Aug. 10, 2025
I need to run / 2
During my life, I always felt myself like a white crow. I started programming at six. My first computer was a large VAX/VMS mainframe at mom's work. I still love orange VT220 theme in the terminal. That was a magic! Later on, my father's friends gave me a home one. It was hand-built clone of ZX Spectrum with fantastic 48 kilobytes of RAM! While other children were playing in the street, I spent hours and days at the computer. Computers interested me a lot, but it was not my choice. I was a clumsy and weak child and other children just didn't want to play with me.
I had no tapes, no games, and no Google to ask. My only friends were the built-in BASIC interpreter and books. But I really wanted to play and I started creating games for myself. As I didn't have a tape recorder, I had to write down the source code on paper and then retype it every time I turned on the computer. A couple years later my father bought me a new computer. That was a PC XT clone and It even had disk drives. I started learning another programming languages and after a few years my passion brought results.
I never went to university, but I started developing avionics software at 15, became a senior developer at 19 and was offered a CIO position at 24. Then I started my first business at 27. It might look like I'm putting on airs, however it didn't cost me any effort. I just followed my passion. Unfortunately, it didn't help me understand other people at all.
During myMy whole life, I've always felt myself like a white crow.
During my life is not wrong, it''s just awkward. Better to say "throughout my life", or idiomatically "my whole life, I...". Myself is redundant.
I started programming at six.
My first computer was a large VAX/VMS mainframe at my mom's work.
I still love the orange VT220 theme in the terminal.
That was alike magic!
or "that theme was magic!"
Later on, my father's friends gave me a home onecomputer.
It was a hand-built clone of a ZX Spectrum with a fantastic 48 kilobytes of RAM!
While other children were playing in the street, I spent hours and days at the computer.
Computers interested me a lot, but it was not my first choice.
the first clause says you like computers, they interest you, so the second clause should clarify that they were a 'fallback' option, or that you chose them *because* you didn't have other options. Unless someone actually physically forced you to do computer stuff, in which case your sentence would be accurate.
I was a clumsy and weak as a child and other children just didn't want to play with me.
your sentence was fine, but this is a bit more natural.
My only friends were the built-in BASIC interpreter and books.
ButHowever, I really wanted to play and I started creating games for myself.
OR you could end the previous sentence with a comma: "... and books, but I really wanted".
As I didn't have a tape recorder, I had to write down the source code on paper and then retype it every time I turned on the computer.
That was a PC XT clone and It even had disk drives.
better to combine this clause with the previous one. "bought me a new computer: it was a PC XT clone, and it even had disk drives."
I started learning another programming languages and after a few years my passion brought results.
or "other programming languages". But "another" signifies "just one more"
I never went to university, but I started developing avionics software at 15, became a senior developer at 19 and was offered a CIO position at 24.
Then, I started my first business at 27.
It might look like I'm putting on airs, however it didn't cost me any effort.
This feels like a idiom translation error. Not sure exactly what you're trying to get across here. "It might look likes I'm putting on airs" = it might seem like I'm bragging. So, the use of "however" suggests the following clause will contrast the idea that you are bragging. So it doesn't make sense to say "however, it didn't cost me any effort" --well, now you're *really* bragging by saying you didn't even have to work hard. I think you meant something like "I had to work hard at this, but I enjoyed it so it never felt like work". Or "It might seem like I'm bragging, but I'm not. It was all I had, and this is just how life happened."
I just followed my passion.
Unfortunately, it didn't help me understand other people at all.
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Well done and entirely comprehensible, just some little things to make it more natural and clarify.
Aug. 11, 2025
Oh, and also I've never heard the expression "like a white crow" --I'm guessing that comes from your language, and I assume it means that you didn't belong, since crows are normally black. But it is not a saying that people use in English as far as I'm aware :)
Aug. 11, 2025
Thank you so much!
Aug. 11, 2025
Yes, of course I meant "I had to work hard at this, but I enjoyed it so it never felt like work". I'm just trying to learn how to write coherent texts and I still make mistakes in complex sentences :)
Aug. 12, 2025
Cool! Great work, you're super close! I am the same way in spanish lol.
Aug. 13, 2025
The Spanish is a really beautiful language! I lived in Spain for about a year in past and I still remember these days.
Aug. 14, 2025
Agreed!
I need to run / 2
During my life, I always felt myself like a white crow.
