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666coolboy

June 1, 2022

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How do you make someone feel special with a card?

Writing the words seriously and honestly in the card. The power of words is incredible and amazing. You can use this power with an honest heart.
Your question makes a recall of my memory to me. A girl moved my heart by a simple card with a mail. We are deskmate when we are studying in a junior school. She is a gentle and kind gril and easy to cry by other’s bullying. I am the boy who always against the rule and is naughty, so I protected her every time when she is bullied by others. At that time, I thought she was my good friend even though she had already fallen in love with me.

Time goes by, and we went to different high schools, and there is nothing special happened before I receive a mail from her.

“Hey! ZHOU! You got a mail from a girl.”

“Thank you!”

“Who will write a mail to me in this era that everyone has a phone?” I opened the mail with confusion and I read it.

Dear ZHOU,

How are you today? We don’t have a chat long time, so I can’t stand myself to send this card to you. I am writing this mail with a warm heart. Although I decide to study hard and do not make myself in an embarrassing situation which I need to miss a person every time, I still do it.

I guess you already have a girlfriend? A lot of girls like you, I know that. I guess you have a good academic grade. A lot of effort you do it every day in your daily life. I guess you don’t think I am attractive. I am only a good friend in your heart.

Even though I know this, I want to talk with you. To ask how are you now, what are you doing and so on. Could we hang out on this weekend?
Yours,
Lu

This is an email with love even if it doesn’t refer to any “love”. I feel moved and really appreciated.

I hope this story can help you. If you want to write a nice card, plz take it with love.

Corrections

How do you make someone feel special with a card?

Writinge the words seriously and honestly in the card.

This sentence is incomplete because it's missing a subject. I suggest either "Write the words seriously and honestly in the card." because you are instructing the person how to write or "Writing the words seriously and honestly in the card is important" because you are describing the writing.

The power of words is incredible and amazing.

You can use this power with an honest heart.

Your question makes a recall of my memory to me.

I understand the sentence, but I think it can be written to sound more natural. "Your question brings back a memory.", "Your question helps me remember, "I recall one of my memories because of your question."

A girl moved my heart bywith a simple card with ain the mail.

We awere deskmates when we are studyingied in a junior school.

Because you are talking about a memory, I think the rest of the sentences should be in the past tense.

She iwas a gentle and kind grirl and easy to cry bycried easily because of other’s bullying.

past tense.

I amwas the boy who always againstbroke the rules and iwas naughty, so I protected her every time when she iwas bullied by others.

past tense.

At that time, I thought she was my good friend even though she had already fallen in love with me.

Time goeswent by, and we went to different high schools, and there is n. Nothing special happened beforeuntil I receive a mailletter from her.

I think the sentence is long with because of all the "ands". I suggest splitting it up to make it easier to read, but if you were speaking, all of the "ands" would sound fine.

“Hey!

ZHOU!

You got a mailletter from a girl.”

“Thank you!”

“Who willould write a mailletter to me in this era thatwhen everyone has a phone?” I opened the mailletter with confusion, and I read it.

"in this era" is fine but it's not as commonly used.

Dear ZHOU,

How are you today?

We don’t have a chat long time, so I can’t stand myself to sendhaven't talked in a long time, so I had trouble writing this card to you.

I am writing this mailletter with a warm heart.

Although I decided to study hard and do not makeput myself in an embarrassing situations which I need to miss a person every time, I still do it.

I didn't understand this part of the sentence " which I need to miss a person every time", so I recommend removing it. The sentence still makes sense without it.

I guess you already have a girlfriend?

A lot of girls like you, I know that.

I guess you have a good academic grades.

AYou put a lot of effort you dinto it every day in your daily life.

I guess you don’t think I am attractive.

I am only a good friend in your heart.

Maybe "I am only a good friend to you", but since this is a love letter. I think "in my heart" works.

Even though I know this, I want to talk with you.

To ask how are you now, and what are youyou are doing and so on.

