Aug. 31, 2024
Is there a role for activism in sports ?
Sport has always been a way to gather people during events. During these events many have fun, but some come to those events in order to convey a message. This begs the following question : Should activism be authorized in sport events?
First and foremost, the people who endorse activism during sport events, argue that their message should be spread. They consider that it is important, otherwise they wouldn’t bother going to sports events. For instance, ecologists do their best to remind people of the critical situation on earth. This is why during the Champions League final in 2019 between Liverpool and Tottenham, a woman invaded the pitch to share a message about ecology through what was written on her clothes. However, those behaviours annoy many people.
If you want to enjoy watching a game or attending competitions, you won’t necessarily appreciate seeing people stopping the game to share a message. But let’s say they don’t interrupt the game and they just have a panel among the other supporters. Who would mind their presence ? As long as the message does not contradict organizers’ policy, no one would mind. But when it contradicts the rules of the organizers, problems arise. For example, during the 2022 World Cup in Qatar the rainbow flag, which represents support for the LGBT community, was forbidden. Here we see the limit of activism in sports. I believe that during sports events, basic values of sportsmanship should be respected. What are they? Fairplay, respect and have fun. If you respect others, you won’t feel the need to convey some message about acceptance. I think activism is only needed when people need to realise something important. It should not bring divisions.
In addition to that, the people who hate activism in sport the most are those who make money out of these events. Indeed, they don’t want politics or social issues to come their way. They don’t even like it when ecologists blame them for worsening the ecological situation. Big sport events in countries like Greece and Brazil are problematic, for the infrastructure won’t be used after the sports event. So, ecologists make things harder for developing countries to host big sports events. And some countries are accused of injustice like Qatar, where people died while building stadiums for the 2022 World Cup. So, those who make money out of these sports events may clutch their pearls when they see activism in sports events. They seek nothing but their money, which is not really righteous.
All in all, I for one think activism only has a small space in sports and players as well as activists are free to express their minds about some important topic, as long as they remain respectful.
Is there a role for activism in sports ?
no space before punctuation. Could consider capitalising the title too.
Sporting events hasve always been a way to gather people during eventscreated an opportunity for people to gather.
"always been" and "during events" - seems a mix of specific and general ideas. You could change 'during' somehow too.
During these events, many have fun, but some come to those events in order to convey a message.
Commas are used to separate ideas in English writing
This begs the following question : Should activism be authorized in sports events?
No space before punctuation. Sports events - I assume you mean many types of sporting events.
First and foremost, the people, who endorse activism during sport events, argue that their message should be spread.
need two commas or none.
They consider that it is important, otherwise they wouldn’t bother going to sports events.
For instance, ecologists do their best to remind people of the critical situation on earth.
This is why during the Champions League final in 2019 between Liverpool and Tottenham, a woman invaded the pitch. She wanted to share a message about ecology through what was written on her clothesby writing a message on her clothes for everyone to see.
Looong sentence. Consider tying to split it to convey the message more clearly, or remove the infomation about the two teams.
However, thoseis type of behaviours annoys many people.
If you want to enjoy watching a game or attending competitions, you won’t necessarily appreciate seeing people stopping the game to share a message.
But let’s say they don’t interrupt the game and they just have a panel among the other supporters.
I don't know what you mean by panel - placard, poster? Perhaps add what they were doing with the panel to give me a clue.
Who would mind their presence ?
punctuation gap removed.
As long as the message does not contradict organizers’ policy, no one wshould mind.
I think it is a reach to say nobody would mind. So I assuming this is an assertion rather than knowledge of the crowd.
Fairplay, respect and have fun.
either "having fun" or just "fun".
In addition to that, the people who hate activism in sport the most are those who make money out of these events.
"to that" seems superfluous
They don’t even like it when ecologists blame them for worsening the ecological situation.
Not sure what you mean here - I would either remove "even" or add the word "the" before worsening depends on what you are trying to say.
Big sports events, in countries like Greece and Brazil, are problematic, forbecause the infrastructure won’t be used after the sports event.
I use "sporting events" more frequently, but in the least I think you need "sports" events.
And some countries are accused of injustice like Qatar, where people died while building the stadiums for the 2022 World Cup.
add '"the" stadiums' to make it clearer
They seek nothing but their money, which is not moreally righteousjustifiable.
