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zanyzoe

yesterday

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Japan - Aomori

In my previous post, I forgot to say I fell in love with the toilet in Japan.
I thing I'm not the only one.
So, after our first step in Sapporo, we went in Aomori with a Shinkansen.
I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure, so he took a strange thing .
It was a saumon sausage and it was terrible.
When we arrived in Aomori, I discovered the stamp station.
In Japan, we can found stamp in each station as with temples.
After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I need to erase the saumon savor.
For the dinner, we tried a Japan Barbecue.
We let the hasard chose the meat and it was a big mistake, because my meat was beaf tongue and I hated that.
Fortunately, I took a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menus was served with some add like tofu, salads and miso soup.
At the hotel, the receptionnist didn't speak english, so it was difficult for him to explain us how did it works.
So, we stayed a long time in the elevator because we didn't undestand how we could go on the right floor.
Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstanding.
They helped us to undestand the sytem of this elevator and we could go to our room.

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In my previous post, I forgot to say I fell in love with thJapanese toilet in Japans.

I thingk I'm not the only one.

So, after our first steop in Sapporo, we went into Aomori with aby Shinkansen.

I asked to my boyfriend to takegrab something to eat before our departure, so he took a strange we left, so he bought something weird.

to make it sound more natural

It was a saulmon sausage, and it was terrible.

When we arrived in Aomori, I discoverefound the stamp station.

In Japan, weyou can fouind stamp ins at each station as with, just like temples.

After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I needed to erase the saulmon savor.

For the dinner, we tried a Japan Bese barbecue.

We let the hasard(?) chose the meat and it, which was a big mistake, because my meat was beaef tongue and I hated that.

what is this word?

Fortunately, I tookordered a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menuseverything was served with some addides like tofu, salads and miso soup.

At the hotel, the receptionnist didn't speak eEnglish, so it was difficult for him to explain to us how did iteverything works.

So, wWe stayed for a long time in the elevator because we didn't understand how we could go onto get to the right floor.

Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstandingconfusion.

They helped us to understand the sytem of this elevator, and we couldwere able to go to our room.

In my previous post, I forgot to say I fell in love with the toilet in Japan.

I thingk I'm not the only one.

I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure, so he took a strange thing .

An alternative to this sentence:
→ "I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure. When he did, he showed me something really strange."

It was a saumon sausage and it was terrible.

Instead of "was", you could also write "it tasted terrible". To clarify, the verb "taste" means to know the flavour of something with the tongue.

In Japan, we can fouind stamps in each station as with temples.

Perhaps you wanted to write this instead:
"In Japan, we have found stamps in each station, as with temples."

After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I needed to erase the saumon savor.

The past tense of "need" is "needed".

For the dinner, we tried a Jjapan Bese barbecue.

We don't use the definite article "the" with the names of meals (breakfast, lunch, dinner, morning-tea, etc.).

We let the hasard choose the meat and it was a big mistake, because my meat was beaef tongue and I hated that.

Fortunately, I took a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menus was served with some add like tofu, salads and miso soup.

At the hotel, the receptionnist didn't speak english, so it was difficult for him to explain us how did it workthe elevator worked to us.

With the verb "explain", the prepositional phrase* "to" is written behind the personal pronoun.

*"to" expresses that an action is moving towards something, for example:
"I took the family out to dinner last night"
"I walked up to him and we started talking"

So, we stayed a long time in the elevatore because we didn't understand how we could go on the right floor.

Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstanding.

They helped us to understand the system of thise elevator and we could go to our room.

The demonstrative adjective "this" is close or right next to the speaker. Because you are mentioning an object from the past, "this" is replaced with "that".

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abulonpaua

yesterday

1

The biggest weak point that I found in your writing is the conjugation of verbs in past tense as well as a bit of spelling mistakes.
Your text was clear enough to understand.

I hope you and your partner are having fun travelling around the world!

P.S

Excuse me for the typo with "elevator". I misplaced the e.

zanyzoe's avatar
zanyzoe

today

3

Hello,

Thank you for your feedback!

Yes, conjugation is definitely one of my biggest weak points, among others.

Yeees! I will go in New-zealand for one year in 2027. I'm so excited !

Have a good day!

