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Nov. 11, 2023

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Investment on Children

According to the article, 82% of Japanese people surveyed felt that children of today are likely to be financially worse off than their parents' generation when they grow up. This result is reasonable because Japanese government impose heavy taxes on young workers to maintain pension fund and healthcare system. People aged 65 and older can benefit from clinical services at lower cost and receive higher pension than young generation even though taxes of past were much lower than that of today. Most people are aware that healthcare system will be collapsed within a few decades. However, Population aged 65 and older accounts for 30% so that they have significant impact on policy making. I don't mean to blame elderly people for exploiting government budget. Law makers should discuss vigorously to streamline social security system and increase investment on children and young parents. Although it has reached the point where nobody can stop aging society, nothing is more important than children.
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People aged 65 and older can benefit from clinical services at lower cost and receive higher pension than young generation even though taxes of past were much lower than that of today.

Law makers should discuss vigorously to streamline social security system and increase investment on children and young parents.

Although it has reached the point where nobody can stop aging society, nothing is more important than children.

Please share your opinion about your countries.

Investment on Children


Investment oin Children Investment in Children

Investment oin Children Investment in Children

According to the article, 82% of Japanese people surveyed felt that children of today are likely to be financially worse off than their parents' generation when they grow up.


According to the article, 82% of Japanese people surveyed felt that today's children of today are likely to be financially worse off than their parents' generation when they grow up. According to the article, 82% of Japanese people surveyed felt that today's children are likely to be financially worse off than their parents' generation when they grow up.

This result is reasonable because Japanese government impose heavy taxes on young workers to maintain pension fund and healthcare system.


This result is reasonable because the Japanese government has imposed heavy taxes on young workers to maintain pension funds and the healthcare system. This result is reasonable because the Japanese government has imposed heavy taxes on young workers to maintain pension funds and the healthcare system.

This result is reasonable becausmay be due to the fact that the Japanese government impose heavy taxes on young workers to maintain pension fund and healthcare system. This may be due to the fact that the Japanese government impose heavy taxes on young workers to maintain pension fund and healthcare system.

Original line was fine, but "result" isn't typically used this way. "The government imposes heavy fines on young workers which results in younger workers being worse off." is something you can say, but "...which results in people believing that children will be worse off when they grow up" feels a bit off. I want the "result" to refer to the idea that children will be worse off when they grow up, not that people believe this will be the case.

People aged 65 and older can benefit from clinical services at lower cost and receive higher pension than young generation even though taxes of past were much lower than that of today.


People aged 65 and older can benefit from clinical services at lower cost and receive a higher pension than the younger generation even though the taxes of the past were much lower than that of today. People aged 65 and older can benefit from clinical services at lower cost and receive a higher pension than the younger generation even though the taxes of the past were much lower than today.

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Most people are aware that healthcare system will be collapsed within a few decades.


Most people are aware that the healthcare system will be collapsed within a few decades. Most people are aware that the healthcare system will collapse within a few decades.

However, Population aged 65 and older accounts for 30% so that they have significant impact on policy making.


However, Populationthe those aged 65 and older accounts for 30% sof thate population, so they have significant impact on policy making. However, the those aged 65 and older accounts for 30% of the population, so they have significant impact on policy making.

However, P30% of the population agedis 65 andor older accounts for 30% so that, so they have a significant impact on policy making. However, 30% of the population is 65 or older, so they have a significant impact on policy making.

However, Populationpeople aged 65 and older accounts for 30% of the voting population so that they have significant impact on policy making. However, people aged 65 and older account for 30% of the voting population so that they have significant impact on policy making.

I don't mean to blame elderly people for exploiting government budget.


I don't mean to blame elderly people for exploiting the government budget. I don't mean to blame elderly people for exploiting the government budget.

I don't mean to blame elderly people for exploiting government budgevoting in their best interest. I don't mean to blame elderly people for voting in their best interest.

Phrasing it like "exploiting the government budget" makes it sound like you do blame them. "Now I'm not saying the food at this restaurant is borderline inedible, but..." That kind of feeling. "Voting in their best interest" is a more positive framing that shows respect to the other party, even though you might disagree.

Law makers should discuss vigorously to streamline social security system and increase investment on children and young parents.


Law makers should discuss vigorously todiscuss streamlineing social security system and increaseing investment oin children and young parents. Lawmakers should vigorously discuss streamlining social security system and increasing investment in children and young parents.

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Although it has reached the point where nobody can stop aging society, nothing is more important than children.


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Although it has reached the point where nobody can stop the aging of society, nothing is more important than children. Although it has reached the point where nobody can stop the aging of society, nothing is more important than children.

Please share your opinion about your countries.


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