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Milano

Dec. 6, 2025

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How to grab a fortune by its ...

If you want to do less but to get more then you definitely have to find a way to grab a fortune.
Of course it woud be great to find a real flock or a school or even a swarm of fortunes so it would be much easier to catch just one from it ..
But in any way you have to know some secrets of this rather a complex craft.
How to grab it? And what to grab exactly when you are very close and have to act?

Some people say that a tail is the key element here.
Grab it by its tail!
May be they are right ..But who can say how it looks exactly ?
If the fortune is like a honey bee (most likely, right? Because nobody yet reported seeing a fortune that is an elephant size) so.. it is like a bee then it is a sting there..and not a tail. So you should be careful here , no rush.

Another group votes for a breast .
Exactly as I said .. no jokes here at all .
They beleive that it is absolutely necessary to touch (and much better to do it several times or even several tens of times) the breast of Juliette.
Look as it brights on a statue of Juliette in Verona! This group of fortune searchers seems to be really big indeed.

What for me I sill not sure.. Have no references here until am 100% sure. A real treasure is not an easy thing to find.
So I continue my search ..

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If you want to do less but to get more, then you definitely have to find a way to grab a fortune.

I think "to" is extra.

Of course, it would be great to find a real flock, or a school, or even a swarm of fortunes, so it would be much easier to catch just one from it ...

We don't use just two dots to suggest an open ended sentence. In English we use three...

But in any way , you have to know some secrets of this rather a complex craft.

"anyway" is one word and doesn't take the preposition "in"

And what to grab exactly, when you are very close and have to act?

This might be an optional comma.

Some people say that a tail is the key element here.

May be they are right ... But who can say exactly how it looks exactly ?

This is a more natural way to word the question, but your wording puts the emphasis on "exactly" so it might be better since you go on to discuss this point in detail.

Bbecause nobody yet has reported seeing a fortune that is an elephant size yet) so..

There are several points here, and I am unsure about some of them:

1. I don't think the "B" should be capitalized because the "M" of most isn't. It looks incorrect to have a capital letter in the middle of a casual aside that isn't written in complete sentences.

2. to get the meaning across quickly, it can be helpful to eliminate extra words: "an" is not needed in your sentence.

3. I think "yet" could go where you placed it, but it sounds more natural at the end.

4. Another version would be "because nobody has yet reported seeing an elephant size fortune"
Here "an" is needed because it modifies the noun "fortune."

If it is like a bee, then it ihas a sting...not a tail.¶
If it is like a bee, then it ha
s a sting in there... and not a tail.

The shorter version is clearer.
"in there" is a common and very informal phrase, and could be used to mean it is so tiny, it's hard to see or know what that part of its body looks like, but "there" by itself is not enough.

So you should be careful here , no rush.

Exactly as I said ... no jokes here at all .

There are rules or conventions about dots / a series of periods in English. You can look them up, but you never see just two. It's usually three, and they are spaced differently depending on their function. Three in a row starting with a final period suggest an open ended thought, or a kind of pause to me.

They beleieve that it is absolutely necessary to touch (and much better to do ittouch several times, or even several tens of times) the breast of Juliette.

Grammatically, the parenthetical part of the sentence ( ) doesn't work with the expression "to do it."
It works well with the verb "touch" and I think it is ok to repeat it because that is what they are doing repeatedly.

[Look as it brights on a] statue of Juliette in Verona!

This part of the sentence needs revision. Depending on what you want to say or emphasize, here is a suggestion:
"Look how this belief has brightened the statue of Juliette in Verona!"

WhatAs for me I sill not sure..

This is an idiomatic phrase "As for + pronoun or name of person"

HI have no references here until am 100% sure.

"have" is ok, but "add" might be better

So, I continue my search ...

This comma may be optional

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A fun read! You write playfully and skillfully in a language that is not your mother tongue.

