Sept. 25, 2020
Indian society structure is difference.
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From the West to the East, history is the best teacher to show authorities how to build a regime, make the society auto-work well, and depress uprisings. It directly shows a principle; violence is the significant element, as a footstone when a new regime is forming. But the interesting situation is this principle is not the answer in every country, especially in India. Even now, India still confronts a basket of social issues, such as a deep-set caste system, a reeled regime, and growing religious conflicts. Compared with China, which is the same as one of the countries of four ancient civilizations, India cut its development path. Some historians suggest the doomed failure of India’s development because it had taken its foot in the wrong step at the beginning. The rising of India is based on Vedas, which is the oldest scripture in the world and is the cornerstone of sharpening Indian society. In other words, India is born in religion, not violence. And that is the huge difference with other countries, that religion power is great. In the short term, religion plays a good role in India, which could reduce the conflicts between tribes, keep society stable, and bring a short-term boom. But in the long-term, it is incrementally toxic India; When the hierarchy is formidable entrenching, the society will turn to bust and lose vigor. China did a good job in this realm which completely separated religions and politics. If some want to make India great again, unity is the key, and then religion will be one of the inevitable roadblocks on the path.
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You could also say, "The structure of Indian society is different than...[that of Western countries, than China, etc.]" but you would need to specify what you're comparing it to.
From the West to the East, history is the best teacher to showwhen it comes to showing government authorities how to build a regimstate, make the society auto-work well, and depressrun smoothly, and discourage uprisings.
The phrase "show authorities how to build a regime" has a strongly totalitarian feel. The way I've reworded it is more neutral, but I'm not certain if your original subtext was intentional or not. My apologies if it was and I've now changed it! In addition, "auto-work" is not a phrase in English, so I took my best guess at correcting it.
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I wasn't sure what you meant by "reeled regime," so this is my best guess but it may not match what you're trying to say.
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I'm not 100% sure what you mean by "cut its development path" - do you mean it was shorter than China's?
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In the short term, religion plays a good role in India, which and could reduce the conflicts between tribes, keep society stable, and bring a short-term boom.
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Sept. 25, 2020
thank you very much. this is my first paragraph. do you feel this is a good starting? by the way, thank your correction.
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Indian society structure is difference.
You could also say, "The structure of Indian society is different than...[that of Western countries, than China, etc.]" but you would need to specify what you're comparing it to. |
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From the West to the East, history is the best teacher to show authorities how to build a regime, make the society auto-work well, and depress uprisings. From the West to the East, history is the best teacher The phrase "show authorities how to build a regime" has a strongly totalitarian feel. The way I've reworded it is more neutral, but I'm not certain if your original subtext was intentional or not. My apologies if it was and I've now changed it! In addition, "auto-work" is not a phrase in English, so I took my best guess at correcting it. |
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It directly shows a principle; violence is the significant element, as a footstone when a new regime is forming.
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But the interesting situation is this principle is not the answer in every country, especially in India. But |
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Even now, India still confronts a basket of social issues, such as a deep-set caste system, a reeled regime, and growing religious conflicts. Even now, India I wasn't sure what you meant by "reeled regime," so this is my best guess but it may not match what you're trying to say. |
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Compared with China, which is the same as one of the countries of four ancient civilizations, India cut its development path. Compared with China, which is I'm not 100% sure what you mean by "cut its development path" - do you mean it was shorter than China's? |
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Some historians suggest the doomed failure of India’s development because it had taken its foot in the wrong step at the beginning. Some historians suggest th |
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The rising of India is based on Vedas, which is the oldest scripture in the world and is the cornerstone of sharpening Indian society. The ris |
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In other words, India is born in religion, not violence. In other words, India |
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And that is the huge difference with other countries, that religion power is great. And that is the |
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In the short term, religion plays a good role in India, which could reduce the conflicts between tribes, keep society stable, and bring a short-term boom. In the short term, religion plays a good role in India |
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But in the long-term, it is incrementally toxic India; When the hierarchy is formidable entrenching, the society will turn to bust and lose vigor. But in the long |
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China did a good job in this realm which completely separated religions and politics. China did a good job in this area |
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If some want to make India great again, unity is the key, and then religion will be one of the inevitable roadblocks on the path. If |
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[Just help me to correct the grammar. |
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