May 22, 2023
There are many words in life I can't forget, no matter how much time passes. One of which is my older sister's warning to me when I was in middle school - "Stay away from soldiers and do not antagonize them"
My elementary and middle school are situated in an area adjacent to a military university, an army detachment, a big fire station (belonging to the army), and even a naval office. I studied with many classmates from the military units, and many teachers were military officials' wives, the local schools have no right s to reject them. Most of such students and ladies were well educated, and some of such teachers were enthusiastic about their job. However, that's not the case for common soldiers.
I knew some of the local illegal crime groups liked to buy help from the soldiers, though they were only a small portion of them, local residents and policemen had no way to deal with it.
My classmate was beaten to be disabled was beyond the soldiers' expectations, but I believe it was not their first time. As I wrote in the last entry, I thought their final punishment was strict. In fact, when I see my classmate walk like a hunchback and not capable to work normally, I feel the pain in him. The punishment was not enough, some of them should be jailed and the army should pay money monthly to guarantee a normal life for my classmate.
Moreover, the media in my country generally won't report negative news about the army. They only show their positive aspects. As nationalism increased in recent 10 years, this biased report is stretched to policemen and state-owned corporations. To be more clear; all news for the above field is positive, bad news only for private companies.
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There are many words in life I can't forget, no matter how much time passes.
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As I wrote in the last entry, I thought their final punishment was strict.
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The punishment was not enough. Some of them should have been jailed and the army should have paid my classmate restitution on a monthly basis to guarantee a normal life for him.
Moreover, the media in my country generally won't report negative news about the army.
They only show their positive aspects.
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They only write about their positive aspects.
As nationalism has increased in recenthe past 10 years, this biased reporting is stretchextended to policemen and state-owned corporations.
To be more clear;: all news for the above field iss are positive, while bad news is reserved only for private companies.
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How He was Disabled (4) - end
There are many words in life I can't forget, no matter how much time passes.
One of which is my older sister's warning to me when I was in middle school - "Stay away from soldiers and do not antagonize them"
MBoth my elementary and middle school are situated in an area adjacent to a military university, an army detachment, a big fire station (belonging to the army), and even a naval office.
I studied with many classmates from the military units, and many teachers were military officials' wives, t. The local schools have no right s to reject them.
Most of such students and ladies were well educated, and some of such teachers were enthusiastic about their job.
However, that's not the case for common soldiers.
I knew some of the local illegal crime groups liked to buy help from the soldiers, though they were only a small portion of them, local residents and policemen had no way to deal with it.
My classmate was beaten to be disabled was beyond the soldiers' expectations, but I believe it was not their first time.
As I wrote in the last entry, I thought their final punishment was strict.
In fact, when I see my classmate walk like a hunchback and not capable to work normally, I feel the pain in him.
The punishment was not enough, some of them should be jailed and the army should pay money monthly to guarantee a normal life for my classmate.
Moreover, the media in my country generally won't report negative news about the army.
They only show their positive aspects.
As nationalism increased in recent 10 years, this biased report is stretched to policemen and state-owned corporations.
To be more clear; all news for the above field is positive, bad news only for private companies.
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I found your story about the presence of military personnel and the challenges you mentioned quite intriguing. Thank you for sharing your experiences and thoughts.
There are many wordspieces of advice in life I can't forget, no matter how much time passes.
"words" works grammatically, but it sounds funny in English. It would be better to be more specific.
One of which is my older sister's warning to me when I was in middle school -, "Stay away from soldiers, and do not antagonize them"
Minor punctuation issues.
My elementary and middle school awere situated in an area adjacent to a military university, an army detachment, a big fire station (belonging to the army), and even a naval office.
Another minor issue, but since the rest of the story is in past tense this sounds more natural. Also "in an area" here is unnecessarily wordy, but not incorrect.
I studied with many classmates from the military units, and many teachers were military officials' wives, the local schools have no right s to reject themwere required to hire them if they applied.
Most of such students and ladies were well -educated, and some of such teachers were enthusiastic about their job.
However, that' was not the case for common soldiers.
I knew some of the local illegal crime groups liked to buy help from the soldiers, though they were only a small portion ofonly a few soldiers worked with them, local residents and policemen had no way to deal with it.
"they were only a small portion of them" I'm not clear what you mean by this. Only a few soldiers participated with the crime groups? There were only a few crime groups? This also sounds off in English.
My classmate was beaten tso be disabled was beyond the soldiers' expectationsadly he was disabled, but I believe it was not their first time.
"was beyond the soldiers' expectations" I'm not clear what you mean by this.
As I wrote in the last entry, I thought their final punishment was strict.
Whose punishment?
In fact, when I see my classmate walk like a hunchback and inot capable tof working normally, I feel the pain in him.
The punishment was not enough, s. Some of them should behave been jailed, and the army should pay money monthly to guarantee a normal life for my classmate.
I'm a little confused here because earlier you say the punishment was strict.
As nationalism has increased in recenover the past 10 years, this biased reporting is stretched to policemen and state-owned corporations.
I'm not sure what you mean in the second part of the sentence. Are you saying that the media is more biased now that before? Maybe change to: "As nationalism has increased over the past 10 years, positive media coverage is the only media coverage for the police and state-owned corporations."
To be more clear; all news for the above field is positive, bad news only for private companies.
Edited to flow better with the previous sentence.
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This was overall a great text! I apologize for so many little corrections. It was close to perfect so any little error stands out. Keep up the good work!
Also, if this is a true story, I'm sorry to hear about your friend.
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The punishment was not enough, some of them should be jailed and the army should pay money monthly to guarantee a normal life for my classmate. The punishment was not enough I'm a little confused here because earlier you say the punishment was strict. This sentence has been marked as perfect! The punishment was not enough あるいは、 The punishment was not enough. Some of them should have been jailed and the army should have paid my classmate restitution on a monthly basis to guarantee a normal life for him. |
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They only show their positive aspects. This sentence has been marked as perfect! They only show their positive aspects. また、 They only write about their positive aspects. |
As nationalism increased in recent 10 years, this biased report is stretched to policemen and state-owned corporations. As nationalism has increased I'm not sure what you mean in the second part of the sentence. Are you saying that the media is more biased now that before? Maybe change to: "As nationalism has increased over the past 10 years, positive media coverage is the only media coverage for the police and state-owned corporations." This sentence has been marked as perfect! As nationalism has increased in |
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