Oct. 12, 2022
How I changed my place of living
I had always liked living in big cities—at first, my family had lived in a huge metropolis, where my parents were getting an education while I was at school. It was a grim, depressing city that suited more, I realise now, professional people who craved careers and success. Millions of people were hustling there day by day, forgetting about calmness and losing their minds. The weather was mostly cold, and the long dark streets I walked through made me often think of monsters and ghosts. I never liked this city but couldn't change anything. After all, it was the place to live that my parents chose.
Both of them went to work early in the morning and returned late, usually when I slept. Neither they, nor I, had time to spend with each other: I was busy with school, and they were dealing with their adult jobs. In some way, this city helped me to understand at least one fact— I don’t want to live in a place like that.
When I grew up, I decided to move to another city. This one was similarly dark and cold as the previous city, but, at least, I chose it by myself. Any young adult appreciates freedom, and I was not an exception. Amazed by the idea of building a life by myself and spending time as I wanted, I didn’t pay much attention to anything I didn’t like there: crowded streets, noisy people, polluted air, and garbage here and there. Many things there made me uncomfortable, but I was too young and too arrogant to notice the bleakness of the city where I decided to live. I wanted to have an amazing life there and nothing could stop me.
Firstly, I decided to create a comfortable home, so after paying unreasonable rent for a gloomy flat, I headed to the local mall. There were all kinds of things to help make an IKEA-like house, and I gazed at small lampshades and cuddly toys for quite a long time. In the end, I bought a big wool blanket, a garland, and about a thousand various decorations, from glasses to rugs. After I put everything in order in the flat, I felt great. The apartment was still wretched and gloomy, and I couldn’t help thinking that it was quite a strange place, but, in general, I was pleased by my efforts to make it look good.
However, I hadn't lived in this place for even a year, and already I was not happy. It turned out that I overrated my ability to adjust to unpleasant conditions. No doubt, the city was impressive and sparkly, and there were a lot of small restaurants and pubs. You could walk for hours and always find new, amazing places. I had a job and friends there, and I'd even found small libraries and bookshops that become my favourite spots in the city. And yet I couldn’t bear living there.
Crowded streets made me anxious, and constant noise caused me headaches. If I wanted to spend some time in a library, I had to cross half of the city to get there, and if I wanted to buy a coffee, I often had to wait in a long line. More than that, this metropolis just made me depressed. Maybe it was its weather, with constant wind and rain, or possibly it was the gloomy people that I saw day after day. It seemed they forgot how to laugh, always busy with their jobs and projects. So, finally, I decided to move to another place.
How I changed amy place of living
I had always liked to liveliving in big cities—at first, my family had lived in a huge megatropolis, where my parents were getting an education while I was at school.
It was a grim, depressing city that matchsuited more, as I think now, for workingI realise now, professional people who craved careers and success.
The weather was mostly cold, and the long dark streets I walked through made me often think of monsters and ghosts.
I never liked this city but couldn't change anything.
After all, it was athe place to live that my parents chose.
Both of them went to work early in the morning and returned late when I, usually when I slept.
Neither they, nor I, had time forto spentd with each other: I was busy with school, and they were dealing with their adult jobs.
In some way, this city helped me to understand at least one fact— I don’t want to live in a place like that one.
By the timeWhen I grew up, I decided to move to another city.
Either "When I grew up, I decided to move to another city." Or "By the time I grew up, I had decided I would move to another city."
This one was similarly dark and cold as the previous city, but, at least, I chose it by myself.
Any young adult appreciates freedom, and I was not an exception.
Amazed by the idea of building a life by myself and spending time as I wanted, I didn’t pay much attention to anything I didn’t like there: crowded streets, noisy people, polluted air, and garbage here and there.
Many things there made me disuncomfortedable, but I was too young and too arrogant to notice.
Too young and too arrogant for what? I've guessed 'to notice'.
I’d decided to have an amazing life there and nothing could stop me.
Firstly, I decided to create a comfortable home, andso after paying unreasonable rent for a gloomy flat, I headed to the local mall.
There were all kinds of things that could help you too help make an IKEA-like house, and I was gazinggazed at small lampshades and cuddly toys for quite a long time.
In the end, I’d bought a big wool plaid blanket, a garland, and about a thousand various detailcorations, from glasses to rugs.
