She (It's better to use her name here) and the other competitors were waiting to hear the result of the film competition. She (It's better to use her name here) and the other competitors were waiting to hear the result of the film competition.

Using her name instead of "she" sounds more natural

She and the other competitors were waiting to hear the results of the film competition. She and the other competitors were waiting to hear the results of the film competition.

She was very nervous as it was her first film-makering project. She was very nervous as it was her first film-making project.

It's film-making unless the name of the project itself is 'film-maker'

She was very nervous as it was her first film-maker project. She was very nervous as it was her first filmmaker project.

She had made a both simple and , low-budget film, using things that she had got around her: her house, her friends and her camera. She had made a simple, low-budget film, using things that she had around her: her house, her friends and her camera.

She had made a both a simple and budget film, using things she had got around her: her house, her friends and her camera. She had made both a simple and budget film, using things she had around her: her house, her friends and her camera.

It was a short story about a girl who haved just broken up with her boyfriend after living together for three years. It was a short story about a girl who had just broken up with her boyfriend after living together for three years.

It was a short story about a girl who haved just broken up with her boyfriend after living together with him for three years. It was a short story about a girl who had just broken up with her boyfriend after living together with him for three years.

It shows what she gowent throught over the nextfollowing months, and emphasizes the importance of moving forward, despite the difficulties that happenmay arise in life. It shows what she went through over the following months, and emphasizes the importance of moving forward, despite the difficulties that may arise in life.

'The difficulties that happen' is perfectly understandable but it doesn't sound completely natural to me.

It shows what she goes throught over the nextfollowing months, and emphasizes the importance of moving forward, despite the difficulties that happen in life. It shows what she goes through over the following months and emphasizes the importance of moving forward, despite the difficulties that happen in life.

The judges had such aquite grumpy faces and they had already saiannounced which participants had already been eliminated. The judges had quite grumpy faces and had already announced which participants had been eliminated.

'Said' is fine but 'announced' is better

The judges had such a grumpy faces and they had already said which participants had already been eliminated. The judges had such grumpy faces and they had already said which participants had already been eliminated.

"I am not going to win, their films are much better," Sshe thought. "I am not going to win, their films are much better," she thought.

"I am not going to win, because their films are much better," Sshe thought. "I am not going to win because their films are much better," she thought.

Then, she went on the stage and dedicated a few words to all the people who had helped her, and without whose help she would nevernever would have made it. Then she went on the stage and dedicated a few words to all the people who had helped her, and without whose help she never would have made it.

Then, she went on the stage and dedicated a few words to all the people who had helped her and without whose help she would never have been able to madke it. Then, she went on stage and dedicated a few words to all the people who had helped her and without whose help she would never have been able to make it.