April 25, 2022
House or Apartment? Why?
Well, for the 12 years I have lived in a cozy large house with my family. All of us have separate rooms for our need for privacy. yet there is a big dining room where we watch watching TV or having dinner together. My family and I live in a lovely three-story houses that all of the floor belongs to us. When I turn 18, I started to leave alone in third floor. it had an unobstructed view and a big patio, where I like to sit, watch sunrise.
I love To live in luxury Apartments however my affordability can not provide such tons of money to buy lux apartment. In contrast, houses are usually suitable for to those who prefer privacy and quiet lifestyle.
In my perspective, it heavily depends on people’s affordability and preferences since each type of property has it own perks. Living in dormitory with other roommates is totally different from living in my own house. It’s quite small and it’s painfully noisy. After spending a little time there, you start to feel homesick. there are a lot of people there and I don’t have my own spaces. Although when I was living at home, I had my own place and it made me feel comfortable. Because of that living alone is a great idea for introverted person like me.
House or Apartment? Why?
Well, for the 12 years I have lived in a cozy large house with my family.
Cozy typically implies that whatever is being described is small or intimate so using it with the adjective “large” doesn’t make a lot of sense.
All of us have separate rooms for our need for privacy.
Consider rephrasing this as ‘for our need for privacy’ isn’t really a way native English speakers would phrase it. An example might be: We each have separate rooms for some privacy.
yet there is a big dining room where we watch watching TV or having dinner together.
Consider combining this sentence and the one before it. Example: While we have our own rooms for privacy, there is a big dining room where we can gather to watch TV or have dinner.
My family and I live in a lovely three-story houses that all of the floor belongs to us.
The phrasing is a little awkward. To explain that your family owns all three stories, you could say: “My family and I live in a lovely, three-story house that we own.” By saying it this way it implies ownership of all three floors.
When I turn 18, I started to leave alone in third floor.
Great! Just a little tense error. Leave (to leave) means to move away from a place. I think you want to say that you live (reside) on the third floor. :)
it had an unobstructed view and a big patio, where I like to sit, watch sunrise.
had = has
“…where I like to sit and watch the sunrise”
I love To live in luxury Apartments however my affordability can not provide such tons of money to buy lux apartment.
What you’re expressing is good, just a bit awkwardly worded. Consider: I would love to live in a luxury apartment but my family cannot afford to do so.
In contrast, houses are usually suitable for to those who prefer privacy and quiet lifestyle.
In my perspective, it heavily depends on people’s affordability and preferences since each type of property has it own perks.
Living in dormitory with other roommates is totally different from living in my own house.
Just missing the word ‘a’ before ‘dormitory’: “Living in a dormitory…”
It’s quite small and it’s painfully noisy.
After spending a little time there, you start to feel homesick.
there are a lot of people there and I don’t have my own spaces.
Capitalization of “There” at the beginning.
Although when I was living at home, I had my own place and it made me feel comfortable.
A little bit awkward. Consider leaving out ‘although’
Because of that living alone is a great idea for introverted person like me.
Feedback
You definitely have the general concepts and this is a really good piece. I know I suggested a lot but much of it is very minor in terms of errors. Watch out that you stay consistent in your tense (past, present, future, for example). :)
April 28, 2022
Thanks for your great and useful correction. I will still consider all the notes you said in my future writing.
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I love Tto live in luxury Aapartments, however my affordability, I can not provide such tons of moneyafford to buy a luxury apartment.
In contrast, houses are usually suitable for to those who prefer privacy and a quiet lifestyle.
In my perspective, it heavily depends on what people’s can affordability and and their preferences since each type of property has it own perks.
Living in a dormitory with other roommates is totally different from living in my own house.
there are a lot of people there and I don’t have my own spaces.
Although wWhen I was living at home, I had my own place and it made me feel comfortable.
Because of that, living alone is a great idea for introverted person like me.
April 27, 2022
Thanks For your correction
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Well, for the 12 years I have lived in a cozy large house with my family. Well, for the past 12 years I have lived in a Well, for the 12 years I have lived in a cozy large house with my family. Cozy typically implies that whatever is being described is small or intimate so using it with the adjective “large” doesn’t make a lot of sense. |
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All of us have separate rooms for our need for privacy. All of us have separate rooms All of us have separate rooms for our need for privacy. Consider rephrasing this as ‘for our need for privacy’ isn’t really a way native English speakers would phrase it. An example might be: We each have separate rooms for some privacy. |
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yet there is a big dining room where we watch watching TV or having dinner together. yet, there is a big dining room where we watch yet there is a big dining room where we watch yet there is a big dining room where we watch watching TV or having dinner together. Consider combining this sentence and the one before it. Example: While we have our own rooms for privacy, there is a big dining room where we can gather to watch TV or have dinner. |
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My family and I live in a lovely three-story houses that all of the floor belongs to us. My family and I live in a lovely three-story house My family and I live in a lovely three-story houses that all of the floor belongs to us. The phrasing is a little awkward. To explain that your family owns all three stories, you could say: “My family and I live in a lovely, three-story house that we own.” By saying it this way it implies ownership of all three floors. |
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When I turn 18, I started to leave alone in third floor. When I turned 18, I started to l When I turn 18, I started to leave alone in third floor. Great! Just a little tense error. Leave (to leave) means to move away from a place. I think you want to say that you live (reside) on the third floor. :) |
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it had an unobstructed view and a big patio, where I like to sit, watch sunrise. it ha it had an unobstructed view and a big patio, where I like to sit, watch sunrise. had = has “…where I like to sit and watch the sunrise” |
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I love To live in luxury Apartments however my affordability can not provide such tons of money to buy lux apartment. I love I love To live in luxury Apartments however my affordability can not provide such tons of money to buy lux apartment. What you’re expressing is good, just a bit awkwardly worded. Consider: I would love to live in a luxury apartment but my family cannot afford to do so. |
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In contrast, houses are usually suitable for to those who prefer privacy and quiet lifestyle. In contrast, houses are usually suitable for to those who prefer privacy and a quiet lifestyle. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In my perspective, it heavily depends on people’s affordability and preferences since each type of property has it own perks. In my perspective, it heavily depends on what people This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Living in dormitory with other roommates is totally different from living in my own house. Living in a dormitory with other roommates is totally different from living in my own house. Living in dormitory with other roommates is totally different from living in my own house. Just missing the word ‘a’ before ‘dormitory’: “Living in a dormitory…” |
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It’s quite small and it’s painfully noisy. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After spending a little time there, you start to feel homesick. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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there are a lot of people there and I don’t have my own spaces. there are a lot of people there and I don’t have my own space there are a lot of people there and I don’t have my own spaces. Capitalization of “There” at the beginning. |
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Although when I was living at home, I had my own place and it made me feel comfortable.
Although when I was living at home, I had my own place and it made me feel comfortable. A little bit awkward. Consider leaving out ‘although’ |
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Because of that living alone is a great idea for introverted person like me. Because of that, living alone is a great idea for introverted person like me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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