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Liag

yesterday

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BTW I find it very confusing to look over my corrections since the (new?) format on LangCorrect only shows me what I corrected not the correct sentences in between. It's incredibly disjointed. Also, I think it leads to mistakes: I did not intend to delete your sentence "Some people say that a tail is the key element here" but it is showing up with pink highlighting and a strikethrough line.

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Milano

yesterday

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Thank you . So many small details , but seems it is geting better with a time and work

How to grab a fortune by its ...


If you want to do less but to get more then you definitely have to find a way to grab a fortune.


If you want to do less but to get more, then you definitely have to find a way to grab a fortune.

I think "to" is extra.

Of course it woud be great to find a real flock or a school or even a swarm of fortunes so it would be much easier to catch just one from it ..


Of course, it would be great to find a real flock, or a school, or even a swarm of fortunes, so it would be much easier to catch just one from it ...

We don't use just two dots to suggest an open ended sentence. In English we use three...

But in any way you have to know some secrets of this rather a complex craft.


But in any way , you have to know some secrets of this rather a complex craft.

"anyway" is one word and doesn't take the preposition "in"

How to grab it?


And what to grab exactly when you are very close and have to act?


And what to grab exactly, when you are very close and have to act?

This might be an optional comma.

Some people say that a tail is the key element here.


Some people say that a tail is the key element here.

Grab it by its tail!


May be they are right ..But who can say how it looks exactly ?


May be they are right ... But who can say exactly how it looks exactly ?

This is a more natural way to word the question, but your wording puts the emphasis on "exactly" so it might be better since you go on to discuss this point in detail.

If the fortune is like a honey bee (most likely, right?


Because nobody yet reported seeing a fortune that is an elephant size) so..


Bbecause nobody yet has reported seeing a fortune that is an elephant size yet) so..

There are several points here, and I am unsure about some of them: 1. I don't think the "B" should be capitalized because the "M" of most isn't. It looks incorrect to have a capital letter in the middle of a casual aside that isn't written in complete sentences. 2. to get the meaning across quickly, it can be helpful to eliminate extra words: "an" is not needed in your sentence. 3. I think "yet" could go where you placed it, but it sounds more natural at the end. 4. Another version would be "because nobody has yet reported seeing an elephant size fortune" Here "an" is needed because it modifies the noun "fortune."

it is like a bee then it is a sting there..and not a tail.


If it is like a bee, then it ihas a sting...not a tail.¶
If it is like a bee, then it ha
s a sting in there... and not a tail.

The shorter version is clearer. "in there" is a common and very informal phrase, and could be used to mean it is so tiny, it's hard to see or know what that part of its body looks like, but "there" by itself is not enough.

So you should be careful here , no rush.


So you should be careful here , no rush.

This group of fortune searchers seems to be really big indeed.


What for me I sill not sure..


WhatAs for me I sill not sure..

This is an idiomatic phrase "As for + pronoun or name of person"

Have no references here until am 100% sure.


HI have no references here until am 100% sure.

"have" is ok, but "add" might be better

A real treasure is not an easy thing to find.


So I continue my search ..


So, I continue my search ...

This comma may be optional

Another group votes for a breast .


Exactly as I said .. no jokes here at all .


Exactly as I said ... no jokes here at all .

There are rules or conventions about dots / a series of periods in English. You can look them up, but you never see just two. It's usually three, and they are spaced differently depending on their function. Three in a row starting with a final period suggest an open ended thought, or a kind of pause to me.

They beleive that it is absolutely necessary to touch (and much better to do it several times or even several tens of times) the breast of Juliette.


They beleieve that it is absolutely necessary to touch (and much better to do ittouch several times, or even several tens of times) the breast of Juliette.

Grammatically, the parenthetical part of the sentence ( ) doesn't work with the expression "to do it." It works well with the verb "touch" and I think it is ok to repeat it because that is what they are doing repeatedly.

Look as it brights on a statue of Juliette in Verona!


[Look as it brights on a] statue of Juliette in Verona!

This part of the sentence needs revision. Depending on what you want to say or emphasize, here is a suggestion: "Look how this belief has brightened the statue of Juliette in Verona!"

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