April 12, 2022
My boyfriend tom is so great. We studid together medecine and go to the colloge we live together in a arparment. Tom and I know us than we children been . He is so nice and good . When I sick she to take care of of me . He cooks for me and clean and watch with me movies . He is very smart and after the stepenium we are married . My parents and his parents are good friends and they try good. Tom and I do in our freetime many things we hick in the nature and go to the beach serving . But my dates are on the best Tom make woderful dates with flowers and resturants . Once he surprise me with yellow flowers and chocolate he is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
mMy boyfriend tTom
My boyfriend Tom
My boyfriend tTom is so great.
My boyfriend Tom is so great.
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We studied together medeicine and go to the same colloege we. We also live together in an arpartment.
We studied medicine and go to the same college. We also live together in an apartment.
When I am sick she has to take care of of me .
When I am sick he has to take care of of me .
He cooks for me and, cleans and watch with mes movies with me.
He cooks for me, cleans and watches movies with me.
He is very smart and after the stepeniumwedding we are married .
He is very smart and after the wedding we are married .
My parents and his parents are good friends and they try goodto get along well.
My parents and his parents are good friends and they try to get along well.
Tom and I do in our freetime do many things we hicke in the nature and go to the beach serving to surf.
Tom and I do in our freetime do many things we hike in nature and go to the beach to surf.
But my dates are on the best. Tom mtakes me on wonderful dates with flowers and restaurants .
But my dates are the best. Tom takes me on wonderful dates with flowers and restaurants .
Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate he is very a nice guy and I love him so much. Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate he is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
mMy boyfriend tom
My boyfriend tom
My boyfriend tom is so great.
My boyfriend tom is great.
We studied together medecine and go to thmedicine together, and attend the same colloege we, and we even live together in an arpartment.
We studied medicine together, and attend the same college, and we even live together in an apartment.
mMy bBoyfriend tTom
My Boyfriend Tom
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My boyfriend tTom is so great.
My boyfriend Tom is so great.
We studid togetherwent to college, and studied medeicine and go to the colloge wtogether. We lived together in an arpartment.
We went to college, and studied medicine together. We lived together in an apartment
Is this the past, or is it now (present)?
Past: We went to college, and studied medicine together. We lived together in an apartment.
Present: We go to college and study medicine together. We live together in an apartment.
Tom and I know us than we children been have known each other since we were young.
Tom and I have known each other since we were young.
I think this is what you were trying to say. If I misunderstood please tell me and I will try again :)
He is so nice and good kind.
He is so nice and kind.
In english, we don't usually use "good" as a description for people without explaining what they are good at.
Examples:
"He is a good boyfriend"
"He is a good cook"
When I was sick she to takeok care of of me .
When I was sick he took care of me.
I think this is what you were trying to say. If I misunderstood please tell me and I will try again :)
He cooks for me and, cleans, and watch with mes movies with me.
He cooks for me, cleans, and watches movies with me.
Tom and I do iIn our free time, Tom and I do many things wtogether. We hicke in the nature and go surfing ato the beach serving .
In our free time, Tom and I do many things together. We hike in nature and go surfing at the beach.
But my dates are on the bbest of all are our datest. Tom makeplans wonderful dates with flowers and restaurants .
But best of all are our dates. Tom plans wonderful dates with flowers and restaurants.
Once, he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate h. He is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
Once, he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate. He is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
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This was a very good effort, well done!
A good thing for you to practise would be past, present and future tenses.
Past: We lived in an apartment
Present: We live in an apartment
Future: We will live in an apartment
Tom sounds wonderful :)
mMy boyfriend tTom
My boyfriend Tom
Tom is a proper noun so it needs to be capitalised
My boyfriend tTom is so great.
My boyfriend Tom is great.
See above comment
We studied together medecine and go to the collogemedicine together and go to college together, we live together in an arpartment.
We studied medicine together and go to college together, we live together in an apartment.
This sentence says that you studied (past tense) together but still (present) go to college together, this could be changed to add further clarity.
For example: We studied medicine together at the same college - this means that you have finished studying and you went to the same college while you were studying but you don't go there anymore
Tom and I know us than whave known eachother since we were children been .
Tom and I have known eachother since we were children
The meaning of this sentence is a little unclear. The correction I have made means that you met Tom when you were a child and have known eachother since then.