I'm guessing at blanket, but 'plaid' isn't a thing. Guessing you mean decoration instead of 'details' as well.
After I’d put everything in order in the flat, I felt great.
The apartment was still wretched and gloomy, and I couldn’t help thinking that it was quite a strange place, but, in general, I was pleased by my efforts to make it look good.
Nevertheless, I hadn't lived in this place even for a year.
This doesn't make sense. I think you are trying to say something like 'However, I hadn't lived in this place for even a year, and already I was not happy.'
It turned out that I overrated my ability to adjust to unpleasant conditions.
No doubt, the city was impressive and sparkly, and there were a lot of small restaurants and pubs.
I suspect you mean sparkly - sparky means energetic, but is not really used for places.
You could walk there for hours and always find new, amazing places.
I had a job and friends there, and I'd even found small libraries and bookshops that become my favourite spots in the city.
And yet I couldn’t bear living there.
Crowded streets made me anxious, and constant noise caused mye headaches.
'Caused my headaches' would be correct if you had already referred to the headaches.
If I wanted to spend some time in a library, I had to cross half of the city to get there, and if I wanted to buy a coffee, I often had to staywait in a long line.
More than that, this megatropolis just made me depressed.
Maybe it was its weather, with constant wind and rain, or possibly it was aboutthe gloomy people that I seeaw day byafter day.
It seemed they forgot how to laugh, always busy with their jobs and projects.
So at one point, finally, I decided to move to another place.
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Oct. 12, 2022
By the timeWhen I grew up, I decided to move to another city.
Can you explain why?
Oct. 12, 2022
Amazed by the idea of building a life by myself and spending time as I wanted, I didn’t pay much attention to anything I didn’t like there: crowded streets, noisy people, polluted air, and garbage here and there.
building a life and spending time — because both verbs should either be infinitive or gerunds?
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Many things there made me disuncomfortedable, but I was too young and too arrogant to notice.
to notice the bleakness of the city where I've lived
Oct. 12, 2022
There were all kinds of things that could help you too help make an IKEA-like house, and I was gazinggazed at small lampshades and cuddly toys for quite a long time.
Action/state happened in the past over a period of time. — past continuous, so "was gazing." It was the wrong way to use it?
Oct. 12, 2022
In the end, I’d bought a big wool plaid blanket, a garland, and about a thousand various detailcorations, from glasses to rugs.
Why not " I’d bought"? First I’d bought, then I put everything in order in the flat. Isn't it the correct use?
Oct. 12, 2022
In the end, I’d bought a big wool plaid blanket, a garland, and about a thousand various detailcorations, from glasses to rugs.
decorations is a great word, thank you!
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Nevertheless, I hadn't lived in this place even for a year.
yes, you right
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No doubt, the city was impressive and sparkly, and there were a lot of small restaurants and pubs.
yes, this is the correct word
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Crowded streets made me anxious, and constant noise caused mye headaches.
so "caused me pain/headaches/tooth pain'' is the correct use?
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thank you so much for your corrections, it was very useful!
Oct. 12, 2022
Can you explain why?
"By the time I had" indicates the end of a passage of time during which something happens. e.g. "I had decided". While I was growing up I thought about it and over that period of growing up I made a decision.
"When I grew up" indicates a point in time, at which point you make a decision. "I decided".
Hope that helps.
Oct. 12, 2022
building a life and spending time — because both verbs should either be infinitive or gerunds?
I'm afraid I'm not good with the technical reasonings, I'm just a native speaker.
Oct. 12, 2022
to notice the bleakness of the city where I've lived
Yes, perfect.
Oct. 12, 2022
Action/state happened in the past over a period of time. — past continuous, so "was gazing." It was the wrong way to use it?
Again, not sure of the grammar terms, but it doesn't work with 'quite a long time'. You could say:
"I was gazing at the small lampshades and cuddly toys and suddenly realised they were all horrible!"
"I was gazing at the small lampshades when the fire alarm went off."
"I gazed at the small lampshades and cuddly toys for so long that the staff became concerned."
Oct. 12, 2022
Why not " I’d bought"? First I’d bought, then I put everything in order in the flat. Isn't it the correct use?
I'd is a contraction of "I had". You would not say "I had bought" in this context, just "I bought".
You could say "I had bought a blanket" to create emphasis e.g.
"I had bought a blanket at Ikea, but I wasn't sure of the quality."
