Nov. 21, 2022
I Want to Be as a Premium Membership
I started to learn from the website not long ago, so many enthusiastic friends here have corrected my small essays. (some people say it's not essays, but paragraphs. I don't know how to name it accurately.)
I decided to pay a Premium on this wonderful site, but I occasionally found that Black Friday will be approaching. So I will wait for a few more days to meet a possible discount.
If there are no discounts or flash sales on Black Friday, I will update it anyway.
I Want to Be as a Premium Membership
membership is the name of the thing that you buy, you can't become it
and "to be as something" is to be similar to it, or much more commonly "to be like something," but you don't want to be like a premium member - you want to be one period!
I started to learn from theis website not long ago, so many enthusiastic friends here have corrected my small essays.
"this" is for things near the person speaking, and since you're writing about this site on this same site it felt more fitting
I decided to pay afor Premium on this wonderful site, but I occasionally found out that Black Friday will be approaching.
to pay a premium, to me, sounds like you paid a different price for something that could have been bought for a different price. what you meant was you decided to buy the premium subscription here, or you decided to pay for it (note: since you haven't yet bought it, i think you should write "I decided I should pay..." and to sound even more natural you could write "I decided I should pay for a premium membership...")
So I will wait for a few more days to meet a possible discount.
not incorrect, just sounds unnatural - i would say "to see if there's a possible discount" or "to find a potential discount"
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an essay is usually something multiple paragraphs or pages long. in my school, the definition was a minimum of 5 paragraphs to be an essay - but that was moreso a grading requirement lol. you could write a 3-paragraph essay if you wanted to, but considering a lot of essays are things written in university or research and can be up to 20+ pages, 3 paragraphs would be very short.
a paragraph is a collection of sentences about a similar topic. paragraphs can be as long or as short as you want, but they're typically... well, the book next to me has 3-4 paragraphs per page. there's about 5-10 sentences in each paragraph, just from flipping through a few pages. they're all separated with a new line (like i did in this comment) and the very first line of a new paragraph gets indented slightly to the left so they're easy to tell apart.
this is my attempt at an indent online lol. since your sentences are all about the same topic here and they're all written together with no breaks, you have written only a paragraph. not a whole essay. but i guess if you get that premium membership you want, then i guess nothing would stop you haha
Nov. 21, 2022
Thank you! You explained to me in some detail. :)
I Want to Be as a Premium Membership
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I Want to Write as a Premium Member
I started to learn from theis website not long ago,. There are so many enthusiastic friends here who have corrected my small essays.
Welcome to LangCorrect!
(sSome people say it'sthey're not essays, but paragraphs. I don't know how to name ithem accurately. )
Huh. I call them journal entries. :)
I decided to pay afor Premium Membership on this wonderful site, but I occasionally foundiscovered that Black Friday will be approaching.
So I will wait for a few more days to mseet if there's a possible discount.
If there are no discounts or flash sales on Black Friday, I will buypay for it anyway.
Your original sentence is okay. This is another way to write it.
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Well done!
Nov. 21, 2022
Thank you! I'll be writing a journal entry every day. :)
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