Dec. 12, 2020
Is this a poem?
The night is really quiet and the lights are bright.
The air conditioner is on, 20 degrees Celsius.
I am sitting on the couch alone and playing on my phone.
I am not a young man anymore.
Look back at those days I have gotten through.
Is there anything that I regret? Nothing.
Is there anything that I appreciate a lot? Still nothing.
It seems I have done a lot, but again, it seems I have done nothing.
Time passes thus, I don’t even know that.
Am I happy? Kind of.
Am I not happy? Kind of.
No matter if you are willing to forward, you have to go ahead.
It seems everybody goes this way, whether you like it or not.
So, let’s move forward, whatever is in front of it.
Just go forward.
until it comes to the end.
Is this a poem?
The night is really quiet and the lights are bright.
I am sitting on the couch alone and playing on my phone.
I am not a young man anymore.
Look back at those days I have gotten through.
Is there anything that I regret?
No.|Nothing.
"No" would be the normal way to respond.
Again, no.|Still nothing.
It seems I have done a lot, but again, it seems I have done nothing.
Time passes thus, I don’t even know that.
What is this sentence supposed to mean?
Am I happy?
Kind of.
Am I unot happy?
"Am I not happy?" could be read as a rhetorical question that supposes that you should be happy. "Am I unhappy?" is better.
Kind of.
No matter ifwhether you are willing to go forward, you have to go aheadneed to.
It seems everybody goes this wayneeds to do this, whether youwe like it or not.
So, let’s move forward, whatever is in front of itus.
Just go forward until you get to the end.
I joined this sentence and the next one.
until it comes to the end.
Feedback
I would call this prose that has some attributes of poetry.
By writing posts here, you have demonstrated that you are not just passively moving forward, regardless of how you may feel at a particular moment in time. Feelings change, but you're trying to accomplish something that goes beyond your current mood. That sounds healthy to me.
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The night is really quiet and the lights are bright. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The air conditioner is on, 20 degrees Celsius. |
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I am sitting on the couch alone and playing on my phone. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I am not a young man anymore. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Look back at those days I have gotten through. Look back at th |
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Is there anything that I regret? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Nothing. No.|Nothing. "No" would be the normal way to respond. |
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Is there anything that I appreciate a lot? |
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Still nothing. Again, no.|Still nothing. |
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It seems I have done a lot, but again, it seems I have done nothing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Time passes thus, I don’t even know that. Time passes thus, I don’t even know that. What is this sentence supposed to mean? |
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Am I happy? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Kind of. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Am I not happy? Am I un "Am I not happy?" could be read as a rhetorical question that supposes that you should be happy. "Am I unhappy?" is better. |
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Kind of. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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No matter if you are willing to forward, you have to go ahead. No matter |
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It seems everybody goes this way, whether you like it or not. It seems everybody |
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So, let’s move forward, whatever is in front of it. So, let’s move forward, whatever is in front of |
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Just go forward. Just go forward until you get to the end. I joined this sentence and the next one. |
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until it comes to the end.
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