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osmanthus

Dec. 23, 2021

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Do you prefer to give gifts or to receive gifts?
I prefer to give gifts

I prefer to give gifts, because I love the feeling of helping others.
I hope I am valuable to society. I need more sense of belonging.
People can still find a sense of worth and belonging with time. Some are lucky to find it, but not everyone can find it. Most people only keep looking until they die.
This comes from a story in Natsume's Book of Friends. It is a story about a snowman who finds something he has forgotten. If he finds it, he will die. But the snowman doesn't fear death. He also thinks humans can find something in their life as well. The difference is that humans may not find it until their death.
Death isn't a terrible thing. It is a transmigration of life. Humans are similar to glasses and flowers in the earth. Mother Earth gave birth to us. We all return to the dust.

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I prefer to give gifts, because I love thise feeling of helping others.

I hope I am valuable forto society.

So I need more sense of belonging.

People can still find a sense of worth and belonging with time.

Morest people only keep looking until they die.

This comes from a story in Natsume's bBook of fFriends.

It is a story about how a snowman who finds something that he has forgotten.

But the snowman doesn't fear death.

He also thinks humans can also find something in their life as well.

The difference is that humans may not find it until their death.

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osmanthus

Jan. 10, 2022

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Thank you for your feedback

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I prefer to give gifts.B, because I love this feeling of helping others and. I hope I am valuable forin social and families.Soety. I need more sense of value identification.belonging. People can still find sense of worth and belonging forever.It iswith time. Some are lucky to find it.B, but not everyone can find it. More people only keep looking until they died.It just come to. This comes from a story fromin Natsume's book of friends. It is a story about how a snowman finds a somethings that he has forgotten. If he finds it, he will die. But the snowman doesn't fear it when he will die.And hedeath. He also thinks humans can also find a something in their life. The difference is that human maybe don' not find it until they died.ir death. Death isn't a terrible thing. It is a transmigration of life. Human iss are similar to glasses and flowers in the earth. Mother eEarth gave birth to us. We all return to the dust.

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Don't forget to add spaces after the comma so sentences would be separated. I couldn't state all the the feedback because it was so crowded. Do use paragraphs when you want to revolve around a new idea. The passage is good but was not stated well in some parts. Keep it up! :)

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osmanthus

Dec. 23, 2021

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Thanks for your feedback

I prefer to give gifts

I prefer to give gifts.Because I love this feeling of helping others and I hope I am valuable for social and families.So I need more sense of value identification.People still find sense of worth and belonging forever.It is lucky to find it.But not everyone can find it.More people only keep looking until they died.It just come to a story from Natsume's book of friends.It is a story about a snowman finds a things that he has forgotten.If he finds it,he will die.But the snowman don't fear it when he will die.And he thinks human also find a thing for their life.The difference is that human maybe don't find it until they died.Death isn't a terrible thing.It is a transmigration of life.Human is similar to glasses and flowers in the earth.Mother earth gave birth to us.We all return to the dust.

I prefer to give gifts.Because I love this feeling of helping others and I hope I am valuable for social and families.So I need more sense of value identification.People still find sense of worth and belonging forever.It is lucky to find it.But not everyone can find it.More people only keep looking until they died.It just come to a story from Natsume's book of friends.It is a story about a snowman finds a things that he has forgotten.If he finds it,he will die.But the snowman don't fear it when he will die.And he thinks human also find a thing in their life.The difference is that human maybe don't find it until they died.Death isn't a terrible thing.It is a transmigration of life.Human is similar to glasses and flowers in the earth.Mother earth gave birth to us.We all return to the dust.

I prefer to give gifts.B, because I love this feeling of helping others and. I hope I am valuable forin social and families.Soety. I need more sense of value identification.belonging. People can still find sense of worth and belonging forever.It iswith time. Some are lucky to find it.B, but not everyone can find it. More people only keep looking until they died.It just come to. This comes from a story fromin Natsume's book of friends. It is a story about how a snowman finds a somethings that he has forgotten. If he finds it, he will die. But the snowman doesn't fear it when he will die.And hedeath. He also thinks humans can also find a something in their life. The difference is that human maybe don' not find it until they died.ir death. Death isn't a terrible thing. It is a transmigration of life. Human iss are similar to glasses and flowers in the earth. Mother eEarth gave birth to us. We all return to the dust.

I prefer to give gifts, because I love this feeling of helping others.

I prefer to give gifts, because I love thise feeling of helping others.

I hope I am valuable for society.So I need more sense of value identification.

People still find sense of worth and belonging forever.

Some are lucky to find it.But not everyone can find it.More people only keep looking until their die.

It just come to a story from Natsume's book of friends.

It is a story about a snowman finds a things that he has forgotten.

If he finds it,he will die.

But the snowman don't fear it when he will die.

And he thinks human also find a thing in their life.

The difference is that human maybe don't find it until they died.

Death isn't a terrible thing.It is a transmigration of life.

Human is similar to glasses and flowers in the earth.

Mother earth gave birth to us.

We all return to the dust.

I hope I am valuable for society.So I need more sense of belonging.

People can still find sense of worth and belonging with time.

People can still find a sense of worth and belonging with time.

Some are lucky to find it,but not everyone can find it.More people only keep looking until they die.

This comes from a story in Natsume's book of friends.

This comes from a story in Natsume's bBook of fFriends.

It is a story about how a snowman finds something that he has forgotten.

It is a story about how a snowman who finds something that he has forgotten.

But the snowman don't fear death.

But the snowman doesn't fear death.

He also thinks humans can also find somethings in their life.

The difference is that human may not find it until their death.

The difference is that humans may not find it until their death.

Death isn't a terrible thing.

It is a transmigration of life.

Humans are similar to glasses and flowers in the earth.

Mother Earth gave birth to us.

I hope I am valuable for society.

I hope I am valuable forto society.

So I need more sense of belonging.

So I need more sense of belonging.

Some are lucky to find it,but not everyone can find it.

More people only keep looking until they die.

Morest people only keep looking until they die.

Some are lucky to find it, but not everyone can find it.

If he finds it, he will die.

He also thinks humans can also find something in their life.

He also thinks humans can also find something in their life as well.

I prefer to give gifts, because I love the feeling of helping others.

I hope I am valuable to society.

So I need more senses of belonging.

People can still find the sense of worth and belonging with time.

Most people only keep looking until they die.

This comes from a story in Natsume's Book of Friends.

It is a story about a snowman finds something he has forgotten.

The difference is that humans may not find it until their death.

But the snowman doesn't fear death.

He also thinks humans can find something in their life as well.

People can still find a sense of worth and belonging with time.

It is a story about a snowman who finds something he has forgotten.

I need more sense of belonging.

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