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mossphlox

Jan. 21, 2021

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I Have a Dream

Today I would like to tell you about my dream. For many years, I would like to visit a few places in the world. One of them is Japan. Why Japan? I want to tell you about that as well. I became interested in Japanese culture when I was 14. At first, I watched old animated productions such as Sailor Moon, Haibane Renmei, and Studio Ghibli productions. Later, I collected books with stories popular in Japan, Japanese mythology, and I read an anthology of Japanese theater and Japanese tea brewing. At that time, I used these anthologies during my Polish matura exam. I was writing some haiku poems. I was inspired by the poetry of Czesław Miłosz and other Japanese poets. I also did presentation on Japanese clothing for one website that doesn't exist now. However, I wanted to try something more. I decided to learn Japanese. I installed Japanese alphabet on my computer and my adventure with Japanese began. I have been learning Japanese for a few years using materials on the Internet. I became most involved in learning language when I joined the Polish beginner group. There used to be popular chats on the Polczat website. We learned something new every day in the chat. There were also competitions hold by the owner of the then only one Polish website for learning Japanese. I won the competition twice. Then I got a humorous book to write Japanese characters from scratch and sweets brought from Japan. To this day, I keep candy wrappers deep in my wardrobe. Later I started writing with Japanese people to practice Japanese conversations. Then one friendship was arise with a Japanese woman, even though the Japanese don’t maintain contact with anyone for that long time. I got a package of sweets from this Japanese woman for me and for my best friend. We were happy. After a while, I took a break from learning Japanese. To this day, I’m remembering a lot of Japanese characters, I’m watching Asian cinema and read books related to Japanese culture.
In the future, I would like to go to Japan with my partner who is also interested in this country. I would like to go to Tokyo, Hiroshima and Osaka. At that time, my ex-friend, from whom I got sweets from Japan, lived in Osaka. I hope my dream will come true.

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I Have a Dream

Today I would like to tell you about my dream.

For many years, I would likehave wanted to visit a few places in the world.

One of them is Japan.

Why Japan?

I want to tell you about that as well.

I became interested in Japanese culture when I was 14.

At first, I watched old animated productions such as Sailor Moon, Haibane Renmei, and Studio Ghibli productions.

Later, I collected books with stories popular in Japan, such as Japanese mythology, and I read an anthology of Japanese theater and Japanese tea brewing.

At that time, I used these anthologies during my Polish matura exam.

I was writing some haiku poems.

I was inspired by the poetry of Czesław Miłosz and other Japanese poets.

I also did a presentation on Japanese clothing for onea website that doesn't exist nowanymore.

However, I wanted to try somethingdive in / do more.

I decided to learn Japanese.

I installed a Japanese alphabetkeyboard on my computer and my adventure with Japanese began.

I have been learning Japanese for a few years using materials on the Internet.

I became most involved in learning language when I joined the Polish beginner group.

Therey used to be popular chats on the Polczat website.

We learned something new every day in the chat.

There were also competitions hoeld by the owner of the then only one Polish website for learning Japanese.

I won the competition twice.

Then I got a humorous book which showed how to write Japanese characters from scratch and sweets broughtalso some sweets from Japan.

To this day, I keep the candy wrappers deep in my wardrobe.

Later I started writing withtalking to Japanese people to practice Japanesehaving conversations in Japanese.

Then onea friendship was ariseformed with a Japanese woman, even though the Japanese don’t maintain contact with anyone for thata long time.

I got a package of sweets from this Japanese woman for me and for my best friend.

We were happy.

After a while, I took a break from learning Japanese.

To this day, I’m remembering a lot of Japanese characters, I’m watching Asian cinema and read books related to Japanese culture.

In the future, I would like to go to Japan with my partner who is also interested in this country.

I would like to go to Tokyo, Hiroshima and Osaka.

At that time, my ex-friend, from whom I got sweets from Japan, lived in Osaka.

I hope my dream will come true.

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Nice entry! I hope you keep learning Japanese!

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mossphlox

Jan. 22, 2021

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Thank you!

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I Have a Dream

Today I would like to tell you about my dream.

For many years, I would likehave wanted to visit a few places in the world.

You're talking about an action (to want to visit) that started in the past and continues to happen today, so you need to change the tense

One of them is Japan.

Why Japan?

I want to tell you about that as well.

I became interested in Japanese culture when I was 14.

At first, I watched old animated productions such as Sailor Moon, Haibane Renmei, and Studio Ghibli productionmovies.

Replaced the second "productions" with "movies" to avoid repetition

Later, I collected books with stories popular in Japan, Japanese mythology, and I read an anthology of Japanese theater and Japanese tea brewing.

At that time, I used these anthologies during my Polish matura exam.

I was writing some haiku poems.

I was inspired by the poetry of Czesław Miłosz and other Japanese poets.

I also did a presentation on Japanese clothing for one website that doesn't exist now.

However, I wanted to try something more.

I decided to learn Japanese.

I installed the Japanese alphabet on my computer and my adventure with Japanese began.

I have been learning Japanese for a few years using materials on the Internet.

I became most involved in learning language when I joined thea Polish beginner group.

There used to be popular chat groups on the Polczat website.

