May 7, 2020
Japanese educational system
You may have heard about Japanese educational system, but it is very different from those in Europe or the US. First of all, in japan, everything is strict. For example, when you talk to someone older than you, you have to be very polite. This “strictness” can also be seen in the educational system, because you need to study really hard to get into a university. Some students study so hard that they do not care about anything else. This is not a good thing because you need to learn the importance of contributing to society or of stating your opinions in high school by doing volunteer works or having speech contests. Some people say Japanese people are modest, and it is one aspect of Japanese culture, but in my opinion, this is not only because of Japanese culture, it is also because they did not learn how to avoid being modest in high school. We need to change this system to let them learn things that are much more helpful than just memorizing lots of mathematical formulas.
日本の教育制度について聞いたことがあるかもしれないが、日本の教育制度はヨーロッパやアメリカのものとは大きく違う。まず第一に、日本では全てにおいて厳しさがある。例えば、年長者と話す時は、丁寧に話さなければいけない。この厳しさは、教育制度にもみられる。というのも、大学に入るには、猛勉強しないといけないからだ。他のことをなにも気にせずに勉強に励む生徒もいる。しかしこれは、高校では、ボランティアやスピーチ大会などを行うことで社会貢献や意見を言うことの大切さを知る必要があるため、いいことではない。日本人は謙虚で、それも日本の文化だと言う人もいるが、これは、文化というだけでなく、高校生の時に謙虚になりすぎないことを学ばなかったためだと私は思う。数学の公式を暗記するよりもはるかに役に立つことを高校生にさせるために、この制度は変えていかなければならない。
You may have heard about Japanese educational system, but it is very different from thosee education system in Europe or in the US.
For example, when you talk to someone older than you, you have to be very polite.
Some students study so hard that they do not care about anything else.
This is not a good thing, because you need to learn the importance of contributing to society or of stating your opinions in high school by doing volunteer works or having speech contests.
Some people say Japanese people are modest, and it is one aspect of Japanese culture, but in my opinion, this is not only because of Japanese culture, it isbut also because they did not learn how to avoid being modest in high school.
We need to change this system to let them learn things that are much more helpful than just memorizing lots of mathematical formulas.
May 9, 2020
Thank you!
The Japanese educational system
"Educational" is fine, but it's not necessary and in some contexts, it can sound wordy. Either is fine, so I just wanted to let you know that you can write it as "educational" or "education."
You may have heard about the Japanese educational system, but it is very different from those in Europe or the US.
First of all, in jJapan, everything is strict.
This “strictness” can also be seen in the educational system, because you need to study really hard to get into a universitysuch as with the strict requirements for university admissions.
It's a bit difficult at first to get the connection between "'strictness' in the education system" and "you need to study hard", so this helps you make the transition smoothly.
Some students study so hard that they do not care about anything else.
This is not a good thing because you need to learn the importance of contributing to society or of stating your opinions in high school by doing volunteer works or havingcompeting in speech contests in high school.
Some people say Japanese people are modest, and it is true that this is one aspect of Japanese culture, b. But in my opinion, this is not only because ofsue is due not only to Japanese culture, it isbut also because they didhigh school students do not learn how to avoid always being modest in high school.
We need to change this system to let them learn things that are much more helpful than just memorizing lots of mathematical formulas.
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Very well-written - it sounds almost native. And I think you make some good points!
May 7, 2020
thank you so much!
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Japanese educational system The Japanese education "Educational" is fine, but it's not necessary and in some contexts, it can sound wordy. Either is fine, so I just wanted to let you know that you can write it as "educational" or "education." |
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You may have heard about Japanese educational system, but it is very different from those in Europe or the US. You may have heard about the Japanese educational system, but it is very different from those in Europe or the US. You may have heard about Japanese educational system, but it is very different from th |
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First of all, in japan, everything is strict. First of all, in |
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For example, when you talk to someone older than you, you have to be very polite. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This “strictness” can also be seen in the educational system, because you need to study really hard to get into a university. This “strictness” can also be seen in the educational system, It's a bit difficult at first to get the connection between "'strictness' in the education system" and "you need to study hard", so this helps you make the transition smoothly. |
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Some students study so hard that they do not care about anything else. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This is not a good thing because you need to learn the importance of contributing to society or of stating your opinions in high school by doing volunteer works or having speech contests. This is not a good thing because you need to learn the importance of contributing to society or of stating your opinions This is not a good thing, because you need to learn the importance of contributing to society or of stating your opinions in high school by doing volunteer work |
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Some people say Japanese people are modest, and it is one aspect of Japanese culture, but in my opinion, this is not only because of Japanese culture, it is also because they did not learn how to avoid being modest in high school. Some people say Japanese people are modest, and it is true that this is one aspect of Japanese culture Some people say Japanese people are modest, and it is one aspect of Japanese culture, but in my opinion, this is not only because of |
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We need to change this system to let them learn things that are much more helpful than just memorizing lots of mathematical formulas. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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