The City in wWhich I Live (6) The City in Which I Live (6)

Let's go back to the year around 1985 when I was a kid in elementary school student. Let's go back to around 1985 when I was a kid in elementary school.

Let's go back to the year around 1985, when I was a kid in elementary school student. Let's go back to the year 1985, when I was a kid in elementary school.

Even now, I have a strong memory of the chargedelectric escalator in a local department store till now. Even now, I have a strong memory of the electric escalator in a local department store.

I have a strongvivid memory of the chargrowded escalator in a local department store till now. I have a vivid memory of the crowded escalator in a local department store till now.

"charged escalator" --- not sure what charged means? think you may mean "crowded" but not sure. "vivid" is good to describe a colorful memory that lasts with you

The escalator is omnipresent nowadays, but around the year 1985 in Chongqing, most of us including me, had no idea of it until I paid 0.1 Yuan to step onto it. The escalator is omnipresent nowadays, but around the year 1985 in Chongqing, most of us including me, had no idea of it until I paid 0.1 Yuan to step onto it.

The escalator is omnipresenteverywhere nowadays, but around the year 1985 in Chongqing, most of us including me had no idea of itwhat it was, until I paid 0.1 Yyuan to step onto it. The escalator is everywhere nowadays, but around 1985 in Chongqing, most of us including me had no idea what it was, until I paid 0.1 yuan to step onto it.

"omnipresent" 多用于书面，不太适合这种句子

At that time, my father who was a common engineer in a local institution, hiscompany had a salary wasof 100 Yuan (US$ 15) a month. At that time, my father who was a common engineer in a local company had a salary of 100 Yuan (US$ 15) a month.

At thate time, my father who was a common engineer in a local institution, and his salary was 100 Yyuan (US$ $15) a month. At the time, my father was a common engineer in a local institution and his salary was 100 yuan (US $15) a month.

One weekend, my parents took me went shopping in downtown of Chongqing, in at the Chongqing Department. One weekend, my parents took me shopping in downtown Chongqing at the Chongqing Department

One weekend, my parents took me went shopping in downtown of Chongqing, in the Chongqing Dept. One weekend, my parents took me shopping in downtown Chongqing, in the Chongqing Dept.

Store, where a steel-made escalator connectsed the ground floor to the 5th floor. Store, where a steel escalator connected the ground floor to the 5th floor.

I see. LangCorrect split the sentence at the period (.) after Dept.

Store, a. A steel-made escalator connects the ground floor to the 5th floor. Store. A steel escalator connects the ground floor to the 5th floor.

I think this was supposed to connect to the last sentence. Together, you could phrase: "One weekend, my parents took me shopping in downtown Chongqing. We went to the Chongqing Dept Store, where a steel escalator connects the ground floor to the 5th floor.

When people stepped onto it, then it would auto-transfercarry them up to a higher floor. When people stepped onto it, it would carry them up to a higher floor.

When people stepped onto it, then it would auto-transferport them up to a higher floor. When people stepped onto it, it would transport them up to a higher floor.

"auto-transfer" sounds like you're transferring files from a computer to a phone, or something digital. "Transport" or "move" is more appropriate for moving physical things or people.

One saleswoman standeood by, speaking loudly:, "Anyone who wants to go to thea higher floor must pay 0.1 Yuan each time! One saleswoman stood by, speaking loudly, "Anyone who wants to go to a higher floor must pay 0.1 Yuan each time!

One saleswoman standeood by, speakhouting loudly: "Anyone who wants to go to thea higher floor must pay 0.1 Yuan each time!per trip!" One saleswoman stood by, shouting loudly: "Anyone who wants to go to a higher floor must pay 0.1 Yuan per trip!"

"each time" is fine, "per trip" just sounds a little more formal and something that a retail employee would say.

Or it's free to go by the walkuse the stairs on foot over there just like before. Or it's free to use the stairs over there just like before.

Or it's free to go by the walkIt was still free to take the stairs on foot over thereto go up like before. It was still free to take the stairs on foot to go up like before.

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If the last two sentence were supposed to be what the employee was shouting, you can combine them like this: "Anyone who wants to go to a higher floor must pay 0.1 Yuan per trip! It is still free to take the stairs up like before."

My father quickly paid 0.5 Yuan for the 5 of us and was injoined the queue. My father quickly paid 0.5 Yuan for the 5 of us and joined the queue.

優しい！

My father quickly paid 0.5 Yuan for the 5 of us and wase lined up in the queue. My father quickly paid 0.5 Yuan for the 5 of us and we lined up in the queue.

TI found the picture which wais attached below was I found on the net. I found the picture which is attached below on the net.

TI found the picture which was attached below was I found on the net. I found the picture attached below on the net.

Actually, my experiencememory is that it was more crowded than ithat. Actually, my memory is that it was more crowded than that.

or Actually, I remember that it was more crowded than that.

Actually, mMy experience was actually more crowded than it looks in the photograph though. My experience was actually more crowded than it looks in the photograph though.