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In the German speaking countries, bread is an important staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture. Many people are proud of their region's bread and they miss it when they travel.

Despite all of that, bread is, most of the time, an industrialized item. Very few bakeries bake in a traditional way. Mostly, they use bake mixes that allow the use of machines and higher productivity. The result is a perfect bread in the eyes of the consumer. In contrast to what the marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should better not be there.

In the past years, it has become fashionable for certain people to bake their own bread. My mum has infected me with this virus some time ago. Before that, I thought it would be difficult and time consuming. I was surprised how easy it is, and that it is not much work once you have done it a few times.

The bread I have made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts). It is very tasty because I have allowed the dough to ferment for a long time.

I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell more beautiful bread than mine, I think mine tastes better. I am not a skilled baker, therefore the outcome of my work is never the same. That's part of the adventure.

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Bread

Despite all of that, bread is, most of the time, an industrialized item.

The result is a perfect bread in the eyes of the consumer.

I am not a skilled baker, therefore the outcome of my work is never the same.

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Mostly, of theym use bakeread mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity.

By "bake mixes", do you mean the mix of ingredients used to make the bread? (As in, a mix of flour, water, salt, etc.)
To avoid confusion, you could just say "recipes", as in "Most of them use recipes that allow...".

Bread

Many people are proud of their region's bread and they miss it when they travel.

Despite all of that, bread is, most of the time, an industrialized item.

Very few bakeries bake in a traditional way.

The result is a perfect bread in the eyes of the consumer.

Before that, I thought it would be difficult and time consuming.

The bread I have made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts).

It is very tasty because I have allowed the dough to ferment for a long time.

I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell more beautiful bread than mine, I think mine tastes better.

I am not a skilled baker, therefore the outcome of my work is never the same.

That's part of the adventure.

Many people are proud of their region's bread and they miss it when they travel.

Very few bakeries bake in a traditional way.

The result is a perfect bread in the eyes of the consumer.

My mum has infected me with this virus some time ago.

Before that, I thought it would be difficult and time consuming.

The bread I have made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts).

It is very tasty because I have allowed the dough to ferment for a long time.

I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell more beautiful bread than mine, I think mine tastes better.

I am not a skilled baker, therefore the outcome of my work is never the same.

That's part of the adventure.

Bread

In the German speaking countries, bread is an important staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture.

Many people are proud of their region's bread and they miss it when they travel.

Very few bakeries bake in a traditional way.

The result is a perfect bread in the eyes of the consumer.

I was surprised how easy it is, and that it is not much work once you have done it a few times.

I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell more beautiful bread than mine, I think mine tastes better.

I am not a skilled baker, therefore the outcome of my work is never the same.

That's part of the adventure.

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In the German speaking countries, bread is an important staple, but it also is an essential part of the culture.


Many people are proud of their region's bread and they miss it when they travel.


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Many people are proud of their region's bread and they end up missing it when they travel. Many people are proud of their region's bread and they end up missing it when they travel.

Your sentence is perfect as it is, but, as I'm sure you know, there are many different ways of saying something in English. The phrasal verb "end up doing something" can be used to highlight that the result of an action was unintentional - as in, it was going to end up this way whether we like it or not. In this example, it shows that people are so proud of their region's bread that they cannot help but miss it - even if it is unintentional.

Despite all of that, bread is, most of the time, an industrialized item.


Despite all of thatNevertheless, bread is, most of the time, an industrialized item. Nevertheless, bread is, most of the time, an industrialized item.

Not wrong, but "despite all of that" sounded a bit off to me. Especially since there was really only one point (bread=culture), but you refer to "all of that" as if you had made a whole list of points.

Despite all of that, bread is, most of the time, bread is an industrialized item. Despite all of that, most of the time bread is an industrialized item.

Putting the time at the beginning or end makes the sentence sound more natural

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Very few bakeries bake in a traditional way.


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Very few bakeries bake in ause traditional waymethods. Very few bakeries use traditional methods.

Your sentence is perfect :) Sometimes it can be good to avoid using too many similar-looking words together, though. Because we have both "bakeries" and "bake" together, you could choose to change the sentence a little. I've added an example of an alternative.

Mostly, they use bake mixes that allow the use of machines and higher productivity.


Mostly, they use bakeing mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity. Mostly, they use baking mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity.

Mostly, theThey mostly use bake mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity. They mostly use bake mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity.

Mostly, they use bakeThe mostly use the baking mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity. The mostly use the baking mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity.

Mostly, of theym use bakeread mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity. Most of them use bread mixes that allow for the use of machines and higher productivity.

By "bake mixes", do you mean the mix of ingredients used to make the bread? (As in, a mix of flour, water, salt, etc.) To avoid confusion, you could just say "recipes", as in "Most of them use recipes that allow...".

The result is a perfect bread in the eyes of the consumer.


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In contrast to what the marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should better not be there.


In contrast to what the marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should better not be there. In contrast to what marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should not be there.

In contrast to what the marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should better not be there. In contrast to what marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should not be there.

"That better not..." is a more colloquial phrase that implies a threat or a warning (He better not be there/I better go before this turns bad).

In contrast to what the marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that shouldare better off not being there. In contrast to what marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that are better off not being there.

In contrast to what the marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should better not be there. In contrast to what marketing tries to make us believe, there are lots of substances in today's bread that should not be there.

"...should not be there" has a very strong tone. If you'd like to soften it a bit, you can add "that I believe should not be there" or another similar phrase which indicates that this is your opinion.

In the past years, it has become fashionable for certain people to bake their own bread.


