July 11, 2021
Janpanese Women's Situation (one)
I read two articles from the New York Times, which were both about Japanese women. One was about women athletes, the other was about women suicide.
On the first article, women are being encourage or press to be a wife. Even though you have high achievement in you career. There is no girls football team in Kurumi's school or even the whole district, so she has to play football in a boys team.
Janpanese Women's Situation (one)
I read two articles from the New York Times (adding a time word here like "recently" makes the sentence flow better), which were both about Japanese women.
One was about womenfemale athletes, and the other was about womenfemale suicide.
On tThe first article, describes how women are being encouraged or pressured to be a wifecome wives, even though they may have high achieving careers.
I added your next sentence into her
Even though you have high achievement in you career.
see above
There is no girls football team in Kurumi's school or even in the whole district, so she has to play football in a boys team.
Janpanese Women's Situation (one)
One was about womenfemale athletes, and the other was about womenfemale suicide.
women = noun, female = adjective (describes the type of athlete)
OIn the first article, it described how women are being encouraged or pressured to be a wifecome wives.
Even though youthey have high -achievement in youing careers.
(You could also put this sentence at the end of the previous one, since "even though" would help connect the two ideas)
There is no girls football team in Kurumi's school or even in the whole district, so she has to play football in a boys team.
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I read two articles from the New York Times, which were both about Japanese women. I read two articles from the New York Times (adding a time word here like "recently" makes the sentence flow better), which were both about Japanese women. |
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On the first article, women are being encourage or press to be a wife.
I added your next sentence into her |
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Even though you have high achievement in you career. Even though (You could also put this sentence at the end of the previous one, since "even though" would help connect the two ideas) Even though you have high achievement in you career. see above |
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There is no girls football team in Kurumi's school or even the whole district, so she has to play football in a boys team. There is no girls football team in Kurumi's school or even in the whole district, so she has to play football in a boys team. There is no girls football team in Kurumi's school or even in the whole district, so she has to play football in a boys team. |
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