July 8, 2022
ielts double question essay
Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want.
Is this a good way to raise children?
What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?
There are many parents spoil their children by allowing them to get whatever they want and do anything without consequences. However many thought that this is a good parenting technique allowing their children the freedom of expression. This essay will discuss why spoiling children will allow them to go make trouble and how it would make them into an irresponsible man-child in the future.
By spoiling children too much, it will enable their bad behaviour to go uncheck. Many children that spoil too much tend to become uncontrollable and like to cause trouble to the people surround them. In many instances, children who are spoiled, like to cause trouble in their neighbourhood and troubling neighbour, teacher, and parent alike. Thus, it is likely that children who are spoiled more likely to cause problems to everyone.
Some children who grew up in spoil household, likely to grow up into irresponsible adult. By enabling these behaviours children tend to grow up too relying on their parent and won’t be able to do anything on their own. For example, many Japanese adults still live with their parent despite being in their 30s without doing anything to look for a job or even helping their parents around the house. This behaviour caused by their family spoiling them and could have been avoided if their parent could have put a stop on this behaviour.
It's fine to spoil children from time to time however there will be consequence if they are spoiled too much. Being able to do whatever they make children more likely to caused trouble. They are also more likely to grew up being parasite on the family.
There are many who parents spoil their children by allowing them to get whatever they want and do anything without consequences.
However mMany thoughink that this is a good parenting technique, allowing their children the freedom of expression.
I deleted "However" because it is not introducing a contrasting argument.
This essay will discuss why spoiling children will allow them to go and make trouble and how it would make them into an irresponsible man-children in the future.
Man-child or man-children are gendered words that refers to adult men. I wouldn't use them to refer to a group of people whose gender is unclear or variable.
By sSpoiling children too much, it will enable their bad behaviour to go unchecked.
Many children that are spoiled too much tend to become uncontrollable and likely to cause trouble to the people surrounding them.
In many instances, children who are spoiled, like to cause trouble in their neighbourhood and troublingo their neighbours, teachers, and parents alike.
Thus, it is likely that children who are spoiled more likely to cause problems to everyone.
Some children who grew up in spoiled in their household,s are likely to grow up into irresponsible adults.
By enabling these behaviours, children tend to grow up too relying on their parents too much and won’t be able to do anything on their own.
For example, many Japanese adults still live with their parents despite being in their 30s, without doing anything to look for a job or even helping their parents around the house.
This behaviour is caused by their family spoiling them, and it could have been avoided if their parent cwould have put a stop ton this behaviour.
It's fine to spoil children from time to time, however, there will be consequences if they are spoiled too much.
Being able to do whatever they want makes children more likely to caused trouble.
They are also more likely to greow up being parasite ons to the family.
Feedback
Good English, only a few mistakes. I would suggest you try to diversify your vocabulary. Instead of repeating your words and phrases ("spoiled" or "are likely to" in this case), try to find synonyms or describe your words in other ways. Good luck!
July 8, 2022
Thank you very much :)
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ielts double question essay |
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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. |
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Is this a good way to raise children? |
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What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? |
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There are many parents spoil their children by allowing them to get whatever they want and do anything without consequences. There are many who parents spoil their children by allowing them to get whatever they want and do anything without consequences. |
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However many though that this is a good parenting technique allowing their children the freedom of expression.
I deleted "However" because it is not introducing a contrasting argument. |
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This essay will discuss why spoiling children will allow them to go and make trouble and how it would make them into an irresponsible man-child in the future. This essay will discuss why spoiling children will allow them to go and make trouble and how it would make them into Man-child or man-children are gendered words that refers to adult men. I wouldn't use them to refer to a group of people whose gender is unclear or variable. |
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By spoiling children too much, it will enable their bad behaviour to go uncheck.
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Many children that spoil too much tend to become uncontrollable and like to cause trouble to the people surround them. Many children that are spoiled too much tend to become uncontrollable and likely to cause trouble to the people surrounding them. |
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In many instances, children who are spoiled, like to cause trouble in their neighbourhood and troubling neighbour, teacher, and parent alike. In many instances, children who are spoiled |
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Thus, it is likely that children who are spoiled more likely to cause problems to everyone. Thus, it is likely that children who are spoiled |
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Some children who grew up in spoil household, likely to grow up into irresponsible adult. Some children who grew up |
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By enabling these behaviours children tend to grow up too relying on their parent and won’t be able to do anything on their own. By enabling these behaviours, children tend to grow up |
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For example, many Japanese adults still live with their parent despite being in their 30s without doing anything to look for a job or even helping their parents around the house. For example, many Japanese adults still live with their parents despite being in their 30s, without doing anything to look for a job or even helping their parents around the house. |
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This behaviour caused by their family spoiling them and could have been avoided if their parent could have put a stop on this behaviour. This behaviour is caused by their family spoiling them, and it could have been avoided if their parent |
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It's fine to spoil children from time to time however there will be consequence if they are spoiled too much. It's fine to spoil children from time to time, however, there will be consequences if they are spoiled too much. |
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Being able to do whatever they make children more likely to caused trouble. Being able to do whatever they want makes children more likely to cause |
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They are also more likely to grew up being parasite on the family. They are also more likely to gr |
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However many thought that this is a good parenting technique allowing their children the freedom of expression. |
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This essay will discuss why spoiling children will allow them to go make trouble and how it would make them into an irresponsible man-child in the future. |
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