You could also say, with the same meaning:
"I did buy a blanket at Ikea, but I wasn't sure of the quality." and also
"I bought a blanket at Ikea, but I wasn't sure of the quality."
Oct. 12, 2022
so "caused me pain/headaches/tooth pain'' is the correct use?
Yes.
The noise caused me headaches.
The noise caused me to have headaches.
After a year in the city I found I was suffering from shortness of breath and headaches. I realised the noise was causing my headaches, and the pollution was leading to my shortness of breath.
('causing' and 'leading to' can be used as synonyms in this context)
Oct. 12, 2022
"By the time I had" indicates the end of a passage of time during which something happens. e.g. "I had decided". While I was growing up I thought about it and over that period of growing up I made a decision. "When I grew up" indicates a point in time, at which point you make a decision. "I decided". Hope that helps.
thank you, I see the difference now!
Oct. 12, 2022
I'm afraid I'm not good with the technical reasonings, I'm just a native speaker.
okay, thank you
Oct. 12, 2022
Again, not sure of the grammar terms, but it doesn't work with 'quite a long time'. You could say: "I was gazing at the small lampshades and cuddly toys and suddenly realised they were all horrible!" "I was gazing at the small lampshades when the fire alarm went off." "I gazed at the small lampshades and cuddly toys for so long that the staff became concerned."
thank you! I shouldn't use this tense here and there just because I feel it is suit lol.
Oct. 12, 2022
I'd is a contraction of "I had". You would not say "I had bought" in this context, just "I bought". You could say "I had bought a blanket" to create emphasis e.g. "I had bought a blanket at Ikea, but I wasn't sure of the quality." You could also say, with the same meaning: "I did buy a blanket at Ikea, but I wasn't sure of the quality." and also "I bought a blanket at Ikea, but I wasn't sure of the quality."
yes, I understand what you mean here. In this case Past Simple is better.
Oct. 12, 2022
Yes. The noise caused me headaches. The noise caused me to have headaches. After a year in the city I found I was suffering from shortness of breath and headaches. I realised the noise was causing my headaches, and the pollution was leading to my shortness of breath. ('causing' and 'leading to' can be used as synonyms in this context)
great examples! ❤️
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I had always liked to live in big cities—at first, my family had lived in a huge megapolis, where my parents were getting an education while I was at school. I had always liked |
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It was a grim, depressing city that matched more, as I think now, for working people who crave careers and success. It was a grim, depressing city that |
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Millions of people were hustling there day by day, forgetting about calmness and losing their minds. |
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The weather was mostly cold, and the long dark streets I walked through made me often think of monsters and ghosts. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I never liked this city but couldn't change anything. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After all, it was a place to live that my parents chose. After all, it was |
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Both of them went to work early in the morning and returned late when I usually slept. Both of them went to work early in the morning and returned late |
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Neither they, nor I had time for spent with each other: I was busy with school, and they were dealing with their adult jobs. Neither they, nor I, had time |
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In some way, this city helped me to understand at least one fact— I don’t want to live in a place like that one. In some way, this city helped me to understand at least one fact— I don’t want to live in a place like that |
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By the time I grew up, I decided to move to another city.
