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March 16, 2023

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I'm not a vampire - Falling in Reverse

I just heard a song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed. I think his voice is very rich and deep like his singing style, but there is much strength exactly in this song. Therefore, this senses not like a song but like a very impressing movie or desperate confession.

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I'm not a vampire - Falling in Reverse

I just heard a song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed.

I think his voice is very rich and deep like his singing style, but there is mucha lot of strength exactly in this song.

Therefore, this sensdoes not feel like a song but like a very impressingve movie or a desperate confession.

I'm not a vampire - Falling in Reverse

I just heard a’m impressed by the song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed.

Made it more concise. It was a purely stylistic choice, but I took the liberty to move the verb expressing your emotions to the front of the sentence, to give it an overall stronger undertone.

I think hHis voice is very rich and deep like, much befitting his singing style, butand there is mucha profound strength exactlywoven into this song.

Stylistic revisions. Changed the transition from “but” to “and” so it reads more slick.

Therefore, this senseis piece is not likeonly a song, but like a very impressing movie oralso paints the picture like a movie and pierces the listeners’ hearts like a desperate confession.

Since you were expressing a strong emotion here, I have revised the sentence so it sounds more assertive. Then I added a visual to give your passage a finishing crescendo.

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Great work! Your sentences flow very naturally and all the parts of your passage make sense. Look forward to see more from you. Thank you so much 😊

I'm not a vampire - Falling in Reverse

I think his voice is very rich and deep like his singing style, but there is much strength exactly in this ssinging style in general is very rich and deep, but this song is especially strong.

Are you trying to say that this song is more impressive than his other songs? If so phrase it like above.

Therefore, this sensdoes not sound like a song but like a very impressingve movie or desperate confession.

To sound even better, say "This sounds more like an impressive movie or desperate confession than a song."

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Great job! Great vocab usage.

I'm not a vampire - Falling in Reverse

I just heard athe song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed.

I think his voice is very rich and deep, like his singing style, but there is mucha lot of strength exactly in this song in particular.

Therefore, this sensdoes not feel like a song but like a very impressingve movie or a desperate confession.

to make a negative, use "do/does not + verb"

I'm not a vampire - Falling in Reverse


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I just heard a song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed.


I just heard athe song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed.

I just heard a’m impressed by the song "I'm not a vampire" by Falling in Reverse and I'm still impressed.

Made it more concise. It was a purely stylistic choice, but I took the liberty to move the verb expressing your emotions to the front of the sentence, to give it an overall stronger undertone.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I think his voice is very rich and deep like his singing style, but there is much strength exactly in this song.


I think his voice is very rich and deep, like his singing style, but there is mucha lot of strength exactly in this song in particular.

I think his voice is very rich and deep like his singing style, but there is much strength exactly in this ssinging style in general is very rich and deep, but this song is especially strong.

Are you trying to say that this song is more impressive than his other songs? If so phrase it like above.

I think hHis voice is very rich and deep like, much befitting his singing style, butand there is mucha profound strength exactlywoven into this song.

Stylistic revisions. Changed the transition from “but” to “and” so it reads more slick.

I think his voice is very rich and deep like his singing style, but there is mucha lot of strength exactly in this song.

Therefore, this senses not like a song but like a very impressing movie or desperate confession.


Therefore, this sensdoes not feel like a song but like a very impressingve movie or a desperate confession.

to make a negative, use "do/does not + verb"

Therefore, this sensdoes not sound like a song but like a very impressingve movie or desperate confession.

To sound even better, say "This sounds more like an impressive movie or desperate confession than a song."

Therefore, this senseis piece is not likeonly a song, but like a very impressing movie oralso paints the picture like a movie and pierces the listeners’ hearts like a desperate confession.

Since you were expressing a strong emotion here, I have revised the sentence so it sounds more assertive. Then I added a visual to give your passage a finishing crescendo.

Therefore, this sensdoes not feel like a song but like a very impressingve movie or a desperate confession.

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