Investments in the aArts

People argue whether thosethat money invested in the arts should be allocated to improve public services and city infrastructures in the city.

"Whether" typically implies two distinct choices, here it's really one

To preserve ancient works, museums and galleries have spent huge amount of money to build their exhibition hall and have created appropriate environment for those vulnerable treasures.

Visiting historical exhibitions will help the younger generations to build national confidence and increase cultural identity.

Meanwhile historical constructionsarchitecture with unique art styles are always appealing tourists from all over the world and contribute to economic growth.

Improving infrastructures willcan benefit the whole society.

For example, updating the road system and communication facilities can increase manufacturing efficiency and lower the costs, encouraging companies to establish their factories in the city and create job opportunities.

Schools, hospitals, water andsupply, electricityal supply, and sanitation facilities have direct impacts on the quality of life.

Communities with better public services and facilities will attract more people to settle down.

In my opinion, with limited revenue the government should put priority ton infrastructures, because it will lead to more industrial development and economic growth.

While theYet, investments in the arts, especially in relic preservation and old building maintenance, are still significant.

The role of the government cannot be completely replaced by the private sectors because they usually avoid getting involved in projects with low profit margin.

For instance, making professional companies take over sewage disposal, which usually gets paid off, andso those companies will be willing to carry out the task.

Investments in the arts

People argue whether those money invested in the arts should be allocated to improve public services and infrastructures in the city.

In my opinion, although investing in facilities obviously earns back much more obviously, funding for the arts is still necessary.

"obviously" sounds a bit informal here

To preserve ancient works, museums and galleries have spent huge amounts of money to build their exhibition halls and have created an appropriate environment for those vulnerable treasures.

Visiting historical exhibitions will help the young generation to build their national confidencpride and increase cultural identity.

Meanwhile historical constructions with a unique art style always appeal to tourists from all over the world and contribute to economic growth.

Improving infrastructures will benefit the whole society.

While the investments in the arts, especially in relic preservation and old building maintenance, are still significant.

This should be combined with the previous sentence, since it is a fragment.

For instance, making professional companies take over sewage disposal, which usually gets paid off, and those companies will be willing to carry out the task.

This sentence is slightly confusing