Could we hang out on this weekend?

Yours,

Lu

This is an email with love even if it doesn’t refer to any “love”.

I feelt moved and really appreciated.

past tense

I hope this story can help you.

If you want to write a nice card, plz take it with love.

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666coolboy

June 2, 2022

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Thank you for editing!

How do you make someone feel special with a card?


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Writing the words seriously and honestly in the card.


Writinge the words seriously and honestly in the card.

This sentence is incomplete because it's missing a subject. I suggest either "Write the words seriously and honestly in the card." because you are instructing the person how to write or "Writing the words seriously and honestly in the card is important" because you are describing the writing.

The power of words is incredible and amazing.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You can use this power with an honest heart.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Your question makes a recall of my memory to me.


Your question makes a recall of my memory to me.

I understand the sentence, but I think it can be written to sound more natural. "Your question brings back a memory.", "Your question helps me remember, "I recall one of my memories because of your question."

A girl moved my heart by a simple card with a mail.


A girl moved my heart bywith a simple card with ain the mail.

We are deskmate when we are studying in a junior school.


We awere deskmates when we are studyingied in a junior school.

Because you are talking about a memory, I think the rest of the sentences should be in the past tense.

She is a gentle and kind gril and easy to cry by other’s bullying.


She iwas a gentle and kind grirl and easy to cry bycried easily because of other’s bullying.

past tense.

I am the boy who always against the rule and is naughty, so I protected her every time when she is bullied by others.


I amwas the boy who always againstbroke the rules and iwas naughty, so I protected her every time when she iwas bullied by others.

past tense.

At that time, I thought she was my good friend even though she had already fallen in love with me.


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Time goes by, and we went to different high schools, and there is nothing special happened before I receive a mail from her.


Time goeswent by, and we went to different high schools, and there is n. Nothing special happened beforeuntil I receive a mailletter from her.

I think the sentence is long with because of all the "ands". I suggest splitting it up to make it easier to read, but if you were speaking, all of the "ands" would sound fine.

“Hey!


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ZHOU!


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You got a mail from a girl.”


You got a mailletter from a girl.”

“Thank you!”


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“Who will write a mail to me in this era that everyone has a phone?” I opened the mail with confusion and I read it.


“Who willould write a mailletter to me in this era thatwhen everyone has a phone?” I opened the mailletter with confusion, and I read it.

"in this era" is fine but it's not as commonly used.

Dear ZHOU,


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How are you today?


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We don’t have a chat long time, so I can’t stand myself to send this card to you.


We don’t have a chat long time, so I can’t stand myself to sendhaven't talked in a long time, so I had trouble writing this card to you.

I am writing this mail with a warm heart.


I am writing this mailletter with a warm heart.

Although I decide to study hard and do not make myself in an embarrassing situation which I need to miss a person every time, I still do it.


Although I decided to study hard and do not makeput myself in an embarrassing situations which I need to miss a person every time, I still do it.

I didn't understand this part of the sentence " which I need to miss a person every time", so I recommend removing it. The sentence still makes sense without it.

I guess you already have a girlfriend?


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A lot of girls like you, I know that.


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I guess you have a good academic grade.


I guess you have a good academic grades.

A lot of effort you do it every day in your daily life.


AYou put a lot of effort you dinto it every day in your daily life.

I guess you don’t think I am attractive.


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I am only a good friend in your heart.


I am only a good friend in your heart.

Maybe "I am only a good friend to you", but since this is a love letter. I think "in my heart" works.

Even though I know this, I want to talk with you.


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To ask how are you now, what are you doing and so on.


To ask how are you now, and what are youyou are doing and so on.

Could we hang out on this weekend?


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Yours,


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Lu


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This is an email with love even if it doesn’t refer to any “love”.


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I feel moved and really appreciated.


I feelt moved and really appreciated.

past tense

I hope this story can help you.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

If you want to write a nice card, plz take it with love.


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