March 25, 2022
I always run away.
I always run away.
I hadn't tried to change you.
I couldn't be your opponent.
You were so vicious and frightening.
I wasn't confident to be against you.
You would've made me a mess.
But I am not a coward.
I well know you'd be crushed by a stronger opponent.
I'm cultivating a village for the broken.
you would be broken oneday and sunk
as if broken pebbles are piled up on the sandbank.
There would b e full of broken pebbles like you.
A village for the broken,
I wouldn't be there, though,
you'll be able to find my trace.
I always run away.
I always run away.
I hadn't tried to change you.
I couldn't be your opponent.
You were so vicious and frightening.
I wasn't confident enough to bego against you.
You would've made me a mess.
But I am not a coward.
I well know you'd be crushed by a stronger opponent.
I'm cultivating a village for the broken.
yYou would'll be broken one day and sunken.
as ifLike broken pebbles are piled up on the sandbank.
ThereIt would b e full of broken pebbles like you.
A village for the broken,
I wouldn't be there, though,
but you'll be able to find my trace.
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It's hard to say what is "right" or "wrong" with poetry, since poetry is meant to break the rules. However, I tried to make the style of your writing flow nicely but keep the meaning similar! I hope you like :)
March 25, 2022
Thank you. I like it. ^^
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You were so vicious and frightening. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I wasn't confident to be against you. I wasn't confident enough to |
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You would make me a mess. |
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But I am not a coward. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I well know you'd be crushed by a stronger opponent. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I'm cultivating a village for the broken. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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you would be broken oneday and sunk
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as if broken pebbles are piled up on the sandbank.
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There would b e full of broken pebbles like you.
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I wouldn't be there, though, This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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you'll be able to find my trace. but you'll be able to find my trace. |
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