Either "When I grew up, I decided to move to another city." Or "By the time I grew up, I had decided I would move to another city." |
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This one was similarly dark and cold as the previous city, but at least, I chose it by myself. This one was similarly dark and cold as the previous city, but, at least, I chose it by myself. |
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Any young adult appreciates freedom, and I was not an exception. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Amazed by the idea building a life by myself and spend time as I want, I didn’t pay much attention to anything I didn’t like there: crowded streets, noisy people, polluted air, and garbage here and there. Amazed by the idea of building a life by myself and spending time as I wanted, I didn’t pay much attention to anything I didn’t like there: crowded streets, noisy people, polluted air, and garbage here and there. |
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Many things there made me discomforted but I was too young and too arrogant. Many things there made me Too young and too arrogant for what? I've guessed 'to notice'. |
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I’d decided to have an amazing life there and nothing could stop me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Firstly I decided to create a comfortable home, and after paying unreasonable rent for a gloomy flat, I headed to the local mall. Firstly, I decided to create a comfortable home, |
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There were all kinds of things that could help you to make an IKEA-like house, and I was gazing at small lampshades and cuddly toys for quite a long. There were all kinds of things t |
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In the end, I’d bought a big wool plaid, a garland, and about a thousand various details, from glasses to rugs. In the end, I I'm guessing at blanket, but 'plaid' isn't a thing. Guessing you mean decoration instead of 'details' as well. |
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After I’d put everything in order in the flat, I felt great. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The apartment was still wretched and gloomy, and I couldn’t help thinking that it was quite a strange place, but in general, I was pleased by my efforts to make it look good. The apartment was still wretched and gloomy, and I couldn’t help thinking that it was quite a strange place, but, in general, I was pleased by my efforts to make it look good. |
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Nevertheless, I hadn't lived in this place even for a year. Nevertheless, I hadn't lived in this place even for a year. This doesn't make sense. I think you are trying to say something like 'However, I hadn't lived in this place for even a year, and already I was not happy.' |
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It turned out that I overrated my ability to adjust to unpleasant conditions. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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No doubt, the city was impressive and sparky, and there were a lot of small restaurants and pubs. No doubt, the city was impressive and sparkly, and there were a lot of small restaurants and pubs. I suspect you mean sparkly - sparky means energetic, but is not really used for places. |
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You could walk there for hours and always find new, amazing places. You could walk |
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I had a job and friends there, and I'd even found small libraries and bookshops that become my favourite spots in the city. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And yet I couldn’t bear living there. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Crowded streets made me anxious, and constant noise caused my headaches. Crowded streets made me anxious, and constant noise caused m 'Caused my headaches' would be correct if you had already referred to the headaches. |
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If I wanted to spend some time in a library, I had to cross half of the city to get there, and if I wanted to buy a coffee, I often had to stay in a long line. If I wanted to spend some time in a library, I had to cross half of the city to get there, and if I wanted to buy a coffee, I often had to |
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More than that, this megapolis just made me depressed. More than that, this me |
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Maybe it was its weather, with constant wind and rain, or possibly it was about gloomy people that I see day by day. Maybe it was its weather, with constant wind and rain, or possibly it was |
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It seemed they forgot how to laugh, always busy with their jobs and projects. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So at one point, I decided to move to another place. So |
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I had always liked living in big cities—at first, my family had lived in a huge metropolis, where my parents were getting an education while I was at school. |
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It was a grim, depressing city that suited more, I realise now, professional people who craved careers and success. |
|
After all, it was the place to live that my parents chose. |
|
Both of them went to work early in the morning and returned late, usually when I slept. |
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Neither they, nor I, had time to spend with each other: I was busy with school, and they were dealing with their adult jobs. |
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In some way, this city helped me to understand at least one fact— I don’t want to live in a place like that. |
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When I grew up, I decided to move to another city. |
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This one was similarly dark and cold as the previous city, but, at least, I chose it by myself. |
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Amazed by the idea of building a life by myself and spending time as I wanted, I didn’t pay much attention to anything I didn’t like there: crowded streets, noisy people, polluted air, and garbage here and there. |
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Many things there made me uncomfortable, but I was too young and too arrogant to notice the bleakness of the city where I decided to live. |
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I wanted to have an amazing life there and nothing could stop me. |
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Firstly, I decided to create a comfortable home, so after paying unreasonable rent for a gloomy flat, I headed to the local mall. |
|
There were all kinds of things to help make an IKEA-like house, and I gazed at small lampshades and cuddly toys for quite a long time. |
|
In the end, I bought a big wool blanket, a garland, and about a thousand various decorations, from glasses to rugs. |
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After I put everything in order in the flat, I felt great. |
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The apartment was still wretched and gloomy, and I couldn’t help thinking that it was quite a strange place, but, in general, I was pleased by my efforts to make it look good. |
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However, I hadn't lived in this place for even a year, and already I was not happy. |
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No doubt, the city was impressive and sparkly, and there were a lot of small restaurants and pubs. |
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You could walk for hours and always find new, amazing places. |
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Crowded streets made me anxious, and constant noise caused me headaches. |
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If I wanted to spend some time in a library, I had to cross half of the city to get there, and if I wanted to buy a coffee, I often had to wait in a long line. |
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More than that, this metropolis just made me depressed. |
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Maybe it was its weather, with constant wind and rain, or possibly it was the gloomy people that I saw day after day. |
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So, finally, I decided to move to another place. |
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