You start with a strong statement then use a qualifer like "really". I don't quite follow righteous, it seems out of place in the tone of the text. Simply "morally justifiable" would be easier to understand.
All in all, I, for one, think activism only has a small space in sports and players, as well as activists, are free to express their minds about some important topics, as long as they remain respectful.
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Great Effort! Some complicated structures and words on display.
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Is there a role for activism in sports ? Is there a role for activism in sports no space before punctuation. Could consider capitalising the title too. |
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Sport has always been a way to gather people during events. Sporting events ha "always been" and "during events" - seems a mix of specific and general ideas. You could change 'during' somehow too. |
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During these events many have fun, but some come to those events in order to convey a message. During these events, many have fun, but some come to those events in order to convey a message. Commas are used to separate ideas in English writing |
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This begs the following question : Should activism be authorized in sport events? This begs the following question No space before punctuation. Sports events - I assume you mean many types of sporting events. |
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First and foremost, the people who endorse activism during sport events, argue that their message should be spread. First and foremost, the people, who endorse activism during sport events, argue that their message should be spread. need two commas or none. |
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They consider that it is important, otherwise they wouldn’t bother going to sports events. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For instance, ecologists do their best to remind people of the critical situation on earth. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This is why during the Champions League final in 2019 between Liverpool and Tottenham, a woman invaded the pitch to share a message about ecology through what was written on her clothes. This is why during the Champions League final in 2019 Looong sentence. Consider tying to split it to convey the message more clearly, or remove the infomation about the two teams. |
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However, those behaviours annoy many people. However, th |
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If you want to enjoy watching a game or attending competitions, you won’t necessarily appreciate seeing people stopping the game to share a message. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But let’s say they don’t interrupt the game and they just have a panel among the other supporters. But let’s say they don’t interrupt the game and they just have a panel among the other supporters. I don't know what you mean by panel - placard, poster? Perhaps add what they were doing with the panel to give me a clue. |
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Who would mind their presence ? Who would mind their presence punctuation gap removed. |
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Here we see the limit of activism in sports. |
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As long as the message does not contradict organizers’ policy, no one would mind. As long as the message does not contradict organizers’ policy, no one I think it is a reach to say nobody would mind. So I assuming this is an assertion rather than knowledge of the crowd. |
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But when it contradicts the rules of the organizers, problems arise. |
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For example, during the 2022 World Cup in Qatar the rainbow flag, which represents support for the LGBT community, was forbidden. |
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I believe that during sports events, basic values of sportsmanship should be respected. |
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What are they? |
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Fairplay, respect and have fun. Fairplay, respect and either "having fun" or just "fun". |
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If you respect others, you won’t feel the need to convey some message about acceptance. |
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I think activism is only needed when people need to realise something important. |
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It should not bring divisions. |
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In addition to that, the people who hate activism in sport the most are those who make money out of these events. In addition "to that" seems superfluous |
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Indeed, they don’t want politics or social issues to come their way. |
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They don’t even like it when ecologists blame them for worsening the ecological situation. They don’t even like it when ecologists blame them for worsening the ecological situation. Not sure what you mean here - I would either remove "even" or add the word "the" before worsening depends on what you are trying to say. |
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Big sport events in countries like Greece and Brazil are problematic, for the infrastructure won’t be used after the sports event. Big sports events, in countries like Greece and Brazil, are problematic, I use "sporting events" more frequently, but in the least I think you need "sports" events. |
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So, ecologists make things harder for developing countries to host big sports events. |
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And some countries are accused of injustice like Qatar, where people died while building stadiums for the 2022 World Cup. And some countries are accused of injustice like Qatar, where people died while building the stadiums for the 2022 World Cup. add '"the" stadiums' to make it clearer |
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So, those who make money out of these sports events may clutch their pearls when they see activism in sports events. |
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They seek nothing but their money, which is not really righteous. They seek nothing but You start with a strong statement then use a qualifer like "really". I don't quite follow righteous, it seems out of place in the tone of the text. Simply "morally justifiable" would be easier to understand. |
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All in all, I for one think activism only has a small space in sports and players as well as activists are free to express their minds about some important topic, as long as they remain respectful. All in all, I, for one, think activism only has a small space in sports and players, as well as activists, are free to express their minds about |
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