July 8, 2024
Improvement
Communicate on a regular basis with the BOD on process updates.
Develop, monitor and update written operating procedures and process control strategies for X.
Maintain and troubleshoot the process control system.
Lead the team in monitoring the raw material inspection, assembly, and packaging at Y factory in Z (2 weeks).
Train the process technicians and motivate them on the process and procedures.
Lead and support cross-functional team for process instruction and packaging instruction.
Accomplishment:
Play an active and impactful role in successfully launching product after 2 weeks of production.
Improvement
Communicate on a regular basis with the BOD on process updates.
Develop, monitor, and update written operating procedures and process control strategies for X.
Maintain and troubleshoot the process control system.
Lead the team in monitoring the raw material inspection, assembly, and packaging at Y factory in Z (2 weeks).
Train the process technicians and motivate them on the process and procedures.
Lead and support cross-functional team for process instruction and packaging instruction.
Accomplishment: Play an active and impactful role in successfully launching product after 2 weeks of production.
Feedback
If this is a description of experience on a resume, I would probably write the main verbs in past tense instead of the infinitive.
July 10, 2024
Thank you for your advice!^^
Improvement
Communicate on a regular basis with the BOD on process updates.
Develop, monitor and update written operating procedures and process control strategies for X.
Maintain and troubleshoot the process control system.
Lead the team in monitoring the raw material inspection, assembly, and packaging at Y factory in Z (2 weeks).
Train the process technicians and motiveducate them on the process and procedures.
I think "educate" might be a better word based on the context of this sentence!
Lead and support a cross-functional team for process instruction and packaging instruction.
You could also say "Lead and support *the* cross-functional team" if there is one team you are talking about specifically.
Accomplishment: Play an active and impactful role in successfully launching product after 2 weeks of production.
Feedback
This looks great!
July 10, 2024
Thank you for your help!
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Lead the team in monitoring the raw material inspection, assembly, and packaging at Y factory in Z (2 weeks). This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Train the process technicians and motivate them on the process and procedures. Train the process technicians and I think "educate" might be a better word based on the context of this sentence! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Lead and support cross-functional team for process instruction and packaging instruction. Lead and support a cross-functional team for process instruction and packaging instruction. You could also say "Lead and support *the* cross-functional team" if there is one team you are talking about specifically. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Accomplishment: Play an active and impactful role in successfully launching product after 2 weeks of production. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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