phone didn’t have any problems and suggested that I change to a new phone card. |
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The China mobile service center will get off work at 6pm. The China mobile service center w People get off work at a certain time, businesses close at a certain time. The China mobile service center The China |
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I had to get there before 6pm. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I went to the service center in a hurry. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed. When I arrived at the center, I immediately When I arrived at the center, I immediately got the phone card changed. "Had the phone card changed" may be slightly better, but this is fine. |
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I don't know if there are any bad signal problems caused by the phone card. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I think it is just a possibility. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I will observe it for the next few days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I will I will |
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