Dec. 10, 2019
INSTANT KARMA
Karma may strike you back whenever you least expect it
It happened in Washington, USA. 42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours on August 25th in 2019. He reported his car stolen from the parking lot1 at the Tin Hat Tavern. The police arrived and started the investigation. The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4.
The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business5 across the street6 as the other thief took his car. The other thief was very confident and quick as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of the William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door and drive away from the parking lot1. The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on feet9 but wasn’t fast enough to do so.
The further investigation revealed that Mr. Kelly had already had existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars. The funniest part though is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well! So, in the end, although Mr. Kelly called the cops to catch the thief of his car, he eventually called on himself and on top of that the car hasn’t been found yet. He will certainly think twice the next time before calling the police after committing a crime.
INSTANT KARMA
Karma may strike you back wheneverwhen you least expect it
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42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours on August 25th in, 2019.
He reported his car stolen from the parking lot1 at the Tin Hat Tavern parking lot.
The police arrived and started the investigationg.
This is just another option aside from the correction you already received!
The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime, and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4.
¶resulted in Kelley getting put behind bars.
Since Kelley is the one getting arrested and not the person who stole the car as we would expect, you need to specify.
The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business5 across the street6 as the other thief took his car.
The other thief was very confident and quick, as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of the William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door, and drive away from the parking lot1.
The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on feet9oot but wasn’t fast enough to do so.
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Kelly had already had an existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars.
"behind bars" is a fixed expression; no article needed!
The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the saiaforementioned crime, but also that his truck hasn’t been found yet as well!
Kelly called the cops to catch the thief ofwho stole his car, he eventupractically called the police on himself, and on top of that, the car hasn’t been found yet.
He will certainly think twice the next time before calling the police after committing a crime.
INSTANT KARMA
Karma may strike you back whenever you least expect it
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The original version is also correct, but my correction sounds more natural to me.
ItThis happened in Washington, USA.
42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours onf August 25th in 2019.
He reported his car stolen from the parking lot1 at the Tin Hat Tavern.
The police arrived and started thean investigation.
Yours is not incorrect, but mine perhaps sounds more natural.
The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime, and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4.
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Punctuation.
The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business5 across the street6 as the other thief took his car.
The other thief was very confident and quick as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of the William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door and drive away from the parking lot1.
The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on feeoot9 but wasn’t fast enough to do so.
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The further investigation revealed that Mr.
Kelly had already had an existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars.
The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime, but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well!
Punctuation.
So, in the end, although Mr.
Kelly called the cops to catch the thief of his car, he evenactually called them on himself, and on top of that, the car hasn’t been found yet.
This seems more natural to me.
He will certainly think twice the next time beforhe callings the police after committing a crime.
He will certainly think twice the next time he calls the police...
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He will certainly think twice next time before calling the police...
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Very interesting, and glad to see you here! ))
Dec. 10, 2019
Hah, thanks! Appreciate your corrections
Dec. 10, 2019
The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime, but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well!
That's good. I doubted about combining the but ,,as well,, words
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Karma may strike you back whenever you least expect it Karma may strike The original version is also correct, but my correction sounds more natural to me. Karma may strike |
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It happened in Washington, USA.
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42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours on August 25th in 2019. 42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours o 42 year-old William Kelley called the police in the early morning hours on August 25 |
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He reported his car stolen from the parking lot1 at the Tin Hat Tavern. This sentence has been marked as perfect! He reported his car stolen from the |
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The police arrived and started the investigation. The police arrived and started Yours is not incorrect, but mine perhaps sounds more natural. The police arrived and started This is just another option aside from the correction you already received! |
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The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4. The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video2 from the scene of crime, and managed3 to pick up some details, which made the guy the CSI and got him behind the bars4. Punctuation. The cops examined the evidence, a surveillance video Since Kelley is the one getting arrested and not the person who stole the car as we would expect, you need to specify. |
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The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business5 across the street6 as the other thief took his car. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The video revealed that William Kelley was actually stealing from a business |
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The other thief was very confident and quick as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of the William Kelley’s pick-up, unlock the door and drive away from the parking lot1. The other thief was very confident and quick as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed7 of The other thief was very confident and quick, as it only took him several seconds to throw his bicycle into the bed |
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The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on feet9 but wasn’t fast enough to do so. The owner of the car tried to catch up8 with the thief on f The owner of the car tried to catch up |
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The further investigation revealed that Mr. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Kelly had already had existing warrant, which will increase his term behind the bars. Kelly Kelly "behind bars" is a fixed expression; no article needed! |
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The funniest part though is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well! The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the said crime, but his truck hasn’t been found yet as well! Punctuation. The funniest part, though, is that not only was William arrested because of the |
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So, in the end, although Mr. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Kelly called the cops to catch the thief of his car, he eventually called on himself and on top of that the car hasn’t been found yet. Kelly called the cops to catch the thief of his car, he This seems more natural to me. Kelly called the cops to catch the thief |
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He will certainly think twice the next time before calling the police after committing a crime. He will certainly think twice the next time He will certainly think twice the next time he calls the police... OR He will certainly think twice next time before calling the police... This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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