March 4, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1
The chart illustrates the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
We can clearly see that USA is superior in all three kinds of medals. Even the number of gold medals of this country is dramatical more than the total amount of almost all rival countries. If we look at more closely, we can see that USA has approximately 2300 medals.
Sole comparable Country in the chart is Soviet Union. This country has 1000 medals in total and if we compare this two rival countries, we can estimate that USA has more than the double of Soviet Union's total number of medals.
All other ten countries have close number of medals. They are stuck between approximately 450-600 medals. Only United Kingdom is somewhat successful with 600 medals. Other have almost same number of medals in total.
However, it should not be forgotten that all of these countries have low population and located in relatively small geographies.
To sum up, the countries, this have diversified and high population can show more success in the Olympics. Success and of course the number of medals related with the number of athletes of that country.
Hello all,
I'm Selin and I'm preparing for IELTS Academic.
I would be really appreciated, if you check my Ielts writing samples.
This one is normally the describing of a chart but unfortunately I can not upload a picture.
Thank you in advance :)
IELTS Writing Task 1
The chart illustrates the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
We can clearly see that USA is superior in all three kinds of medalranked the highest in all three categories.
Even the number of gold medals of this country is dramaticalthey've earned is more than the total amount of almost all the rival countries combined.
If we look at it more closely, we can see that the USA has approximately 2300 medals.
SoleThe only comparable Ccountry ion the chart is the Soviet Union.
This countryIt has 1000 medals in total, and, if we compare thisese two rival countries, we can estimate that the USA has more than the double the number of Soviet Union's total number of medals.
AllThe other ten countries have closare similar in the number of medals that they've earned.
They are stuck between approximately 450-600 medals.
Only the United Kingdom is somewhat successful, with 600 medals.
OThe others have almost same number of medals in totalcombined.
However, it should not be forgotten that all of these countries have low populations and located inare relatively small geographies.
To sum up, the countries, thisat have diversified and highhigh and diverse population can shows are more success inful at the Olympics.
Success andis, of course, the number of medals related withcompared to the number of athletes ofcompeting for that country.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections! One area that you might want to focus on is when to put the definite article "the", as I noticed that you tended to leave it out.
March 5, 2022
I totally agree with you, I noticed this problem too.
Thank you so much!
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The chart illustrates the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We can clearly see that USA is superior in all three kinds of medals. We can clearly see that USA is |
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Even the number of gold medals of this country is dramatical more than the total amount of almost all rival countries. Even the number of gold medals |
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If we look at more closely, we can see that USA has approximately 2300 medals. If we look at it more closely, we can see that the USA has approximately 2300 medals. |
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Sole comparable Country in the chart is Soviet Union.
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This country has 1000 medals in total and if we compare this two rival countries, we can estimate that USA has more than the double of Soviet Union's total number of medals.
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All other ten countries have close number of medals.
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They are stuck between approximately 450-600 medals. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Only United Kingdom is somewhat successful with 600 medals. Only the United Kingdom is somewhat successful, with 600 medals. |
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Other have almost same number of medals in total.
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However, it should not be forgotten that all of these countries have low population and located in relatively small geographies. However, it should not be forgotten that all of these countries have low populations and |
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To sum up, the countries, this have diversified and high population can show more success in the Olympics. To sum up, the countries |
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Success and of course the number of medals related with the number of athletes of that country. Success |
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