In the pasrecent years, it has become fashionable for certain people to bake their own bread. In recent years, it has become fashionable for certain people to bake their own bread.

In the past couple of years, it has become fashionable for certain people to bake their own bread. In the past couple of years, it has become fashionable for certain people to bake their own bread.

In the past few years, it has become fashionablepopular for certain people to bake their own bread. In the past few years, it has become popular for certain people to bake their own bread.

In the past few years, it has become fashionable for certainpopular for people to bake their own bread. In the past few years, it has become popular for people to bake their own bread.

I think by "certain" here you might mean "some" - as in, there are some people who bake bread. Not everyone, just some, unspecified people. If you say "certain", it sounds like you are pointing out specific people, or a specific type of people, that are baking their own bread. If this is the case, it is better to tell the reader who exactly you are referring to when you say "certain people". :)

My mum has infected me with this virus some time ago.


My mum hasother infected me with this virus some time ago. My mother infected me with this virus some time ago.

"mum" is not wrong, but it's a pretty casual Briticism that seems at odds with the more formal nature of the rest of your text.

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My mum has infected me with this virus some time ago. My mum infected me with this virus some time ago.

My mum has infected me with this virusgave me the cooking bug some time ago. My mum gave me the cooking bug some time ago.

I'm assuming by 'virus' that you are using an idiom to mean that your mum has inspired you to bake bread and now you're really interested in it. If you are talking about an actual virus, my apologies and please ignore the correction. In either case, the action is completed and it is in the past, so it's best to use the past simple form (i.e. infected, gave, etc.). If your intended meaning for this sentence is that your mum inspired you and now you're really interested in baking bread, I would probably use the word 'bug' and not 'virus'. I'm not entirely sure, but I haven't heard 'virus' being used in this idomatic way before.

Before that, I thought it would be difficult and time consuming.


Before that, I thought it would be difficult and time -consuming. Before that, I thought it would be difficult and time-consuming.

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Before that, I had thought it would be difficult and time -consuming. Before that, I had thought it would be difficult and time-consuming.

I was surprised how easy it is, and that it is not much work once you have done it a few times.


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I was surprised with how easy it iwas, and that it is notwasn't as much work once you have done it a few times. I was surprised with how easy it was, and that it wasn't as much work once you have done it a few times.

I was surprised with how easy it is, and that it is not too much work once you have done it a few times. I was surprised with how easy it is, and that it is not too much work once you have done it a few times.

I was surprised by how easy it iwas, and that it is not much work once you have done it a few times. I was surprised by how easy it was, and that it is not much work once you have done it a few times.

There are a few different options for whether to put the verbs 'be' here in present or past tense. In my suggestion, I've put "how easy it was", to show that you're talking about a specific realisation you had in the past. You realised - in the past - that it was easy. I've put "it is not much work" in present tense to show that you're referring to baking in general. You've realised that baking bread does not take too much work.

The bread I have made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts).


The bread I have made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts). The bread I made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts).

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The bread I have made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts). The bread I made today contains nothing but rye flour, water, salt, and seeds (pumpkin seeds, sunflower seeds and chopped walnuts).

This is a difficult one. If the main topic of your article is about the bread you made, I think it would be appropriate to use the present perfect here ("I have made"). But, as the focus of your article is just about bread in general, I think it would be better to use past simple ("I made"). There are a number of different uses for both of these tenses, but I think it would take too long to explain them here.

It is very tasty because I have allowed the dough to ferment for a long time.


It is very tasty because I have allowedlet the dough to ferment for a long time. It is very tasty because I let the dough ferment for a long time.

The dough ferments? Or do you mean sourdough starter?

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It isturned out very tasty because I have allowed the dough to ferment for a long time. It turned out very tasty because I allowed the dough to ferment for a long time.

As I changed the tense of the previous sentence to past simple, I also need to change the tense of this sentence to past simple ("allowed").

I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell more beautiful bread than mine, I think mine tastes better.


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I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell bread more beautiful bread than mine, I think mine tastes better. I haven't touched supermarket bread for a very long time, and while most bakeries sell bread more beautiful than mine, I think mine tastes better.

I am not a skilled baker, therefore the outcome of my work is never the same.


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That's part of the adventure.


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TBut that's part of the adventure. But that's part of the adventure.

Again, your original sentence is fine. I've added the word "But" just to help the sentences transition more smoothly :)

In the German speaking countries, bread is an important staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture.


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In the German speaking countries, bread is not only an important staple (in food), but it is also an essential part of the culture. In German speaking countries, bread is not only an important staple (in food), but it is also an essential part of the culture.

In the German speaking countries, bread is an important staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture. In German speaking countries, bread is a staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture.

In the German -speaking countries, bread is not only an important staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture. In German-speaking countries, bread is not only an important staple, but it is also an essential part of the culture.

A hyphen (-) can be used to join words together to form an adjective. For your example, we can ask "What kinds of countries?" and the answer would be "German-speaking ones". In this way, we know that "German-speaking" is adjectival and modifies the noun ("countries"). Nowadays it seems less and less common to use hyphens in this way. In formal writing I think it would be best to include them, if you can. You could say "the German-speaking countries" with the definite article ('the') here as you are referring to a specific group of countries. But, you can also drop the definite article to indicate that you are talking about German-speaking countries 'in general'. To me, the second option sounds more natural (without the use of 'the'). "Not only..., but also..." is a handy little sentence construction. It is used to emphasise that there is more than one point/fact about the topic. It fits well here as not only does it highlight 2 facts about bread, but it also draws more attention to the second fact (that is is "an essential part of the culture").

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