We learned something new every day in the chat.

There were also competitions hoeld by the owner of the then only one Polish website for learning Japanese.

Need to use past tense here

I won the competition twice.

Then I got a humorous book on how to write Japanese characters from scratch and got sweets brought from Japan.

To this day, I keep candy wrappers deep in my wardrobe.

Later I started writing with Japanese people to practice Japanese conversations.

Then one friendship was ariose with a Japanese woman, even though the Japanese don’t maintain contact with anyone for that long a time.

I got a package of sweets from this Japanese woman for me and for my best friend.

We were happy.

To this day, I’m remembering a lot of Japanese characters, I’m watching Asian cinema, and I read books related to Japanese culture.

In the future, I would like to go to Japan with my partner who is also interested in thise country.

I would like to go to Tokyo, Hiroshima and Osaka.

At that time, my ex-former friend, from whom I got sweets from Japan, lived in Osaka.

"ex" we normally use to refer to prior romantic partners. someone with whom you are no longer friends would be a former friend.

I hope my dream will come true.

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You did a very good job writing this. Most of the errors were just simple mistakes with verb tense or articles. I enjoyed reading about your journey of learning Japanese, it was very interesting. I hope you and your partner will be able to visit there someday.

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mossphlox

Jan. 22, 2021

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Thank you!

At that time, I used these anthologies during my Polish matura exam.

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I want to tell you about that as well.

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I became interested in Japanese culture when I was 14.

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At first, I watched old animated productions such as Sailor Moon, Haibane Renmei, and Studio Ghibli productions.

At first, I watched old animated productions such as Sailor Moon, Haibane Renmei, and Studio Ghibli productionmovies.

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Later, I collected books with stories popular in Japan, Japanese mythology, and I read an anthology of Japanese theater and Japanese tea brewing.

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Later, I collected books with stories popular in Japan, such as Japanese mythology, and I read an anthology of Japanese theater and Japanese tea brewing.

I was writing some haiku poems.

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I was inspired by the poetry of Czesław Miłosz and other Japanese poets.

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I also did presentation on Japanese clothing for one website that doesn't exist now.

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However, I wanted to try something more.

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However, I wanted to try somethingdive in / do more.

I decided to learn Japanese.

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I installed Japanese alphabet on my computer and my adventure with Japanese began.

I installed the Japanese alphabet on my computer and my adventure with Japanese began.

I installed a Japanese alphabetkeyboard on my computer and my adventure with Japanese began.

I have been learning Japanese for a few years using materials on the Internet.

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I have been learning Japanese for a few years using materials on the Internet.

I became most involved in learning language when I joined the Polish beginner group.

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One of them is Japan.

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Why Japan?

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I Have a Dream

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Today I would like to tell you about my dream.

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For many years, I would like to visit a few places in the world.

For many years, I would likehave wanted to visit a few places in the world.

For many years, I would likehave wanted to visit a few places in the world.

You're talking about an action (to want to visit) that started in the past and continues to happen today, so you need to change the tense

There used to be popular chats on the Polczat website.

There used to be popular chat groups on the Polczat website.

Therey used to be popular chats on the Polczat website.

We learned something new every day in the chat.

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There were also competitions hold by the owner of the then only one Polish website for learning Japanese.

There were also competitions hoeld by the owner of the then only one Polish website for learning Japanese.

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There were also competitions hoeld by the owner of the then only one Polish website for learning Japanese.

I won the competition twice.

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Then I got a humorous book to write Japanese characters from scratch and sweets brought from Japan.

Then I got a humorous book on how to write Japanese characters from scratch and got sweets brought from Japan.

Then I got a humorous book which showed how to write Japanese characters from scratch and sweets broughtalso some sweets from Japan.

To this day, I keep candy wrappers deep in my wardrobe.

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To this day, I keep the candy wrappers deep in my wardrobe.

Later I started writing with Japanese people to practice Japanese conversations.

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Later I started writing withtalking to Japanese people to practice Japanesehaving conversations in Japanese.

Then one friendship was arise with a Japanese woman, even though the Japanese don’t maintain contact with anyone for that long time.

Then one friendship was ariose with a Japanese woman, even though the Japanese don’t maintain contact with anyone for that long a time.

Then onea friendship was ariseformed with a Japanese woman, even though the Japanese don’t maintain contact with anyone for thata long time.

I got a package of sweets from this Japanese woman for me and for my best friend.

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We were happy.

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After a while, I took a break from learning Japanese.

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To this day, I’m remembering a lot of Japanese characters, I’m watching Asian cinema and read books related to Japanese culture.

To this day, I’m remembering a lot of Japanese characters, I’m watching Asian cinema, and I read books related to Japanese culture.

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In the future, I would like to go to Japan with my partner who is also interested in this country.

In the future, I would like to go to Japan with my partner who is also interested in thise country.

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I would like to go to Tokyo, Hiroshima and Osaka.

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At that time, my ex-friend, from whom I got sweets from Japan, lived in Osaka.

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At that time, my ex-former friend, from whom I got sweets from Japan, lived in Osaka.

"ex" we normally use to refer to prior romantic partners. someone with whom you are no longer friends would be a former friend.

I hope my dream will come true.

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