May 19, 2020
Homeschooling
When I heard the word "homeschooling", I wondered why students in countries which haveth system do not need go to school, since in Japan, every student has to go to school. I looked it up on the internet and found that it is for students who cannot go to school for some reasons and whose parents are worried that their children cannot receive good education. Then I thought maybe Japan also need to introduce this system, because there are a lot of problems with schools like bullying, and suicide rate in Japan is quite high.
Homeschooling
When I heard the word "homeschooling", I wondered why students in countries whichthat have that system do not needaren't required to go to school, since in Japan, every student in Japan has to go to school.
Repeating "have to go to school" two times in a sentence sounds a bit repetitive. The correction is just another way to say that.
I looked it up on the internet and found that it is for students who cannot go to school for some reasons and or whose parents are worried that their children canwill not receive a good education.
"Will not" sounds better in this context compared to "cannot".
Then I thought maybe Japan also need tshould also introduce this system, because there are a lot of problems within schools like bullying, and the suicide rate in Japan isbeing quite high.
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May 19, 2020
Thank you!!
Homeschooling
When I heard the word "homeschooling", I wondered why students in countries which have that system do not need go to school, since in Japan, every student has to go to school in Japan.
I looked it up on the internet and found that it is for students who cannot go to school for somecertain reasons and whose parents are worried that their children cannot receive a good education.
'Certain' sound more natural in this context, since the reasons for homeschooling are usually known.
Then I thought maybe Japan also needs to introduce this system, because there are a lot of problems within schools like bullying, and the suicide rate in Japan is quite high.
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Written well, with a few minor mistakes.
It's interesting to hear that Japan doesn't have a homeschooling system, I didn't know this. Homeschooling still has its own issues but it seems like it could be beneficial in Japan!
May 19, 2020
Thank you!
Well I didn’t know you had that system😄
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When I heard the word "homeschooling", I wondered why students in countries which haveth system do not need go to school, since in Japan, every student has to go to school. When I heard the word "homeschooling", I wondered why students in countries which have that system do not need go to school, since When I heard the word "homeschooling", I wondered why students in countries Repeating "have to go to school" two times in a sentence sounds a bit repetitive. The correction is just another way to say that. |
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I looked it up on the internet and found that it is for students who cannot go to school for some reasons and whose parents are worried that their children cannot receive good education. I looked it up on the internet and found that it is for students who cannot go to school for 'Certain' sound more natural in this context, since the reasons for homeschooling are usually known. I looked it up on the internet and found that it is for students who cannot go to school for some reason "Will not" sounds better in this context compared to "cannot". |
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Then I thought maybe Japan also need to introduce this system, because there are a lot of problems with schools like bullying, and suicide rate in Japan is quite high. Then I thought maybe Japan also needs to introduce this system, because there are a lot of problems Then I thought maybe Japan |
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