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Levels of youth crime are rapidly increasing rapidly in most cities a round the world.

it sounds more natural if you swap rapidly and increasing.

What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

I don't think you need this sentence, because you repeat it later on.

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sorry, i'm not sure what you mean here. is this what you meant?

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i think this should be your last sentence, because its your conclusion

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i dont think you need this sentence.

In today's’ modern era, crime ihas become a major prpoblem ofor the govenrnment.

We use the past tense here since the crime is already a problem.

Although this tendency may lead to negative results, the number of crimes by the young is growing dramatically.

Not really sure how this connects to the previous sentence.

This essay will look at some of the reasons a nd solutions for this.

On the one hand,e of the most dominant factors of lawbreaking functions fromwith regard to young folks has to do with financial issues as an offspring of beingresulting from abandonedment by both their guardians and society.

I removed "One the one hand" because the next sentence doesn't have something that compares it with.

"functions from" doesn't really make sense here.

I also changed the last part of the sentence to make it sound more natural.

Moreover, the economic issue is something that children have to struggle with when their parents get divorced.

Furthermore, adverse data which contributeds as another actor.

This sentence doesn't make sense in the flow of your essay.

For instance, not only children who are inuted ignored ignoregnored not only break the logistical rules but they are also encouraged to get involved with some illegal activities, such as hacking others woand utilizeing their identities in order to access their bank accounts.

Not sure what "inuted" is supposed to mean. I tried my best to fix it.

I also replaced one of the "ignore"s so that it doesn't sound as repetitive.

On the other hand, to iron out thisresolve crisis, allocating some fortumoney by either authorities or philanthrotrapists to provide occupational opportunities for juniors may be effective.

"to iron out" doesn't sound right here.

Additionally, preparing some course to nenhance their abilities to resolve in the vocational market.

In addition, imposing some law to supervise the internet seems to be vital to stop which can devastateing impressions on individuals.

For instance,While neither system or penalising are notatic changes nor penalization is adequate to completely restrinct the abusers of this realm, hence, fortifying them can have some positive footprints as well.

The meaning of "system" is pretty vague here. I also don't think "For instance" is needed.

It doesn't make sense to say that the two systems are completely inadequate and then try to argue for their fortification. Instead, phrase it so that they are seen as partially effective.

In conclusion, it would not be an insurmountable problem if the reasons behind bit were discovered.

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