Aug. 18, 2022
I build my dream house!
I build my dream house!
Actually, I didn’t build anything.
I just rearrange the furniture in my house.
But that make a huge difference.
I never realize my room can looks “cool”.
Furthermore, I didn’t spend extra money to buy new items for this house.
In fact I will going to buy some furniture but only second hands.
Anyway, now I want to invite friends come to my house.
I want to impress them, I am a cool friend!
I buildt my dream house!
Past tense needed here.
I buildt my dream house!
I just rearranged the furniture in my house.
Past tense needed.
But that makde a huge difference.
Corrected for past tense.
I never realized my room can looks “ "cool”."
- Corrected for tense. We always put "realize" in the past tense when using the phrase, "I never realized..."
- As for the period within the quotation marks, I found this said about it: "In American English, commas and periods should be placed within the quotation marks as long as they do not change the meaning of the quotation." Perhaps it is different in British English, but I'm not sure.
In fact, I willam going to buy some furniture, but only second hands.
- Comma after the phrase "in fact" at the beginning of the sentence.
- I don't know if you have already bought the furniture, but if you are still planning to buy it, use: "I am going to..."
- "Secondhand" is one word and an adjective, so it can't be plural.
Anyway, now I want to invite friends to come to my house.
- You must invite people TO do something. Ex: "I invited her to dance with me."
- Also, an alternative: "Anyway, now I want to invite friends over." It is shorter and simpler. Either way is correct, of course.
I want to impress them,. I am a cool friend!
Period instead of comma here. Try to avoid "comma splices." I recommend reading about those, if you'd like. These are two separate ideas/sentences, so they cannot have ONLY a comma between them.
Feedback
Great job! I would perhaps study verb tenses and comma splices a little more. I think that might help.
And congrats on rearranging your house! It takes a lot of energy to do that. Also, secondhand furniture can be great! :)
I buildt my dream house!
I buildt my dream house!
Actually, I didn’t build anything.
I just rearranged the furniture in my house.
But that makes a huge difference.
I never realize my room can looks “ so cool”.
It sounds more natural this way but cool alone is also okay
Furthermore, I didn’t spend extra money to buyon new items for this house.
In fact I will going to buybought some furniture but only second hands.
The entire time you were using a past tense so i assumed that you already bought the furniture instead of going to be it
Anyway, now I want to invite (my) friends to come to my house.
You can use my or some
I want to impress them, I amand be a cool friend!
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I build my dream house! I buil I buil Past tense needed here. |
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I build my dream house! I buil I buil |
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Actually, I didn’t build anything. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I just rearrange the furniture in my house. I just rearranged the furniture in my house. I just rearranged the furniture in my house. Past tense needed. |
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But that make a huge difference. But that makes a huge difference. But that ma Corrected for past tense. |
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I never realize my room can looks “cool”. I never realize my room can look It sounds more natural this way but cool alone is also okay I never realized my room can look - Corrected for tense. We always put "realize" in the past tense when using the phrase, "I never realized..." - As for the period within the quotation marks, I found this said about it: "In American English, commas and periods should be placed within the quotation marks as long as they do not change the meaning of the quotation." Perhaps it is different in British English, but I'm not sure. |
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Furthermore, I didn’t spend extra money to buy new items for this house. Furthermore, I didn’t spend extra money |
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In fact I will going to buy some furniture but only second hands. In fact I The entire time you were using a past tense so i assumed that you already bought the furniture instead of going to be it In fact, I - Comma after the phrase "in fact" at the beginning of the sentence. - I don't know if you have already bought the furniture, but if you are still planning to buy it, use: "I am going to..." - "Secondhand" is one word and an adjective, so it can't be plural. |
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Anyway, now I want to invite friends come to my house. Anyway, now I want to invite (my) friends to come to my house. You can use my or some Anyway, now I want to invite friends to come to my house. - You must invite people TO do something. Ex: "I invited her to dance with me." - Also, an alternative: "Anyway, now I want to invite friends over." It is shorter and simpler. Either way is correct, of course. |
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I want to impress them, I am a cool friend! I want to impress them, I want to impress them Period instead of comma here. Try to avoid "comma splices." I recommend reading about those, if you'd like. These are two separate ideas/sentences, so they cannot have ONLY a comma between them. |
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