I started programming at six.
My first computer was a large VAX/VMS mainframe at mom's work.
I still love orange VT220 theme in the terminal.
That was a magic!
Later on, my father's friends gave me a built at home one.
It was hand-built clone of ZX Spectrum with fantastic 48 kilobytes of RAM!
While other children were playing in the street, I spent hours and days at the computer.
Computers interested me a lot, but it was not my choice.
I was a clumsy and weak child and other children just didn't want to play with me.
I had no tapes, no games, and no Google to ask.
My only friends were the built-in BASIC interpreter and books.
But I really wanted to play and I started creating games for myself.
As I didn't have a tape recorder, I had to write down the source code on paper and then retype it every time I turned on the computer.
A couple years later my father bought me a new computer.
That was a PC XT clone and Iit even had disk drives.
I started learning another programming languages and after a few years my passion brought results.
I never went to university, but I started developing avionics software at 15, became a senior developer at 19 and was offered a CIO position at 24.
Then I started my first business at 27.
It might look like I'm putting on airs, however it didn't cost me any effort.
I just followed my passion.
Unfortunately, it didn't help me understand other people at all.
Aug. 11, 2025
Thank you!
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During my life, I always felt myself like a white crow. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
During my life is not wrong, it''s just awkward. Better to say "throughout my life", or idiomatically "my whole life, I...". Myself is redundant. |
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My first computer was a large VAX/VMS mainframe at mom's work. This sentence has been marked as perfect! My first computer was a large VAX/VMS mainframe at my mom's work. |
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I still love orange VT220 theme in the terminal. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I still love the orange VT220 theme in the terminal. |
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Later on, my father's friends gave me a home one. Later on, my father's friends gave me a built at home one. Later on, my father's friends gave me a home |
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It was hand-built clone of ZX Spectrum with fantastic 48 kilobytes of RAM! This sentence has been marked as perfect! It was a hand-built clone of a ZX Spectrum with a fantastic 48 kilobytes of RAM! |
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While other children were playing in the street, I spent hours and days at the computer. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Computers interested me a lot, but it was not my choice. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Computers interested me a lot, but it was not my first choice. the first clause says you like computers, they interest you, so the second clause should clarify that they were a 'fallback' option, or that you chose them *because* you didn't have other options. Unless someone actually physically forced you to do computer stuff, in which case your sentence would be accurate. |
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I was a clumsy and weak child and other children just didn't want to play with me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I was your sentence was fine, but this is a bit more natural. |
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I had no tapes, no games, and no Google to ask. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My only friends were the built-in BASIC interpreter and books. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But I really wanted to play and I started creating games for myself. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
OR you could end the previous sentence with a comma: "... and books, but I really wanted". |
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As I didn't have a tape recorder, I had to write down the source code on paper and then retype it every time I turned on the computer. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A couple years later my father bought me a new computer. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That was a PC XT clone and It even had disk drives. That was a PC XT clone and That was a PC XT clone and It even had disk drives. better to combine this clause with the previous one. "bought me a new computer: it was a PC XT clone, and it even had disk drives." |
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I started learning another programming languages and after a few years my passion brought results. I started learning I started learning another programming language or "other programming languages". But "another" signifies "just one more" |
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I never went to university, but I started developing avionics software at 15, became a senior developer at 19 and was offered a CIO position at 24. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Then I started my first business at 27. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Then, I started my first business at 27. |
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It might look like I'm putting on airs, however it didn't cost me any effort. This sentence has been marked as perfect! It might look like I'm putting on airs, however it didn't cost me any effort. This feels like a idiom translation error. Not sure exactly what you're trying to get across here. "It might look likes I'm putting on airs" = it might seem like I'm bragging. So, the use of "however" suggests the following clause will contrast the idea that you are bragging. So it doesn't make sense to say "however, it didn't cost me any effort" --well, now you're *really* bragging by saying you didn't even have to work hard. I think you meant something like "I had to work hard at this, but I enjoyed it so it never felt like work". Or "It might seem like I'm bragging, but I'm not. It was all I had, and this is just how life happened." |
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I just followed my passion. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Unfortunately, it didn't help me understand other people at all. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My only friends were the builtin BASIC interpretter and books. |
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As I didn't have a tape recorder, I had to write down the source code by writing on paper and then retype it every time I turned on the computer. |
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