Feb. 2, 2023
IELTS Writing Practice 7
Topic: New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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With the development of new technologies and brilliant business models, how people purchase and sell has changed their lifestyles significantly. From my personal experiences, I totally agree with this opinion.
For one thing, thanks to the improvements in financial technology and the prevalence of credit cards and smartphones, online shopping has become one of the most popular ways of spending. In the past, we could not buy daily groceries and clothing without visiting the physical stores. Today, these techniques allow us to order things anywhere and anytime with a few clicks on the digital service, saving a lot of time and efforts while still meeting our needs.
For another, more and more successful business models were built because of potential needs of modern people were discovered. Take food delivery service for example. This service has been used for years mostly for fast food chain stores and beverage shops, though, it is now contracted with most of the restaurants and food stores in the city, sending freshly cooked meals to the hungry customers. It is obvious that before the food delivery firms were founded, people have less options of food if they do not go to the stores themselves.
Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks and hidden threat of these technologies such as impulsive buying and health problem. The convenience of shopping websites and easy payments increase the extra expenditures on unnecessary things. Also, the efficient delivery of snacks and drinks raise the consumption of fat, sugar and salt, causing obesity and diabetes for people lacking self-control. Therefore, we should focus on our real needs to avoid buying excessive things.
In conclusion, it will become a lot more difficult and time consuming to satisfy people’s needs without the use of technology, however; consumers still have to be aware of the risks so that they can make good use of technology to improve their lives.
From my personal experiences, I totally agree with this opinion.
You could also omit my from 'personal experience' since it insinuates that it is your experience.
For one thing, thanks to the improvements in financial technology and the prevalence of credit cards and smartphones, online shopping has become one of the most popular ways of spending.
In the past, we could not buy daily groceries and clothing without visiting the physical stores.
Today, these techniques allow us to order things anywhere and anytime with a few clicks on the digital service, saving a lot of time and efforts while still meeting our needs.
For another, more and more successful business models were built because of potential needs of modern people were discovered.
Take food delivery services for example.
Thisese services hasve been used for years, mostly for fast food chain stores and beverage shops, t. Though, it is now contracted with most of the restaurants and food stores in the city, sending freshly cooked meals to the hungry customers.
It is obvious that before the food delivery firms were founded, people haved less food options of food if they doid not go to the stores themselves.
Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks and hidden threats of these technologies such as impulsive buying and health problems.
The convenience of shopping websites and easy payments has increased the extra expenditures on unnecessary things.
Also, the efficient delivery of snacks and drinks raise the consumption of fat, sugar and salt, while also simultaneously causing obesity and diabetes for people lacking in self-control.
Therefore, we should focus on our real needs to avoid buying excessive things.
In conclusion, it will become a lot more difficult and time consuming to satisfy people’s needs without the use of technology, h. However;, consumers still have to be aware of the risks so that they can make good use of technology to improve their lives.
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IELTS Writing Practice 7 |
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Topic: New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. |
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To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? |
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With the development of new technologies and brilliant business models, how people purchase and sell has changed their lifestyles significantly. |
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From my personal experiences, I totally agree with this opinion. From my personal experience You could also omit my from 'personal experience' since it insinuates that it is your experience. |
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For one thing, thanks to the improvements in financial technology and the prevalence of credit cards and smartphones, online shopping has become one of the most popular ways of spending. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the past, we could not buy daily groceries and clothing without visiting the physical stores. In the past, we could not buy daily groceries and clothing without visiting |
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Today, these techniques allow us to order things anywhere and anytime with a few clicks on the digital service, saving a lot of time and efforts while still meeting our needs. Today, these techniques allow us to order things anywhere and anytime with a few clicks on the digital service, saving a lot of time and effort |
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For another, more and more successful business models were built because of potential needs of modern people were discovered. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Take food delivery service for example. Take food delivery services for example. |
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This service has been used for years mostly for fast food chain stores and beverage shops, though, it is now contracted with most of the restaurants and food stores in the city, sending freshly cooked meals to the hungry customers. Th |
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It is obvious that before the food delivery firms were founded, people have less options of food if they do not go to the stores themselves. It is obvious that before the food delivery firms were founded, people ha |
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Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks and hidden threat of these technologies such as impulsive buying and health problem. Nevertheless, there are some drawbacks and hidden threats of these technologies such as impulsive buying and health problems. |
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The convenience of shopping websites and easy payments increase the extra expenditures on unnecessary things. The convenience of shopping websites and easy payments has increased the extra expenditures on unnecessary things. |
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Also, the efficient delivery of snacks and drinks raise the consumption of fat, sugar and salt, causing obesity and diabetes for people lacking self-control. Also, the efficient delivery of snacks and drinks raise the consumption of fat, sugar and salt |
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Therefore, we should focus on our real needs to avoid buying excessive things. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In conclusion, it will become a lot more difficult and time consuming to satisfy people’s needs without the use of technology, however; consumers still have to be aware of the risks so that they can make good use of technology to improve their lives. In conclusion, it will become a lot more difficult and time consuming to satisfy people’s needs without the use of technology |
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