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Niko_1017

May 25, 2025

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I Ate Ramen

I went outside for the first time in four days. My family and I went to a bike shop, because my brother wanted one. Then he bought a used bike, although it seemed like almost new. It cost not less than eleven thousand dollars. I wanted SIX iPhone 16 Pro Max phones instead! I also wanted to arrange them and to operate! It’s a joke.

After that, we went to ramen shop and ate there. I ate Ise ramen with topping super butter. It was delicious. Actually we planned to eat Macdonald foods, but there wasn't Macdonald near the bike shop. So we gave up on going. However we decided to eat it yesterday.

We got back home at 7 pm, and I started studying English. I've practiced pronouncing pronunciation symbol and paid attention to shape of my mouth, consequently I’m tired right now.

題名:ラーメン食べた
4日ぶりの外出をした。兄弟がバイク欲しがってたから家族とバイク屋に行った。それから彼は中古のバイクを買った、まあほぼ新品みたいだったけど。1.1万ドルかかった。代わりにiPhone16プロマックス6台欲しかった。6台並べて操作したかった。冗談。

その後、ラーメン屋に行って食べた。私は伊勢ラーメンの超バタートッピングを食べた。美味しかった。実はマック食べる予定だったけど、バイク屋の近くにマックなかった。だから諦めてラーメン屋にした。でも明日はマック食べるって決まった。

7時に帰宅して、英語の勉強始めた。発音記号の発音を口の形に気をつけて練習したから今疲れてる。

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I Ate Ramen

I went outside for the first time in four days.

My family and I went to a bike shop, because my brother wanted one.

Then he bought a used bike, although it seemed like almost new.

It costed not less than eleven thousand dollars.

I wanted SIX iPhone 16 Pro Max phones instead!

I also wanted to arrange them and to operate them too!

I'm not too sure what this means...

It’s a joke.

After that, we went to a ramen shop and ate there.

I ate Ise ramen with topping super butter topping.

It was delicious.

Actually, we planned to eat Macdonald food's, but there wasn't a Macdonald near the bike shop.

So we gave up on going.

However, we decided to eat it yesterdaytomorrow.

We got back home at 7 pm, and I started studying English.

I've practiced pronouncing prhonunciationetic symbols and paid attention to the shape of my mouth, c. Consequently, I’m tired right now.

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Niko_1017

May 27, 2025

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Thank you very much! I didn’t realize I wrote “yesterday” instead of “tomorrow” when I was writing in English and Japanese, lol

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My family and I went to a bike shop, because my brother wanted ona bike.

Then hHe bought a used bike, although it seemed like almost new.

+ What made it seemed new?

It cost nodid not cost less than eleven thousand dollars.

I wancould have gottedn SIX iPhone 16 Pro Max phones instead!

I also wanted toAnd arrange them and to operatell!

I was not sure what you meant by operate, but I decided it wasn't necessary.
I felt like the previous sentence worked well with this one. Consider combining them.

It’s's all a joke.

I ategot Ise ramen with toppingtopped with super butter.

Actually, we originally planned to eat Macdonald fooat McDonalds, but there wasn't Macdonaldany nearby the bike shop.

However, we decided to eat it yesterday.

I've practiced pronouncing pronunciation symbol and paid close attention to how I shape ofd my mouth, c. Consequently, I’m tired right now.

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Niko_1017

May 27, 2025

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Thank you very much! I’ll keep up.

I Ate Ramen

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I went outside for the first time in four days.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

My family and I went to a bike shop, because my brother wanted one.

My family and I went to a bike shop, because my brother wanted ona bike.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Then he bought a used bike, although it seemed like almost new.

Then hHe bought a used bike, although it seemed like almost new.

+ What made it seemed new?

Then he bought a used bike, although it seemed like almost new.

It cost not less than eleven thousand dollars.

It cost nodid not cost less than eleven thousand dollars.

It costed not less than eleven thousand dollars.

I wanted SIX iPhone 16 Pro Max phones instead!

I wancould have gottedn SIX iPhone 16 Pro Max phones instead!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I also wanted to arrange them and to operate!

I also wanted toAnd arrange them and to operatell!

I was not sure what you meant by operate, but I decided it wasn't necessary. I felt like the previous sentence worked well with this one. Consider combining them.

I also wanted to arrange them and to operate them too!

I'm not too sure what this means...

It’s a joke.

It’s's all a joke.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

After that, we went to ramen shop and ate there.

After that, we went to a ramen shop and ate there.

I ate Ise ramen with topping super butter.

I ategot Ise ramen with toppingtopped with super butter.

I ate Ise ramen with topping super butter topping.

It was delicious.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Actually we planned to eat Macdonald foods, but there wasn't Macdonald near the bike shop.

Actually, we originally planned to eat Macdonald fooat McDonalds, but there wasn't Macdonaldany nearby the bike shop.

Actually, we planned to eat Macdonald food's, but there wasn't a Macdonald near the bike shop.

So we gave up on going.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

However we decided to eat it yesterday.

However, we decided to eat it yesterday.

However, we decided to eat it yesterdaytomorrow.

We got back home at 7 pm, and I started studying English.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I've practiced pronouncing pronunciation symbol and paid attention to shape of my mouth, consequently I’m tired right now.

I've practiced pronouncing pronunciation symbol and paid close attention to how I shape ofd my mouth, c. Consequently, I’m tired right now.

I've practiced pronouncing prhonunciationetic symbols and paid attention to the shape of my mouth, c. Consequently, I’m tired right now.

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