July 4, 2021
Fairy Tale "Hanasaka Jiisan" Part 2
There were flowers bloom on dead trees all over the place. Those flowers were really cute as if Shiro. The gentle Ojiisan was so delightful that he had many flowers blooming.
Soon, a rumor of " The old man who makes flowers bloom" reached to the lord and he saw those flowers. The lord really loved them and gave him many treasure in appreciation. After, when the mean Ojiisann knew it, he tried to bloom flowers by an ash he created to receive money from the load. Unluckily, not only he couldn't bloom any flowers but also the ash he scattered got in the load's eye. The lord was upset and arrested the mean Ojiisan and imprisoned him.
The gentle Ojiisan and Obaasan lived happily ever after surrounding flowers he bloomed with Shiro's soul.
The End.
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There were flowers blooming on dead trees all over the place. There were flowers blooming on dead trees all over the place.
Those flowers were really as cute as if Shiro.
Those flowers were really as cute as Shiro.
Soon, a rumor of " The old man who makes flowers bloom" reached to the lord and he saw those flowers.
Soon, a rumor of " The old man who makes flowers bloom" reached the lord and he saw those flowers.
The lord really loved them and gave him many treasures in appreciation. The lord really loved them and gave him many treasures in appreciation.
After, when the mean Ojiisann knew it, he tried to bloom flowers by an ash he created to receive money from the loard.
After, when the mean Ojiisann knew it, he tried to bloom flowers by an ash he created to receive money from the lord.
Unluckily, not only he couldn' he not bloom any flowers but also the ash he scattered got in the loard's eye.
Unluckily, not only could he not bloom any flowers but also the ash he scattered got in the lord's eye.
The gentle Ojiisan and Obaasan lived happily ever after surroundinged by flowers he bloomed with Shiro's soul.
The gentle Ojiisan and Obaasan lived happily ever after surrounded by flowers he bloomed with Shiro's soul.
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Good story and ending. I can't wait to read more fairy tale stories from you.
July 4, 2021
Thank you so much for your correction. Have a nice Sunday afternoon!!
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Fairy Tale "Hanasaka Jiisan" Part 2 |
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There were flowers bloom on dead trees all over the place. There were flowers blooming on dead trees all over the place. There were flowers blooming on dead trees all over the place. |
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Those flowers were really cute as if Shiro.
Those flowers were really as cute as |
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The gentle Ojiisan was so delightful that he had many flowers blooming. |
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Soon, a rumor of " The old man who makes flowers bloom" reached to the lord and he saw those flowers.
Soon, a rumor of " The old man who makes flowers bloom" reached |
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The lord really loved them and gave him many treasure in appreciation. The lord really loved them and gave him many treasures in appreciation. The lord really loved them and gave him many treasures in appreciation. |
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After, when the mean Ojiisann knew it, he tried to bloom flowers by an ash he created to receive money from the load.
After, when the mean Ojiisann knew it, he tried to bloom flowers by an ash he created to receive money from the lo |
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Unluckily, not only he couldn't bloom any flowers but also the ash he scattered got in the load's eye.
Unluckily, not only |
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The lord was upset and arrested the mean Ojiisan and imprisoned him. |
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The gentle Ojiisan and Obaasan lived happily ever after surrounding flowers he bloomed with Shiro's soul.
The gentle Ojiisan and Obaasan lived happily ever after surround |
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The End. |
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