Oct. 16, 2020
"Is Friendship Important?" - An Essay
That's a preparation task for my RNE (Russian National Exam, uh-huh), so I had to speculate on the topic giving my point of view, an opposite one and an explanation why the second one is wrong. Limit - 250 words, so vocab's really poor, but could you just check on very rude and clumsy constructions, something that catches your eye and sounds unlovely?? Thanks in advance!! Oh, and articles. They are my pain.
We all live in a society where we all have to interact with a lot of people. Sometimes we like them so much we befriend them, and these people become our beloved partners for a long time. Some individuals claim that friendship is a thing one cannot live without, while others argue that such form of connection is unnecessary and should be avoided. In this essay I will try to look upon this issue.
To my mind, friendship is an essential part of people's lives. There are some arguments to support my point of view. To begin with, comrades are amazing supporters for a case if something bad happens. True friends always stand by one's side to help. Furthermore, sometimes it is needed for humans to share their thoughts to feel better, and this is what friends are for.
Nevertheless, there are people of the opposite opinion. They think that friends are a burden keeping people down instead of letting them live on their own.
However veracious it sounds, I would not agreee with the above mentioned idea, because existence without comrades would be a hardship for anybody. People who do not understand it have never tried looking past themselves onto persons closest to them.
To sum up, although the problem raised in this essay seems controversial, I would like to point out again that there are different opinions about it, so people are free to choose what is best for them.
Some individuals claim that friendship is a thing one cannot live without, while others argue that such formthis kind of connection is unnecessary and should be avoided.
In this essay I will try to look upexpress my own thoughts on this issue.
The phrase “to look upon an issue” is never used.
Perhaps “I will comment upon this issue.”
(The word “try” weakens the sentence a bit.)
To begin with, comrades are amazing supporters for a case if something bad happens.
Furthermore, sometimes it is needed for humans to share their thoughts to feel better, and thisat is what friends are for.
In that sentence, “this” also works. It feels more natural to say “that”, though.
They think that friends are a burden, keeping people down instead of letting them live on their own.
However veraciousNo matter how truthful it sounds, I would not agreee with the above mentioned idea, because existence without comrades would be a hardship for anybody.
“Veracious” seems too fancy a word for this sentence.
People who do not understand it have never tried looking past themselves onto; to the persons closest to them.
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Well done! Nice structure and the thoughts are kind and good.
We all live in a society where we all have to interact with a lot of people.
Sometimes we like them so much that we befriend them, and these people become our beloved partners for a long time.
To begin with, comrades are amazing supporters for ain case if something bad happens.
Furthermore, sometimes it is neededcessary for humans to share their thoughts to feel better, and this is what friends are for.
HoweverNo matter how veracious it sounds, I would not agreee with the above mentioned idea, because existence without comrades would be a hardshipburden for anybody.
Hardship sounds a bit odd here, I'd substitute it for burden.
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"Is Friendship Important?" - An Essay |
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That's a preparation task for my RNE (Russian National Exam, uh-huh), so I had to speculate on the topic giving my point of view, an opposite one and an explanation why the second one is wrong. |
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Limit - 250 words, so vocab's really poor, but could you just check on very rude and clumsy constructions, something that catches your eye and sounds unlovely?? |
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Thanks in advance!! |
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Oh, and articles. |
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They are my pain. |
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We all live in a society where we all have to interact with a lot of people. We |
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Sometimes we like them so much we befriend them, and these people become our beloved partners for a long time. Sometimes we like them so much that we befriend them, and these people become our beloved partners for a long time. |
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Some individuals claim that friendship is a thing one cannot live without, while others argue that such form of connection is unnecessary and should be avoided. Some individuals claim that friendship is a thing one cannot live without, while others argue that |
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In this essay I will try to look upon this issue. In this essay I will The phrase “to look upon an issue” is never used. Perhaps “I will comment upon this issue.” (The word “try” weakens the sentence a bit.) |
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To my mind, friendship is an essential part of people's lives. |
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There are some arguments to support my point of view. |
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To begin with, comrades are amazing supporters for a case if something bad happens. To begin with, comrades are amazing supporters To begin with, comrades are amazing supporters |
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True friends always stand by one's side to help. |
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Furthermore, sometimes it is needed for humans to share their thoughts to feel better, and this is what friends are for. Furthermore, sometimes it is ne Furthermore, sometimes it is needed for humans to share their thoughts to feel better, and th In that sentence, “this” also works. It feels more natural to say “that”, though. |
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Nevertheless, there are people of the opposite opinion. |
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They think that friends are a burden keeping people down instead of letting them live on their own. They think that friends are a burden, keeping people down instead of letting them live on their own. |
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However veracious it sounds, I would not agreee with the above mentioned idea, because existence without comrades would be a hardship for anybody.
Hardship sounds a bit odd here, I'd substitute it for burden.
“Veracious” seems too fancy a word for this sentence. |
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People who do not understand it have never tried looking past themselves onto persons closest to them. People who do not understand it have never tried looking past themselves |
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To sum up, although the problem raised in this essay seems controversial, I would like to point out again that there are different opinions about it, so people are free to choose what is best for them. |
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