Nov. 9, 2023
Ielts writing task 1
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of over-grazing over cultivation, deforestation and other has cause devastated in earth for agriculture and the table compares the proportion of north america, europe, and oceania degare agricultural land in 1990.
Overall, it clear that the proportion of over-grazing is the highest in the pie chart, the opposite was true for other reason. Also, in the table the highest percentage was europe.
As can be seen from the pie chart, at 35 percent. The figure for grazing too much as five times as the other, at just 5%. While there was a similar witnessed in the percentage of over cultivation and deforestation, a 28% and 30% respectively. Regarding to the table, the most significant in the figure for land degraded by deforestation and over-cultivation wa belong to europe at roughly 9,8% and 7,7%. In contrast, that one of over grazing is in the second of the column, at 5,5%. Meanwhile, at 1,7%, the percentage of deforestation was as approximately nine times as that one’s in the north america at 0,2%. The proportion of over cultivation was empty so, in the north america was more. At 3,3%. However, the highest in the figure for over-grazing was belong to oceania at 11,3%, as ten times as that one’s in north america. In addition, the total land degraded was considerably as in the europe.
Ielts writing task 1
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.
The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of over-grazing over cultivation, deforestation and other has cause devastated inthe earth for's agriculture and, whilst the table compares the proportion of north america, europe, and oceania's degare agricultural land in 1990.
not sure what "degare" means
Overall, it is clear that the proportion of over-grazing is the highest in the pie chart, the opposite was true for other reason.
not sure what you meant by this "the opposite was true for other reason." i think it would be good to add what the other reason is.
Also, in the table with the highest percentage was europe., at 35%
As can be seen from the pie chart, at 35 percent.
you can merge this sentence with the one before it.
The figure for grazing too much was five times as the other, at just 5%.
you don't really use "just" when the figure is large or a large number
While there was a similar witnessed inFurthermore, the percentage of over cultivation and deforestation were similar, at 28% and 30% respectively.
Regarding to the table, the most significant in the figure for land degraded by deforestation and over-cultivation wa belonged to europe at roughly 9,8% and 7,7%.
In contrast, that one of over grazing is in the second of the column, at 5,.5%.
Meanwhile, at 1,.7%, the percentage of deforestation was as approximately nine times as that one’s inf the north america, at 0,.2%.
The proportion of over cultivation was empty so, in the north america was more.higher, at 3.3%
At 3,3%.
you can merge the two sentences:)
However, the highest in the figure for over-grazing was belonged to oceania at 11,3%, as ten times as that one’s inf north america.
In addition, the total land degraded was considerably as in thee in europe.
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next time, would you be able to add the figures and graphs because its a bit tough to correct it without it:)
Nov. 10, 2023
Thank you so much for your detailed review. I don't know how to upload images into this website, would you mind showing me how?
Nov. 10, 2023
When you go to write and upload your text, at the bottom it should say "image" and choose file, and i think you can upload there.
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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of over-grazing over cultivation, deforestation and other has cause devastated in earth for agriculture and the table compares the proportion of north america, europe, and oceania degare agricultural land in 1990. The pie chart illustrates the percentage of over-grazing over cultivation, deforestation and other has not sure what "degare" means |
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Overall, it clear that the proportion of over-grazing is the highest in the pie chart, the opposite was true for other reason. Overall, it is clear that the proportion of over-grazing is not sure what you meant by this "the opposite was true for other reason." i think it would be good to add what the other reason is. |
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Also, in the table the highest percentage was europe. Also, |
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As can be seen from the pie chart, at 35 percent.
you can merge this sentence with the one before it. |
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The figure for grazing too much as five times as the other, at just 5%. The figure for grazing too much was five times you don't really use "just" when the figure is large or a large number |
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While there was a similar witnessed in the percentage of over cultivation and deforestation, a 28% and 30% respectively.
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Regarding to the table, the most significant in the figure for land degraded by deforestation and over-cultivation wa belong to europe at roughly 9,8% and 7,7%. Regarding |
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In contrast, that one of over grazing is in the second of the column, at 5,5%. In contrast, |
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Meanwhile, at 1,7%, the percentage of deforestation was as approximately nine times as that one’s in the north america at 0,2%. Meanwhile, at 1 |
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The proportion of over cultivation was empty so, in the north america was more. The proportion of over cultivation was empty so, |
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At 3,3%.
you can merge the two sentences:) |
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However, the highest in the figure for over-grazing was belong to oceania at 11,3%, as ten times as that one’s in north america. However, the highest in the figure for over-grazing |
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In addition, the total land degraded was considerably as in the europe. In addition, the total land degraded was considerabl |
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