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My correction :

In my previous post, I forgot to say I fell in love with the toilet in Japan.
I think I'm not the only one.
I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure. When he did, he showed me something really strange.
It was a saumon sausage and it tasted terrible.
In Japan, we have found stamps in each station, as with temples.
After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I needed to erase the saumon savor.
For dinner, we tried a japanese barbecue.
We let the hasard choose the meat and it was a big mistake, because my meat was beef tongue and I hated that.
Fortunately, I took a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menus was served with some add like tofu, salads and miso soup.
At the hotel, the receptionist didn’t speak English, so it was difficult for him to explain to us how it worked.
So, we stayed a long time in there because we didn't understand how we could go on the right floor.
Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstanding.
They helped us to understand the system of the elevator and we could go to our room.

Japan - Aomori


In my previous post, I forgot to say I fell in love with the toilet in Japan.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In my previous post, I forgot to say I fell in love with thJapanese toilet in Japans.

I thing I'm not the only one.


I thingk I'm not the only one.

I thingk I'm not the only one.

So, after our first step in Sapporo, we went in Aomori with a Shinkansen.


So, after our first steop in Sapporo, we went into Aomori with aby Shinkansen.

I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure, so he took a strange thing .


I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure, so he took a strange thing .

An alternative to this sentence: → "I asked to my boyfriend to take something to eat before our departure. When he did, he showed me something really strange."

I asked to my boyfriend to takegrab something to eat before our departure, so he took a strange we left, so he bought something weird.

to make it sound more natural

It was a saumon sausage and it was terrible.


It was a saumon sausage and it was terrible.

Instead of "was", you could also write "it tasted terrible". To clarify, the verb "taste" means to know the flavour of something with the tongue.

It was a saulmon sausage, and it was terrible.

When we arrived in Aomori, I discovered the stamp station.


When we arrived in Aomori, I discoverefound the stamp station.

In Japan, we can found stamp in each station as with temples.


In Japan, we can fouind stamps in each station as with temples.

Perhaps you wanted to write this instead: "In Japan, we have found stamps in each station, as with temples."

In Japan, weyou can fouind stamp ins at each station as with, just like temples.

After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I need to erase the saumon savor.


After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I needed to erase the saumon savor.

The past tense of "need" is "needed".

After that, we ate a crepe with strawberries and cream because I needed to erase the saulmon savor.

For the dinner, we tried a Japan Barbecue.


For the dinner, we tried a Jjapan Bese barbecue.

We don't use the definite article "the" with the names of meals (breakfast, lunch, dinner, morning-tea, etc.).

For the dinner, we tried a Japan Bese barbecue.

We let the hasard chose the meat and it was a big mistake, because my meat was beaf tongue and I hated that.


We let the hasard choose the meat and it was a big mistake, because my meat was beaef tongue and I hated that.

We let the hasard(?) chose the meat and it, which was a big mistake, because my meat was beaef tongue and I hated that.

what is this word?

Fortunately, I took a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menus was served with some add like tofu, salads and miso soup.


Fortunately, I took a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menus was served with some add like tofu, salads and miso soup.

Fortunately, I tookordered a bowl of rice, eggs and vegetables, and all menuseverything was served with some addides like tofu, salads and miso soup.

At the hotel, the receptionnist didn't speak english, so it was difficult for him to explain us how did it works.


At the hotel, the receptionnist didn't speak english, so it was difficult for him to explain us how did it workthe elevator worked to us.

With the verb "explain", the prepositional phrase* "to" is written behind the personal pronoun. *"to" expresses that an action is moving towards something, for example: "I took the family out to dinner last night" "I walked up to him and we started talking"

At the hotel, the receptionnist didn't speak eEnglish, so it was difficult for him to explain to us how did iteverything works.

So, we stayed a long time in the elevator because we didn't undestand how we could go on the right floor.


So, we stayed a long time in the elevatore because we didn't understand how we could go on the right floor.

So, wWe stayed for a long time in the elevator because we didn't understand how we could go onto get to the right floor.

Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstanding.


Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstanding.

Luckily, a Japanese family found us and saw our misunderstandingconfusion.

They helped us to undestand the sytem of this elevator and we could go to our room.


They helped us to understand the system of thise elevator and we could go to our room.

The demonstrative adjective "this" is close or right next to the speaker. Because you are mentioning an object from the past, "this" is replaced with "that".

They helped us to understand the sytem of this elevator, and we couldwere able to go to our room.

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