He is so nice and good(adjective) .
He is nice and (adjective) .
I would use a different adjective instead of good. Good is not an adjective we use often to describe people unless we are saying they are a good (kind, ethical, moral) person, if this is what you are trying to say than leaving good in is fine, otherwise I would try using a different adjective like smart or funny.
When I was sick she to takeok care of of me .
When I was sick he took care of me .
This sentence needs was to show that you were sick in the past. I have changed she to he because he is the male pronoun we use, I presume he would use this pronoun since he is your boyfriend which indicates that he is male.
He cooks for me and, cleans, and watch with mes movies with me.
He cooks for me, cleans, and watches movies with me.
When you list things in English you put commas between the different things in the list and then put and between the last two things on the list.
He is very smart and after the stepenium we are married .
He is very smart and we are married .
If you are Married to Tom than you should say he is your husband not your boyfriend. I am unsure what stepenium is meant to mean in this sentence so I removed it for clarity.
My parents and his parents are good friends and they try gooto be kind.
My parents and his parents are good friends and they try to be kind.
(try good) is unclear in meaning. Try to be kind is most likely the closest thing to what you were trying to say
Tom and I do iIn our free time Tom and I do many things, we hicke in the nature and go surfing ato the beach serving .
In our free time Tom and I do many things, we hike in nature and go surfing at the beach .
But myour dates are onare the best. Tom makeplans wonderful dates with flowers and restaurants .
But our dates are are the best. Tom plans wonderful dates with flowers and restaurants .
The meaning of this sentence is unclear. If you are trying to say that going on dates is better than going to the beach or hiking, than the correction I have made is what you would say.
Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate h. He is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate. He is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
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Great effort. I loved reading your story. If you and Tom are married, than you should call this story My Husband Tom, because that is the word we use once you have been married instead of boyfriend. Amazing work!
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My boyfriend tom is so great.
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We studid together medecine and go to the colloge we live together in a arparment.
We studied This sentence says that you studied (past tense) together but still (present) go to college together, this could be changed to add further clarity. For example: We studied medicine together at the same college - this means that you have finished studying and you went to the same college while you were studying but you don't go there anymore
We Is this the past, or is it now (present)? Past: We went to college, and studied medicine together. We lived together in an apartment. Present: We go to college and study medicine together. We live together in an apartment.
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Tom and I know us than we children been .
Tom and I The meaning of this sentence is a little unclear. The correction I have made means that you met Tom when you were a child and have known eachother since then.
Tom and I I think this is what you were trying to say. If I misunderstood please tell me and I will try again :) |
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He is so nice and good .
He is I would use a different adjective instead of good. Good is not an adjective we use often to describe people unless we are saying they are a good (kind, ethical, moral) person, if this is what you are trying to say than leaving good in is fine, otherwise I would try using a different adjective like smart or funny.
He is so nice and In english, we don't usually use "good" as a description for people without explaining what they are good at. Examples: "He is a good boyfriend" "He is a good cook" |
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When I sick she to take care of of me .
When I was sick This sentence needs was to show that you were sick in the past. I have changed she to he because he is the male pronoun we use, I presume he would use this pronoun since he is your boyfriend which indicates that he is male.
When I was sick I think this is what you were trying to say. If I misunderstood please tell me and I will try again :)
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He cooks for me and clean and watch with me movies .
He cooks for me When you list things in English you put commas between the different things in the list and then put and between the last two things on the list.
He cooks for me
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He is very smart and after the stepenium we are married .
He is very smart and If you are Married to Tom than you should say he is your husband not your boyfriend. I am unsure what stepenium is meant to mean in this sentence so I removed it for clarity.
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My parents and his parents are good friends and they try good.
My parents and his parents are good friends and they try (try good) is unclear in meaning. Try to be kind is most likely the closest thing to what you were trying to say
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Tom and I do in our freetime many things we hick in the nature and go to the beach serving .
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But my dates are on the best Tom make woderful dates with flowers and resturants .
But The meaning of this sentence is unclear. If you are trying to say that going on dates is better than going to the beach or hiking, than the correction I have made is what you would say.
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Once he surprise me with yellow flowers and chocolate he is very a nice guy and I love him so much.
Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate
Once, he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate he is very a nice guy and I love him so much. Once he surprised me with yellow flowers and chocolate he is very a nice guy and I love him so much. |
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